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IELTS Essay: Teenagers
Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence.
Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
Many researchers claim that early childhood experiences are more formative that the later, teenage years. In my opinion, though this may be supported by studies, it makes more sense that adolescence shapes futures the most.
Those who believe in the primacy of the pre-school years can point out the effect of early experiences on neurodevelopment. It has become a common refrain among psychologists that the majority of personality formation is in the first 2 years of life. This stems from the relationship children have with their parents, whether they are shown unconditional love and, conversely, if there is any neglect or abuse present in the household. As the child continues to mature and become aware of their surroundings, societal influences intrude and include gender stereotypes, early friendships, and imitation of one’s parents. By the time a child reaches kindergarten, most of their social and personal identity is, allegedly, fixed.
Despite the valid arguments detailed above, I believe the teenage years are when individuals truly begin to navigate the demands of others against their own personal desires. The key life events that take place in the teenage years include an increase in academic pressure, more nuanced social relationships, increased responsibility at home, and, crucially, the biological changes of puberty. These are the foundation of finding one’s place in the world and managing wants against what is expected of an individual by friends, family, school, and society at large. Some teenagers find a balance early and excel while others struggle for long periods that may last into adulthood. On the whole, these experiences outweigh those accumulated as a young child.
In conclusion, though the childhood years are developmentally important, nothing is a better predictor of the future than the issues that must be resolved as teenagers. It is therefore important that teenagers are given latitude to grow and express themselves.
Analysis
1. Many researchers claim that early childhood experiences are more formative that the later, teenage years. 2. In my opinion, though this may be supported by studies, it makes more sense that adolescence shapes futures the most.
- Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
- Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those who believe in the primacy of the pre-school years can point out the effect of early experiences on neurodevelopment. 2. It has become a common refrain among psychologists that the majority of personality formation is in the first 2 years of life. 3. This stems from the relationship children have with their parents, whether they are shown unconditional love and, conversely, if there is any neglect or abuse present in the household. 4. As the child continues to mature and become aware of their surroundings, societal influences intrude and include gender stereotypes, early friendships, and imitation of one’s parents. 5. By the time a child reaches kindergarten, most of their social and personal identity is, allegedly, fixed.
- Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
- Explain your main idea.
- Develop it.
- Continue developing it.
- Conclude the paragraph by relating it back to the overall question.
1. Despite the valid arguments detailed above, I believe the teenage years are when individuals truly begin to navigate the demands of others against their own personal desires. 2. The key life events that take place in the teenage years include an increase in academic pressure, more nuanced social relationships, increased responsibility at home, and, crucially, the biological changes of puberty. 3. These are the foundation of finding one’s place in the world and managing wants against what is expected of an individual by friends, family, school, and society at large. 4. Some teenagers find a balance early and excel while others struggle for long periods that may last into adulthood. 5. On the whole, these experiences outweigh those accumulated as a young child.
- Write another topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
- Explain your new main idea.
- Use specific details and examples as support.
- Continue to develop it and carry your point into the future.
- Conclude with a strong statement.
1. In conclusion, though the childhood years are developmentally important, nothing is a better predictor of the future than the issues that must be resolved as teenagers. 2. It is therefore important that teenagers are given latitude to grow and express themselves.
- Summarise your main ideas and repeat your opinion.
- Add a final thought/detail. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
Many researchers claim that early childhood experiences are more formative that the later, teenage years. In my opinion, though this may be supported by studies, it makes more sense that adolescence shapes futures the most.
Those who believe in the primacy of the pre-school years can point out the effect of early experiences on neurodevelopment. It has become a common refrain among psychologists that the majority of personality formation is in the first 2 years of life. This stems from the relationship children have with their parents, whether they are shown unconditional love and, conversely, if there is any neglect or abuse present in the household. As the child continues to mature and become aware of their surroundings, societal influences intrude and include gender stereotypes, early friendships, and imitation of one’s parents. By the time a child reaches kindergarten, most of their social and personal identity is, allegedly, fixed.
Despite the valid arguments detailed above, I believe the teenage years are when individuals truly begin to navigate the demands of others against their own personal desires. The key life events that take place in the teenage years include an increase in academic pressure, more nuanced social relationships, increased responsibility at home, and, crucially, the biological changes of puberty. These are the foundation of finding one’s place in the world and managing wants against what is expected of an individual by friends, family, school, and society at large. Some teenagers find a balance early and excel while others struggle for long periods that may last into adulthood. On the whole, these experiences outweigh those accumulated as a young child.
In conclusion, though the childhood years are developmentally important, nothing is a better predictor of the future than the issues that must be resolved as teenagers. It is therefore important that teenagers are given latitude to grow and express themselves.
Answers
claim argue
early childhood experiences when kids
more formative shape you more
supported by studies research indicates
makes more sense more logical
adolescence teenage years
shapes futures the most influences later life a lot
primacy of the pre-school years key importance of the years before starting school
point out argue about
neurodevelopment how the brain grows/changes
common refrain often said
majority most of
personality formation identity
stems from comes from
shown unconditional love like without any strings/conditions
conversely in contrast
neglect not pay attention to
abuse present in the household being hurt in your home
mature grow up
aware of their surroundings know about what is around them
societal influences intrude people around interfere
include gender stereotypes boy/girl social beliefs
early friendships friends as kids
imitation copy
by the time at the point
social and personal identity how you are in public and to yourself
allegedly supposedly
fixed unchanging
despite the valid arguments detailed above regardless of the good points made before
truly actually
navigate the demands get through the expectations
against their own personal desires in contrast to what you really want
key life events life events
take place happen
academic pressure stress from school
nuanced social relationships complex interrelations with others
increased responsibility at home have to do more at home
crucially very importantly
biological changes of puberty how the body changes as a teenager
foundation of finding one’s place in the world basis of knowing where you want to be in life
managing wants against what is expected of an individual balancing desires against work, family, friends, etc.
society at large friends, work, family, etc.
find a balance early learn early on how to manage
excel get better
struggle fight with
long periods a lot of time
last into adulthood continue as you get older
on the whole generally
outweigh stronger than
accumulated add up
developmentally important important milestones in growing up
better predictor of the future paves the way for later life
resolved as teenagers fixed in adolescence
given latitude allowed freedom
express themselves act freely
Pronunciation
kleɪm
ˈɜːli ˈʧaɪldhʊd ɪksˈpɪərɪənsɪz
mɔː ˈfɔːmətɪv
səˈpɔːtɪd baɪ ˈstʌdiz
meɪks mɔː sɛns
ˌædəʊˈlɛsns
ʃeɪps ˈfjuːʧəz ðə məʊst
ˈpraɪməsi ɒv ðə priː-skuːl jɪəz
pɔɪnt aʊt
ˈnjʊərəʊˌdɪˈvɛləpmənt
ˈkɒmən rɪˈfreɪn
məˈʤɒrɪti
ˌpɜːsəˈnælɪti fɔːˈmeɪʃən
stɛmz frɒm
ʃəʊn ˌʌnkənˈdɪʃənl lʌv
ˈkɒnvɜːsli
nɪˈglɛkt
əˈbjuːsˈprɛznt ɪn ðə ˈhaʊshəʊld
məˈtjʊə
əˈweər ɒv ðeə səˈraʊndɪŋz
səˈsaɪətl ˈɪnflʊənsɪz ɪnˈtruːd
ɪnˈkluːd ˈʤɛndə ˈstɪərɪətaɪps
ˈɜːli ˈfrɛndʃɪps
ˌɪmɪˈteɪʃən
baɪ ðə taɪm
ˈsəʊʃəl ænd ˈpɜːsnl aɪˈdɛntɪti
əˈlɛʤdli
fɪkst
dɪsˈpaɪt ðə ˈvælɪd ˈɑːgjʊmənts ˈdiːteɪld əˈbʌv
ˈtruːli
ˈnævɪgeɪt ðə dɪˈmɑːndz
əˈgɛnst ðeər əʊn ˈpɜːsnl dɪˈzaɪəz
kiː laɪf ɪˈvɛnts
teɪk pleɪs
ˌækəˈdɛmɪk ˈprɛʃə
nju(ː)ˈɑːnst ˈsəʊʃəl rɪˈleɪʃənʃɪps
ɪnˈkriːst rɪsˌpɒnsəˈbɪlɪti æt həʊm
ˈkruːʃəli
ˌbaɪəʊˈlɒʤɪkəl ˈʧeɪnʤɪz ɒv ˈpjuːbəti
faʊnˈdeɪʃən ɒv ˈfaɪndɪŋ wʌnz pleɪs ɪn ðə wɜːld
ˈmænɪʤɪŋ wɒnts əˈgɛnst wɒt ɪz ɪksˈpɛktɪd ɒv ən ˌɪndɪˈvɪdjʊəl
səˈsaɪəti æt lɑːʤ
faɪnd ə ˈbæləns ˈɜːli
ɪkˈsɛl
ˈstrʌgl
lɒŋ ˈpɪərɪədz
lɑːst ˈɪntuː əˈdʌlthʊd
ɒn ðə həʊl
aʊtˈweɪ
əˈkjuːmjʊleɪtɪd
dɪˌvɛləpˈmɛntli ɪmˈpɔːtənt
ˈbɛtə prɪˈdɪktər ɒv ðə ˈfjuːʧə
rɪˈzɒlvd æz ˈtiːnˌeɪʤəz
ˈgɪvn ˈlætɪtjuːd
ɪksˈprɛs ðəmˈsɛlvz
Vocabulary Practice
Remember and fill in the blanks:
Many researchers c_______m that e____________________________s are m______________________e that the later, teenage years. In my opinion, though this may be s______________________s, it m__________________e that a_______________e s____________________________t.
Those who believe in the p________________________________s can p__________t the effect of early experiences on n____________________t. It has become a c____________________n among psychologists that the m____________y of p__________________________n is in the first 2 years of life. This s___________m the relationship children have with their parents, whether they are s___________________________e and, c______________y, if there is any n__________t or a____________________________d. As the child continues to m__________e and become a_________________________s, s______________________________e and i_______________________s, e__________________________s, and i______________n of one’s parents. B_________________e a child reaches kindergarten, most of their s________________________y is, a______________y, f________d.
D________________________________________e, I believe the teenage years are when individuals t______y begin to n______________________s of others a_____________________________s. The k_______________s that t____________e in the teenage years include an increase in a_________________e, more n_____________________________s, i______________________________e, and, c___________y, the b_____________________________y. These are the f___________________________________________d and m_________________________________________________________l by friends, family, school, and s________________e. Some teenagers f_____________________y and e_______l while others s___________e for l_____________s that may l____________________d. O_______________e, these experiences o____________h those a_______________d as a young child.
In conclusion, though the childhood years are d_________________________t, nothing is a b_____________________________e than the issues that must be r__________________________s. It is therefore important that teenagers are g_____________________e to grow and e____________________s.
Listening Practice
Listen about this topic below and use these ideas to practice:
Reading Practice
Read and practice with the following article using these ideas:
https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/beyond-the-label/201309/babys-first-year-matters
Speaking Practice
Improve your speaking with these real questions from the IELTS speaking exam:
Teenagers
- Is the behaviour of teenagers today better than when you were a teenager?
- When should teenagers start to take on more responsibilities?
- What kinds of responsibilities?
- How have attitudes towards teenagers changed in recent years?
- What can parents do if teenagers are unwilling to take on more responsibility?
Writing Practice
Write about the following related IELTS writing question then check with my sample answer below:
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Many feel that preschool experience plays a bigger role in one’s future life while some others argue adolescence is a more crucial stage of life. In my opinion, adolescence lays the foundation for adult life due to different changes a teenager experiences.
The proponents of the former belief commonly refer to the self-confidence of individuals, mainly established when they are younger than the age of five or six. They argue that this early stage of life is the time when everything is bright and new and any adventure has a durable and strong effect on further stages of life, including adulthood. Those children who do not find the courage to explore the world and are discouraged or constrained by their parents are less likely to express themselves once they are adults. The author of the best seller book entitled How We Live, Hirotade Otatake was born with serious disabilities. In his view, the reason why he was successful was that his parents let him experience the world when he was in his early childhood rather than hiding him at home.
However, I personally believe that adolescence is a more crucial life stage as individuals undergo physical, mental, and emotional changes. Breaking of the voice in teenagers signalizes that a far more complicated page of life is about to turn. Teenagers tend to think differently and would like to have a voice in their life. Adolescents are also said to be more vulnerable than young children as they move outside the confines of their parents, so they begin to feel they are already adults. As they are the parents of tomorrow, they need to have a healthy transition to adulthood, or they are less likely to have a prosperous life.
In conclusion, while the early life stage plays a key role in an individual’s self-confidence in the future life, adolescence seems to have a stronger effect on adulthood as teenagers experience various changes. Parents should pay closer attention to their teenagers who are in turn the parents of the future. (339 words)
Thank you Dave for your time. Didn’t like it myself, though. I think I needed better, stronger words.
PS: yours is awesome (thanks)