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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer (Family and the Home)
Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It has become increasingly prevalent for young adults to leave home before getting married. In my opinion, this is a positive trend taken as a whole because it fosters independence but it can have rare debilitating financial drawbacks.
The main drawback to moving out early is losing a parental safety net that safeguards financial stability. In large cities such as New York, real estate prices are so high that without a high-paying job you will struggle to contend with rent, food, transportation costs, and allowances for leisure activities. It is even possible that these hardships could prove overwhelming and pride may prevent your from going back to your parents. These individuals might end up taking a job with a low salary or that is not their passion.
The aforementioned drawbacks are the exceptions; the majority of people who move out are successful because they become self-reliant. A standout example of this is the typical American university student. Most students leave their parental home at 18 and never look back. These students take their first baby steps towards looking after themselves by doing their own laundry, managing their finances to an extent, and taking on campus employment. Once they graduate from university they will likely take over their entire financial outlay. This means they must find a good job and spend more responsibly. These qualities, of frugality and responsibility, will serve them well in their lives and increase their odds of future success.
In conclusion, the majority benefit from the added responsibility that leaving home brings. To encourage more people to move out parents should provide a degree of financial support when necessary but focus moreso on fostering their children’s independence.
this is a “Discuss Both Sides’ Essay and you should clearly explain both sides of views BUT in the first paragraph you just disagree with one sides on views whereas you should explain why some people think X and the next paragraph you should explain why other people think Y (and give your opinion)
Thanks Ali! In this essay, I give my opinion in the first paragraph (the introduction) and then discuss both views in the other paragraphs. In the second paragraph I detail the main reason why it is a good idea to stay home (one side) and in the next paragraph why I think it is better to leave home (the other view). Is that clearer to you?
Thank you Dave… you’re right… but isn’t it better to put a sentence like
“some parents claim that staying away from home has some drawbacks…” at the beginning of second paragraph?
Yes, that will make it very clear to the examiner – but the arguments of the paragraph also make it clear. To be safe, you should follow your suggestion – better safe than sorry!
It is even possible that these hardships could prove overwhelming and pride may prevent your from going back to your parents. These individuals might end up taking a job with a low salary or that is not their passion.
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Interesting points, Adam!
It has become common for parents to encourage their children to move out of the ancestral place as they grow older whereas others believe that staying with the family is more pivotal. Although it can be argued that being with one’s family brings security, I personally believe that moving out instills responsibility at a young age.
Advocates of permanently staying with the family point out the importance of security. The early twenties are the prime age for indecisiveness which in recent times has become mostly influenced by social media platforms or friends which can steer youth into either acting out or feeling emotionally reserved. Therefore, this pivotal stage is highly important for families to guide their growing children in better understanding their needs and wants to cultivate them with values and principles and ultimately encompass security needed by youth from their family. As a result, it strengthens bonds and helps youth to prioritize family above other relationships that can become pertinent in adulthood during times of crisis.
Nonetheless, the above mentioned are just a generalization, and moving out increases responsibility in youth. From a youth’s perspective, they have considerably resided at a place for long periods with the same people which increases their level of comforts and stability and restricts their freedom to self-expression and individualism. Once they move out, they are exposed to the nuances of basic living with a budget that is limited from daily expenditure to paying rent and even picking up new survival skills like cooking, laundry, and repair work. Even if they were to share an apartment with roommates, there is a sense of accountability to one another to build an unprejudiced environment with different cultures and personalities compared to being in the comforts of their own home. This nurtures youth to be more receptive and respectful of their privileged background and thereby honing rightful skills for adulthood through this process.
In conclusion, though parents would prefer their children to stay with them, it is important for youth to shape responsibility at a young age when they move out. Parents should, however, be in touch with their children if they move out in order to maintain the family bond.
Great work!
Careful with paraphrasing and changing to a word that doesn’t quite fit an try to balance your paragraphs a little better.
Really nice hypothetical example in the 3rd paragraph – especially love all the little details about chores at home!