This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of road safety and the minimum legal age for driving from the real IELTS exam.
I wrote about this same question when it came up on IELTS more than a year ago but I figure I would write about it again to see if my thinking has changed at all…
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IELTS Essay: Road Safety
Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many concerned policy makers today believe that raising the legal age for acquiring a license would improve road safety. In my opinion, though this might engender a negligible impact, there are superior solutions.
Proponents of this policy reform argue that a disproportionate number of accidents today are caused by younger people. In most countries, it is possible to apply for a learner’s permit at the age of 16 and soon after that a license. Teenagers often lack the maturity and experience required to drive responsibly and respond to challenging road conditions such as inclement weather and reckless drivers. If the legal age for driving was increased it would enable young people to spend more time learning the rules of the road and becoming more mature generally. This would presumably lead to a reduction in accidents, though there is little scientific evidence to support this particular hypothesis.
In fact, the causes of collisions are more closely correlated with other underlying problems. The chief cause of vehicular accidents globally relate to driving under the influence of alcohol. Most teenagers are not able to purchase alcohol legally and therefore the majority of accidents are caused by individuals over the legal age for drinking. This statistic is also more prominent among older individuals whose reflexes are in decline. Furthermore, altering the designs of towns and cities would have far greater tangible ramifications. Many urban environments, for example, were built long ago and more modern understandings of motorist behaviour could be beneficial. This might include emphasising subways and other public transport as opposed to motorways.
In conclusion, despite the marginal relationship between maturity and vehicular accidents, the most effective reforms would involve stricter drinking laws and better urban planning. These changes would be more likely to bring about the desired improvements.
Analysis
1. Many concerned policy makers today believe that raising the legal age for acquiring a license would improve road safety. 2. In my opinion, though this might engender a negligible impact, there are superior solutions.
- Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
- Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Proponents of this policy reform argue that a disproportionate number of accidents today are caused by younger people. 2. In most countries, it is possible to apply for a learner’s permit at the age of 16 and soon after that a license. 3. Teenagers often lack the maturity and experience required to drive responsibly and respond to challenging road conditions such as inclement weather and reckless drivers. 4. If the legal age for driving was increased it would enable young people to spend more time learning the rules of the road and becoming more mature generally. 5. This would presumably lead to a reduction in accidents, though there is little scientific evidence to support this particular hypothesis.
- Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
- Explain your main idea.
- Develop it with specific examples.
- Keep developing it fully.
- Stay focused on the same main idea.
1. In fact, the causes of collisions are more closely correlated with other underlying problems. 2. The chief cause of vehicular accidents globally relate to driving under the influence of alcohol. 3. Most teenagers are not able to purchase alcohol legally and therefore the majority of accidents are caused by individuals over the legal age for drinking. 4. This statistic is also more prominent among older individuals whose reflexes are in decline. 5. Furthermore, altering the designs of towns and cities would have far greater tangible ramifications. 6. Many urban environments, for example, were built long ago and more modern understandings of motorist behaviour could be beneficial. 7. This might include emphasising subways and other public transport as opposed to motorways.
- Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
- Explain your new main idea.
- Include specific details and examples.
- Continue developing it…
- as fully as possible!
- Any extra statement of the result will help.
- The specific examples here are key.
1. In conclusion, despite the marginal relationship between maturity and vehicular accidents, the most effective reforms would involve stricter drinking laws and better urban planning. 2. These changes would be more likely to bring about the desired improvements.
- Summarise your main ideas.
- Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean? Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
Many concerned policy makers today believe that raising the legal age for acquiring a license would improve road safety. In my opinion, though this might engender a negligible impact, there are superior solutions.
Proponents of this policy reform argue that a disproportionate number of accidents today are caused by younger people. In most countries, it is possible to apply for a learner’s permit at the age of 16 and soon after that a license. Teenagers often lack the maturity and experience required to drive responsibly and respond to challenging road conditions such as inclement weather and reckless drivers. If the legal age for driving was increased it would enable young people to spend more time learning the rules of the road and becoming more mature generally. This would presumably lead to a reduction in accidents, though there is little scientific evidence to support this particular hypothesis.
In fact, the causes of collisions are more closely correlated with other underlying problems. The chief cause of vehicular accidents globally relate to driving under the influence of alcohol. Most teenagers are not able to purchase alcohol legally and therefore the majority of accidents are caused by individuals over the legal age for drinking. This statistic is also more prominent among older individuals whose reflexes are in decline. Furthermore, altering the designs of towns and cities would have far greater tangible ramifications. Many urban environments, for example, were built long ago and more modern understandings of motorist behaviour could be beneficial. This might include emphasising subways and other public transport as opposed to motorways.
In conclusion, despite the marginal relationship between maturity and vehicular accidents, the most effective reforms would involve stricter drinking laws and better urban planning. These changes would be more likely to bring about the desired improvements.
Answers
concerned policy makers worried authorities
raising the legal age for acquiring a license increasing how old before you can drive
road safety how many accidents on the road
engender create
negligible impact marginal effect
superior solutions better remedies
proponents supporters
policy reform changes to the laws
disproportionate unequal
apply for a learner’s permit get a certificate to drive
license a document that allows you to drive
lack the maturity immature
required needed
drive responsibly drive carefully
respond to deal with
inclement weather bad weather, storms, etc.
reckless drivers dangerous driving
enable allow
rules of the road how you should drive
presumably you can assume
reduction decrease
little scientific evidence no support from studies
support this particular hypothesis evidence this idea
in fact actually
collisions accidents
more closely correlated directly related
underlying problems foundational issues
chief cause main source
globally around the world
under the influence of alcohol drunk
purchase alcohol legally buy drinks, beers, wine, etc.
majority most of
statistic data
prominent stands out
reflexes how you react
in decline decreasing
altering changing
far greater tangible ramifications much bigger results
urban environments cities
modern understandings newer ideas
motorist behaviour how people drive
beneficial helps
emphasising subways focusing on metros
as opposed to in contrast to
motorways highways
marginal small
stricter drinking laws regulations against DUIs
better urban planning improved cities
bring about cause
desired improvements what they want to fix
Pronunciation
Practice saying the vocabulary below and use this tip about Google voice search:
kənˈsɜːnd ˈpɒlɪsi ˈmeɪkəz
ˈreɪzɪŋ ðə ˈliːgəl eɪʤ fɔːr əˈkwaɪərɪŋ ə ˈlaɪsəns
rəʊd ˈseɪfti
ɪnˈʤɛndə
ˈnɛglɪʤəbl ˈɪmpækt
sju(ː)ˈpɪərɪə səˈluːʃənz
prəˈpəʊnənts
ˈpɒlɪsi ˌriːˈfɔːm
ˌdɪsprəˈpɔːʃnɪt
əˈplaɪ fɔːr ə ˈlɜːnəz ˈpɜːmɪt
ˈlaɪsəns
læk ðə məˈtjʊərɪti
rɪˈkwaɪəd
draɪv rɪsˈpɒnsəbli
rɪsˈpɒnd tuː
ɪnˈklɛmənt ˈwɛðə
ˈrɛklɪs ˈdraɪvəz
ɪˈneɪbl
ruːlz ɒv ðə rəʊd
prɪˈzjuːməbli
rɪˈdʌkʃən
ˈlɪtl ˌsaɪənˈtɪfɪk ˈɛvɪdəns
səˈpɔːt ðɪs pəˈtɪkjʊlə haɪˈpɒθɪsɪs
ɪn fækt
kəˈlɪʒənz
mɔː ˈkləʊsli ˈkɒrɪleɪtɪd
ˌʌndəˈlaɪɪŋ ˈprɒbləmz
ʧiːf kɔːz
ˈgləʊbəli
ˈʌndə ði ˈɪnflʊəns ɒv ˈælkəhɒl
ˈpɜːʧəs ˈælkəhɒl ˈliːgəli
məˈʤɒrɪti
stəˈtɪstɪk
ˈprɒmɪnənt
ˈriːflɛksɪz
ɪn dɪˈklaɪn
ˈɔːltərɪŋ
fɑː ˈgreɪtə ˈtænʤəbl ˌræmɪfɪˈkeɪʃənz
ˈɜːbən ɪnˈvaɪərənmənts
ˈmɒdən ˌʌndəˈstændɪŋz
ˈməʊtərɪst bɪˈheɪvjə
ˌbɛnɪˈfɪʃəl
ˈɛmfəsaɪzɪŋ ˈsʌbweɪz
æz əˈpəʊzd tuː
ˈməʊtəˌweɪz
ˈmɑːʤɪnəl
ˈstrɪktə ˈdrɪŋkɪŋ lɔːz
ˈbɛtər ˈɜːbən ˈplænɪŋ
brɪŋ əˈbaʊt
dɪˈzaɪəd ɪmˈpruːvmənts
Vocabulary Practice
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
Many c_________________________s today believe that r__________________________________e would improve r____________y. In my opinion, though this might e__________r a n________________t, there are s_________________s.
P_____________s of this p_____________m argue that a d__________________e number of accidents today are caused by younger people. In most countries, it is possible to a________________________t at the age of 16 and soon after that a l__________e. Teenagers often l_________________y and experience r____________d to d________________y and r____________o challenging road conditions such as i_________________r and r_________________s. If the legal age for driving was increased it would e________e young people to spend more time learning the r________________d and becoming more mature generally. This would p______________y lead to a r___________n in accidents, though there is l______________________e to s______________________________s.
I___________t, the causes of c_____________s are m____________________d with other u_______________________s. The c___________e of vehicular accidents g____________y relate to driving u___________________________l. Most teenagers are not able to p__________________________y and therefore the m___________y of accidents are caused by individuals over the legal age for drinking. This s____________c is also more p____________t among older individuals whose r____________s are i_____________e. Furthermore, a__________g the designs of towns and cities would have f___________________________s. Many u___________________s, for example, were built long ago and more m________________________s of m______________________r could be b______________l. This might include e_____________________s and other public transport a____________________o m_____________s.
In conclusion, despite the m____________l relationship between maturity and vehicular accidents, the most effective reforms would involve s________________________s and b___________________g. These changes would be more likely to b_____________t the d______________________s.
Listening Practice
Learn more about this topic in the video below and practice with these activities:
Reading Practice
Read more about this topic and use these ideas to practice:
https://www.wired.com/story/auto-safety-features-speak-same-language/
Speaking Practice
Practice with the following speaking questions from the real IELTS speaking exam:
Public Transportation
- Do old or young people use public transportation more?
- What are the drawbacks of private vehicles?
- How could public transportation be improved?
- Should city planners consider public transport when designing cities?
- What can the government do to improve public transport outside of urban areas?
Writing Practice
Practice with the same basic topic below and then check with my sample answer:
The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing.
Why is this?
How could this be controlled?
Thank you for your great website!
I think it should be “relates or related” instead of “relate” in this sentence “The chief cause of vehicular accidents globally relate to driving under the influence of alcohol”,
Right?
Thank you!
Present simple is correct there – it could also be ‘are related to’.
Thanku v helpful
You’re welcome, Kiran!