This is an IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample answer from the IELTS Cambridge books and it’s one of the easiest task 1s that I have ever seen on IELTS. But that’s a great opportunity for you to do an amazing job on it!
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To impress the examiner on Task 1 writing, you not only need to describe all the data well but you need to use really strong vocabulary and grammar in a clear structure.
This graph is simple but it is a real challenge to describe it well. Even if you know what you have to do, it is always a challenge to actually do it.
Read on for analysis of what I did with it as well as some vocabulary that you can easily apply to your writing, links and more!
Here are some of my other writing samples for Task 2 and Task 1.
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Dave
IELTS Writing Task 1: Bar Chart Owned and Rented Households (IELTS Cambridge 13) by Dave (former IELTS examiner)
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Cambrdige 13 Writing Task 1: Households England and Wales
The presented bar chart illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation from 1918 to 2011. Overall, owning and renting showed opposite trends with a sharp increase in ownership and a reciprocal decline in the percentage of renters. By the end of the period, overall ownership had overtaken renting by a wide margin.
In 1918, household ownership stood at around 23% compared to rentals, which were at nearly 80%. From that point there was a steady rise in ownership and decline in rentals. Rentals reached 69% in 1939 and held steady until 1953 before falling to 59% in 1961. Ownership rose to 31% in 1939, remained there in 1953 before becoming even with rentals at 50% each in 1971.
This trend continued for both percentages with rentals declining sharply to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Likewise, ownership rose to 60% and 69% in the same years. In 2001, the falling rate of rentals slackened to 31% (69% for ownership) and there was a small rebound that bucked the trend at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses dipping to just over 60%.
Analysis
1. The presented diagram illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation from 1918 to 2011. 2. Overall, owning and renting showed opposite trends with a sharp increase in ownership and a reciprocal decline in the percentage of renters. 3. By the end of the period, overall ownership had overtaken renting by a wide margin.
1. The first sentence simply paraphrases (changes some of the words) from the task question. Don’t waste time on this sentence – write it as fast as your hand will move and the pencil will write without setting the paper on fire!
2. The second sentence is the most important sentence of the whole task, the whole writing test, all of IELTS and your entire life! My general overview covers the main trend (for both categories). You can read more about how to write an overview here.
3. The third sentence finishes my overview. Overviews should only be about 2, maximum 3 sentences, long. Do not mention any specific data or give any opinion/speculation.
1. In 1918, household ownership stood at around 23% compared to rentals, which were at nearly 80%. 2. From that point there was a steady rise in ownership and decline in rentals. 3. Rentals reached 69% in 1939 and held steady until 1953 before falling to 59% in 1961. 4. Ownership rose to 31% in 1939, remained there in 1953 before becoming even with rentals at 50% each in 1971.
1. I start with the logical place – the first year. I compare the rentals and ownership in that year. Every single sentence you write should have some sort of comparision. No exceptions!
2. My second sentence summarises the trend that I will continue to detail.
3. My third sentence gives the specific data and years. Always, always include the year and the key data or you could end up with a 5 for task achievement!
4. My fourth sentence continues the comparision of specific data.
1. This trend continued for both percentages with rentals declining sharply to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. 2. Likewise, ownership rose to 60% and 69% in the same years. 3. In 2001, the falling rate of rentals slackened to 31% (69% for ownership) and there was a small rebound that bucked the trend at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses dipping to just over 60%.
1. My first sentence continues to describe them as ownership overtakes rentals in the middle of the period.
2. The second sentence compares ownership’s data with rentals.
3. My final sentence includes all the data from the graph.
Vocabulary Practice
I put some mistakes into the writing below – can you find and correct the vocabulary mistakes? Some are too informal, others are just incorrect vocabulary…
The described presented bar chart illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation from 1918 to 2011. Overall, owning and renting showed opposites with a sharper increase in ownership and a reflecting decline in the percentage of renters. By the end of all the period, overall ownership had overcome renting by a big margin.
In 1918, household ownership witnessed at around 23% compared to rentals, which were at near 80%. From that point it was a steady jump in ownership and disaster in rentals. Rentals climbed 69% in 1939 and held straight until 1953 before dying to 59% in 1961. Ownership flew upwards to 31% in 1939, stayed put there in 1953 before equal with rentals at 50% each in 1971.
This trend continued for both percentages with rentals very down to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Likewise, ownership rose to 60% and 69% in the same years. In 2001, the ungrowing rate of rentals recovered to 31% (69% for ownership) and there was a upwards that went against at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses going under to way over 60%.
Answers
The presented bar chart illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation from 1918 to 2011. Overall, owning and renting showed opposite trends with a sharp increase in ownership and a reciprocal decline in the percentage of renters. By the end of the period, overall ownership had overtaken renting by a wide margin.
In 1918, household ownership stood at around 23% compared to rentals, which were at nearly 80%. From that point there was a steady rise in ownership and decline in rentals. Rentals reached 69% in 1939 and held steady until 1953 before falling to 59% in 1961. Ownership rose to 31% in 1939, remained there in 1953 before becoming even with rentals at 50% each in 1971.
This trend continued for both percentages with rentals declining sharply to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Likewise, ownership rose to 60% and 69% in the same years. In 2001, the falling rate of rentals slackened to 31% (69% for ownership) and there was a small rebound that bucked the trend at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses dipping to just over 60%.
Vocabulary Definitions
presented: illustrated or shown
opposite trends: reverse movement
sharp increase: increased quickly
reciprocal decline: decreasing in the opposite direction
by the end of the period: at the end of the graph
overtaken: to beat or go in front of or outrank
wide margin: by a lot
stood: were at
nearly: almost
from that point there was: from then on
steady rise: increasing slowly but at the same rate
decline: decrease
reached: were at
held steady: stayed the same
falling: decreasing
rose: increased
remained there: stayed there
becoming even: were level with/equal with
declining sharply: decreasing quickly
falling rate: decreasing trend
slackened: slowed
small rebound: came back up
bucked the trend: reverse the movement/momentum
dipping: decreasing
just over: more than
Grammar Practice
I put some grammar mistakes in it this time – can you find and correct the grammar mistakes? Check your answers with the original answer above.
The presented bar chart illustrating illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation by 1918 to 2011. Overall, owning and renting had showed opposite trends with the sharp increase in ownership and a reciprocal decline in the percentage of renters. By the end of the period, overall ownership has overtaken renting with a wide margin.
In 1918, household ownership stand at around 23% compared to rentals, who were at nearly 80%. From that point there was a steady rise in ownership and decline in rentals. Rentals reaching 69% in 1939 and held steady until 1953 before falls to 59% in 1961. Ownership rose to 31% in 1939, remained there by 1953 before becoming even with the rentals at 50% each at 1971.
This trend continuing for both percentages with rentals decline sharply to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Likewise, ownership rise to 60% and 69% in the same years. In 2001, the falling rate of rentals was slackened to 31% (69% for ownership) and there is a small rebound that bucked the trend at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses has dipping to just over 60%.
Answers
The presented bar chart illustrates percentages of owned and rented English and Welsh accomodation from 1918 to 2011. Overall, owning and renting showed opposite trends with a sharp increase in ownership and a reciprocal decline in the percentage of renters. By the end of the period, overall ownership had overtaken renting by a wide margin.
In 1918, household ownership stood at around 23% compared to rentals which were at nearly 80%. From that point there was a steady rise in ownership and decline in rentals. Rentals reached 69% in 1939 and held steady until 1953 before falling to 59% in 1961. Ownership rose to 31% in 1939, remained there in 1953 before becoming even with rentals at 50% each in 1971.
This trend continued for both percentages with rentals declining sharply to 40% and 31% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Likewise, ownership rose to 60% and 69% in the same years. In 2001, the falling rate of rentals slackened to 31% (69% for ownership) and there was a small rebound that bucked the trend at the end of period with rented houses rising to nearly 40% and owned houses dipping to just over 60%.
Links
Here is my live lesson on task 1 writing overviews from my YouTube channel.
To review about the topic here is a video about ‘Freedom from the Housing Trap.’
You can find some useful images for task 1 writing here on HowtodoIELTS’ Instagram.
Finally, here is a song about a house:
Comment Below:
Do you own a house? Or do you rent?
Kindly take a look at my answer:
The bar chart provides the information about how many percentage of households in owned and rented resident account for respectively in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
The bar chart clearly reveals that the percentage of households in rented accommodation was downward trend, on the other hand households in owned accommodation increased gradually from the same period of the former.
The rate of those people who rent the dwellings begins at about 80% and reached at the bottom of the peak approximately 30% at 2001 with 10% decline per decade from 1961 to 1991 while the rate of residents who have ownership of their house starts at 20% and then it goes up slightly from 1918 to 2001 with 10% up similar to the former.
However both of them have trend against their trend in 2011 before 2001.
To sum up, the way people buy the house changed dramatically during only one century.
Good work again! ‘Experienced a downward trend’ mention the overall leaders not just the trend in your overview!
The data is inaccurate – it does not have stable 10% increases and decreases…
The trends reversed slight at the end (and mention the data there!)
The last sentence is unnecessary and close to an opinion.
The percentage of household in owned and rented are shown in England and Wales in the period from 1918 to 2011. Totally this bar chart presents the rapid growth of owning which occurs between years 1971 to 1991. On the other hand it shows the downward trend in rented accommodation.
According to the given information household rentals were approximately 80% in 1911 while a little of people were landlord. Between years 1918 to 1961 ownership were increased gradually and were the equal percent from 1939 to 1953. This trend continued until 1981 and it went up to the peak in 2001. But in 2011 the number of homeowners declined slightly in comparison with 2001.
Rate of rental was at its highest level in 1918 and it was more than 70%. This chart shows a steady rate from 1939 to 1953. It has a significant decrease from 1971 to 2001. But in 2011 rental has grown compared to 2001.
Hi Hanary, well done! Here are some corrections:
The percentage of owned and rented households, in total, ownership (not owning), the years, while only 20% owned homes, increased (no were), were equal, it peaked in, The rate of rentals, this category showed a steady rate of decline – then include all the data in your last paragraph!
Would it be possible to correct my text?
Thanks in advance
Sure!
Hi, Please kindly check my writing
The bar chart describes the proportion of families who lived in private home and contract home in England and Wales from 1918 until 2011.
It is clear that the proportion of rented house was higher than own possessed house before 1971. After 1971, the percentage of private accommodation was higher than rented house.
On 1918, the number of families possessed their houses just one-fourth of families who lived in contract houses. On two figured years, 1939 and 1953, the percentage of families who lived in rented house almost doubled than families who possessed their houses. Moreover, on 1961, the percentage private accommodations and contract accommodations was approximately 40% and 60% respectively.
Throughout 30 years, from 1981 until 2001, the proportion self-possessed houses dramatically rose compared with contract houses and reached the peak on 1991 and 2001 which almost doubled. Furthermore, on 2011, the percentage of rented accommodations slightly increased in comparison with private houses with 35% and 65% respectively.
Good work Abdul! There are some mistakes. Don’t paraphrase unless if you are totally sure – words like contract homes, possessed, self-possessed homes are incorrect. Otherwise it is very strong though little mistakes with grammar and vocabulary probably keep you in the band 5.5.
thank you Dave for the correction
Hey Dave, are you sure we have to use just simple past tense in this task?
In your opinion this sentence is incorrect? “The percentage of families who have been living in rented houses from 1918 to 2011”
It would be a little strange to say that since it is 2020 now. It is ok to write about any graph in present simple but present perfect continuous gives the impression that it is continuing to today and we don’t have that information.
Thanks
And what about “had been living” in the same sentence?
I’m quite cofuse about used tense in writing task 1, although most of them are in the period before 2020, isn’t written with past perfect
Past perfect continuous is for events in the past that are finished before another event in the past happens such as ‘I had just turned around when I noticed the window was open’
Very kind of you, you made this clear for me.
Could you see Grammar for IELTS by Paullin Cullen, unit 25, the answer of test practice section?
She had used ‘present perfect’ a lot, and it made me confuse.
You’re welcome! Sorry I don’t have that book. What part of present perfect confuses you?
Hello Dave,
Can you kindly take a look at my answer? Thank you so much.
The bar chart demonstrates the households in owned and rented in England and Wales between 1918 to 2011. The two type of household shows the exact opposite pattern in terms of growth; people who own house had been increased, while people who rented a place had been decreased. In 1918, households who owned a place were only slightly over 2%. It was grown to about 30% in 1939 and remained same in 1953. Since then, the number of house owners kept increased and peaked in 2001 at about 70%. It was little bit decreased in 2011 by about 5%. On the other hand, in 1918, households who rented a place were majority in the market with almost 80%. However, the number of renters had been slowly declined and became same as the number of house owners with 50% in 1971. The decrease had not been stopped until 2001 when it reached the lowest percentage of 31%. It recovered little bit to about 36% in 10 years. According to the static, it seems like there was some aspect to affect people to choose to rent a house more then before between 2001 to 2011.
Sure, I’ll take a look!
Here are some corrections:
The bar chart demonstrates households in owned and rented in England and Wales between 1918 to 2011. The two types of household show the exact opposite pattern in terms of growth; people who own houses had increased, while people who rented a place decreased.
In 1918, household owners were only slightly over 2%. It grew to about 30% in 1939 and remained same in 1953. Since then, the number of house owners kept increasing and peaked in 2001 at about 70%. It decreased in 2011 by about 5%. On the other hand, in 1918, households who rented a place were the majority in the market with almost 80%. However, the number of renters slowly declined and became the same as the number of owners with 50% in 1971. The decrease did not stop until 2001 when it reached the lowest percentage of 31%. It recovered a little bit to about 36% in 10 years.
Don’t include opinion or speculation at the end!
Please may you give me some feedback on my writing? Thank you in advance. Please give me an idea of which band it would fall into?
The chart illustrates households in England and Wales from the year 1918 to 2011, in owner and rented accommodation, percentage-wise.
Overall, the percentage of households in owned accommodation had generally increased throughout the time period, with a slight decrease towards the end of the period. On the other hand, households in rented accommodation displayed the opposite trend, which lead to a general decline throughout the years and ended with a rise towards the end of 2011.
The initial percentage of households who were home owners was almost 25% in 1918. In 1939, this figure rose by almost 10%, and then remained unchanged until 1961 were it it was approximately 41%. From there onwards, there was a general increase in the households with owned accommodation, reaching an all time high of almost 70% in 2001, however this value then fell to around 63% in the year 2011.
In 1918, approximately 76% of households were in rented accommodation, far more then those in owned accommodation. However, unlike the value of owned accommodation which began to rise, rented accommodation figures took a sharp decline to approximately 68% in 1936, after which the figure plateaued until 1953. The declining trend continued until 2002, reaching a low point of almost 30%, however in 2012 the value rose to slightly over 35%.
Your writing is really strong and without comparing to make sure the data is correct I would say it is at band 7.5+. What score do you need on your exam?
Hello Dave. First of all, thank you so much for taking time out to reply back to me. I am a newly graduated doctor and plan on giving the PLAB exams for which I require a minimum of band 7 in each section and an overall band of 7.5.
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Hi Dave, Could you please take few minutes to check this answer and let me know, which band am I in ? My exams are in next week. Hope this could help me to improve a lot. Thanking you in advance !
The chart illustrates the amount of households in two accommodation varieties namely, possessed and rented, in United Kingdom and Wales, between the period of 1918 and 2011. Units are displayed as percentages.
Overall, the total number of people who share the same dwelling or meal in both accommodation types seems to be approximately equal. However, the percentage of households belong to the cluster, owned accommodations, has a significant growth for the considered period of years, whereas, the other category shows a noticeable decrement in its statistics. 1971, has a remarkable observation, which denotes that, both groups elucidate an equal number of households, which is 50%.
Firstly, referring to the provided data, 2001 represent the highest number of households which can observe in owned accommodations (approximately 69%) while, the least value holds by the year 1918 (22%). Meantime, from 1953 to 1981, the inclination is considerably rapid than other years, which symbolizes that individuals in both areas were attracting towards owned accommodations.
Secondly, the percentages of each year exhibit a declination, which also means, English and Wales’s people manifest a backward tendency of sharing rented accommodations. The recorded maximum percentage for this category belongs to the year 1918 (roughly 78%) while, the minimum is in 2001 (about 31%).
Finally, in consideration with the gap in the initial year (1918), households in rented type residences were 56% greater than the owned accommodation households’ percentage. With the years passed, this proportion has been gradually reduced and holds an equilibrium in 1971 (50%). Starting from there, households in owned accommodations has grown by surpassing the other class, and indicate a surprising difference (47%) with the percentage value of households in rented places.
Hi DIV,
Your overview is a bit odd so I suggest you work on that more than anything else. Try to just cover the full trend – are they increasing or decreasing. Check the overview in mine – if you don’t nail it perfectly, you will get bacnd 5 for task achievement: http://howtodoielts.com/ielts-writing-task1-band-7-overview/
There are a lot of little mistakes with grammar and the vocabulary makes it very hard to understand at times due to misuse. It is in the range of band 5 at the moment, I’m afraid!
Thank you Dave. I must work more.
Keep up the hard work and you’ll get to your goal I’m sure!
Hi Dave, can use present perfect in this type of task?
Yep!
The bar chart compares the percentages of families that owned or rented the properties they lived in in England and Wales over the period from 1918 to 2011. Looking from an overall perspective, renting households significantly overweighted the owning ones from the beginning. The gap shrank till both parties levelled then enlarged again as the renting group experienced a steady downward trend while owning shewed the opposite.
To start, in 1918 nearly four fifths of British households paid rent. This number decreased substantially over the next few decades and reached a record low at just above 30% in the year of 2001 before climbing slightly to about 37% by the end of the period.
In contrast, households in owned accommodation experienced considerable growth, from accounting for just above one fifth of the overall families in 1918 to matching the other group at 50% in 1971. Figures of owning families continued to grow and almost touched 70% in 2001 before a decline to about 63% in 2011.
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that was great. I liked the last paragraph and I learnt from it. thank you so much.
Great to hear that – you’re welcome!
Hi Dave, can you please take a look at my work and give me a band score?
The above chart demonstrates the respective portion of owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales, from 1918 to 2011. Overall, a significant surge in the percentage of living in owned houses can be observed throughout the period. On the contrary, the fraction of rented households depicted a downward trend during the century.
When it comes to the percentage of people who live in a bought property, the value was slightly over one-fifth in 1918, which was the lowest across the period. After that, it is witnessed that the number rose drastically from one-third in 1939 to its peak value of nearly 70% in 2001. After a decade, it experienced a downward trend to approximately 65%.
A contradictory trend can be observed to the portion of rented accommodations. At the beginning (year 1918), a majority of people, around 75%, rented a house for living instead of buying it. Then, it is noticeable that the percentage fell straightly to 50% in 1971. In short, same portion of people owned or rented a house at that time. It is observed that the value kept decreasing until 2001, which was just over one-third in that year. Finally, it rose slightly to 35% by the end of the period.
In summary, a larger portion of citizens rented a house for living in the past. However, the percentage of owned property overtook that of rented property from 1971 onwards.
Hi Dave,
Could you please check my work.
The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of families who own their houses and the tenants in two different countries from 1918 to 2011. Overall, the percentage of homeowners increased every year except 1952 when it leveled off and in 2011 where it dropped remarkably, whilst rentals were in decline throughout except 1953, when it was a plateau and in 2011 it showed an upward trend.
In 1981, the difference between both the types was quite significant at over 50%, whereas the homeowners rose to 32% but the tenants took a plunge at 68%. Interestingly, in 1953, these figures remained unchanged, but again in 1961, homeownership leaped at over 40% but rentals dropped remarkably at slightly less than 60%.
However, in 1971, both the house types showed a plateau but in 1981, there was an inverse trend, where ownership rose high at 60%, and renting dropped dramatically at 40%. This trend continued for the next two consecutive years and changed at the end when owning slipped down again by almost 5% and renting rebound at over 35%.
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of British house owners and rented accommodations in British and Wales during a period of nearly 10 decades, from 1918 to 2011.
Overall, the proportion of citizens who decided to buy a house experienced an upward trend, while those who rented a house for accommodation followed a clear downward trend until the end of the period, where the proportion turned with a small rebound that bucked the downtrend of renting, although house’s owners remained the major proportion.
Householders were nearly three times as many tenants as owners in 1918. Over two decades, in 1939, the ownership figure rose 10%, rising the British’s confidence to acquire their own houses, as well as dropping nearly 20% the proportion of rented accommodation. A household ownership upward trend remained stable until 1971 where both percentages of renting and owning accounted for a half. From 1981, owned English accommodation continued increasing their participation, where they were nearly 60%, while just 40% represented their counterpart by this year. The owning figure increased before reaching a peak of close to 70% in 2001. From then on, however, it decreased steadily to a level of roughly 65% at the end of period.
Great work, Carol!
Your overview covers everything and the data is accurate.
What score do you want on IELTS?
Thanks Dave for your response. I desire to have at least 7 in the writing module. In the overall result, I require a minimum of 6.5, but no less than 6.0 in all skills.
You’re in good position to aim for those marks, Carol!
Hi Dave! hope you are doing great. I would like you to please have a look at my answer and make corrections where possible. Also please suggest what band score I can get for the stated answer. Thank you!
The bar chart provides information about the rented and owned households accommodation in two countries (England and Wales) from year 1918 to 2011.
Overall, initially the rented household accommodation was approximately four times higher than that of owned household. During the time span, rented accommodation shows a downward trend while that of own household shows an incline in percentage. Both trends also experienced some fluctuations within the time period.
In 1918, the percentage of rented accommodation was around 80% which decreased to almost 70% in 1939. The percentage did not experience any change and remain same for year 1953. It then significantly decreases and becomes equal to the percentage of owned households at exactly 50% in year 1971. Further decline of percentage by 10% in between 1971 and 1981. The trend reaches the lowest point at around 30% in year 1991 and flattens out until 2001. Furthermore, it slightly increases to almost 35% in year 2011.
The lowest point of owned houses was at just above 20% in year 1918. Then slightly increases by almost 10% in between 1918 and 1939. In 1953, the percentage shows the same pattern; however, it then significantly increases and reached 50% in year 1971, where the rented and owned households percentage met the same point. It keeps on following incline trend until year 2001 and reach a highest peak at almost 70%. Decreases marginally by almost 7% in between 2001 and 2011.
Hi Yaseen, good work on it!
There are a lot of small mistakes with referencing, vocabulary, etc. but you describe the data well.
For full feedback and band scores, you can go here: course.howtodoielts.com/band-scores-corrections – it is very affordable!
Hi Dave! Can you look at my answer, please? Also, I would like to know what would be my score.
The provided picture illustrates how many households in owned and rented accommodation there were in England and Whales commencing from 1918 to 2011 in percentage.
Overall, it is evident from the chart that the highest percentage, just over 75, belongs to households in rented accommodation in 1918 while the lowest is households in owned accommodation a little more than 20 percent during the same year. Both household, however, show same rate of precisely 50% in 1971.
The household in rented accommodation in the two countries was barely 70 percent between 1939 and 1953. Then it had decreased by about 20% by 1971 prior to dropping by 10% during the next decade. Since then, it continued falling steadily and reached its lowest point of about 30% in 2001. Within a time span of ten years, households in rented housing had a slight growth of approximately 5%.
In contrast, the data for families that lived in owned accommodation shows gradual growth over the time period by beginning with just about 23%. The rate increased to more or less 30% over next two decades then steadily had jumped to hardly 70% by 2001. In 2011, families in owned housing fell to almost 65%, although it was higher compared to the households in rented accommodation.
Hey, Mino, good work!
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You also need an overview without the data to get above band 5 for task achievement.
Hi! Can you please check my work and give some tips? 🙂 Also my approximate band. Thanks
The bar chart illustrates the percent of homes which were both owned and rented for the time from 1918 to 2011, in England and Wales. Overall, over the first half of the given period, households in rented accommodation dominated over those in owned, while during the second half it all had changed with owned homes superior to rented ones.
In 1918, around 77% of the households were in rented accommodation, whereas only 23% of them were owned. From that year, the percentage of households which were rented had gradually decreased until 1971, whilst the percent of homes in owned accommodation had had a significant growth by this time. The turning point was the year 1971 when the percentages of both types of households’ accommodation became equal, of exactly 50% counting for each one. From then on, the percent of households in owned accommodation had continued to increase steadily until 2001, in contrast to rented homes’ percent which had fallen by the same year. Then both of the houses’ accommodations had changed their trend between 2001 and 2011, with a small increase in the percentage of rented homes and a slight decline in this of the owned accommodation. Having a final value of nearly 63% of owned homes to approximately 37% going for households in rented accommodation.
Nice job, Niya!
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Your overview is good, careful with tense at times and your linking of the data. Otherwise very strong!
Well explained but its a bar chart not a diagram.Despite writing presented diagram its better to write The given bar chart illustrates …
Ah thank you for noticing that – I will edit it!