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Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking.
Why is this?
What can be done to encourage more walking?
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Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more walking?
In the ancient time a large portion of individuals were engaged with physical exercises and its hardly seen today. Strolling is the vital component for physical exercise which keeps fit and strong. It is well said that health is wealth. When wealth is lost something is lost but when health is lost everything is lost. This essay will discuss various why people have less interest in walking and also proposes some useful approaches to encourage walking.
Despite of the various benefits of walking still individuals have lost interest in walking. Firstly, due to the advent of the latest technologies, people prefer to utilize them. Secondly lack of awareness. Thirdly life style also has changed in recent times and preference of Gyms is on higher demand. Another factor is younger children too much into their studies to compete, adults are occupied with their responsibilities to accomplish targets and promotions, therefore walking is a wastage of time for them. Moreover, poor infrastructure leads to a lack of interest in walking, pollution and mosquitoes also hindrance individuals to go outside of the home for a walk.
However, there are some practical approaches to develop an interest in walking such as mass awareness, good infrastructure facilities in the neighborhood parks like pavement in the park, providing adequate facilities in offices and schools and make it compulsory to spend adequate time in the physical exercise to relax. Make the people aware of the benefits of walking like it burn calories, strengthen heart, boost immune system, lower blood sugar level etc. Government should impose strict guidelines for using private vehicles in the vicinity of home for routine work.
In conclusion, individuals should have to make a regular practice to invest quality time in walking to avoid many uninvited diseases and benefited over the long run.
Great effort, Delhi!
Careful with some of your vocabulary – we don’t really say ‘in the ancient time’ for example.
Try not to use a word twice in a sentence as well.
the ideas in paragraph one are not properly developed.
Why do you say that, Tahereh?
In this modern era, the number of individuals who are engaged in walking is decreasing at an starting pace due to some reasons such as ,lack of
facilities,busy schedule of people.However,this can be tackled by some measures such as introducing public parks and prohibition of private vehicles for short distances.
There are many causes why people are less engaging in walking,but an acute cause is busy lifestyle of people.To elucidate it,most of the people are becoming materialistic and in order to fulfill their needs people spend most of their time on worplaces.Therefore,they do not have time for walking.The another contributing factor is that , people do not have access to facilities realated to exercise. In other words , in most of the rural areas there is lack of proper place for walking which is why they are not able to walk in their leisure time .One perfect example of this is that ,most of my friends from rural area spend their leisure time on social media rather than walking as there is not any kind of public park in their area.
However, this case can be resolved by some solutions,but a long term solution is that government should introduce public parks or pavement areas in rural areas so they can feel motivated in order to go for walk in their free time.An added solution is that, usage of private vehicles should be banned for short distances by government which would result to reduction of pollution.Not only this,but it can also indirectly encourage people to walk to their short distance destinations.Thereby, adopting these solutions people can be encouraged to walk.
In conclusion, although nowadays people are less interested in walking due to less free time and lack of facilities,they can be motivated by providing facilities and by banning use of private vehicles for short distances.