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IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Answer: Female Birth Rates (Real IELTS Test)

The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006.

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The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.

Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.

Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.

Analysis

1. The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. 2. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. 3. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.

  1. Your first sentence should simply paraphrase what the graph shows. This sentence is unimportant so write it fast!
  2. This is the most important sentence you will write on all of IELTS. For this kind of graph, include the trend (up/down/stay the same) for all areas and some ranking/speed. Read more about overviews here.

1. Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. 2. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. 3. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.

  1. For this sentence I start to compare younger women. Make sure you have clear paragraphs and compare as much as possible!
  2. The next sentence focuses on the specific data – include ALL the data!
  3. Try to vary up your grammar and vocabulary as much as possible without sounding unnatural.

1. Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. 2. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 3. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. 4. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.

  1. Now compare the other parts of the chart/graph. For this one I now focus on older women.
  2. Keep including all the data, varying your vocabulary and grammar.
  3. You don’t have to include the years each time or it will be too repetitive.
  4. Make sure that you don’t miss out on any of the categories even if they are minor!

Vocabulary

Try to figure out what the words in bold mean based on the sentences:

The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.

Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.

Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.

Answers

presents gives information about

birth rates the number of babies born

later in life as they get older

greatly a lot

looking first of all at firstly

declined decreased

just over a little above

ending finishing

nearly almost

similarly halved also cut in half

finishing ending up

demographic group

fluctuating inconsistent

bracket group

surged increased a lot

generally mirrored largely had the same trend

last position final spot

proportion percentage

made up comprised of

Pronunciation

ˈprɛznts 
bɜːθ reɪts 
ˈleɪtər ɪn laɪf 
ˈgreɪtli
ˈlʊkɪŋ fɜːst ɒv ɔːl æt 
dɪˈklaɪnd 
ʤʌst ˈəʊvə 
ˈɛndɪŋ 
ˈnɪəli 
ˈsɪmɪləli hɑːvd 
ˈfɪnɪʃɪŋ 
ˌdiːməˈgræfɪk 
ˈflʌktjʊeɪtɪŋ 
ˈbrækɪt 
sɜːʤd 
ˈʤɛnərəli ˈmɪrəd 
lɑːst pəˈzɪʃən 
prəˈpɔːʃən 
meɪd ʌp 

Vocabulary Practice

Try to remember the vocabulary:

The given graph ____________ data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, ____________ for younger women fell while the number of women having children ____________ increased ____________. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.

________________________ younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 ____________ over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to ____________ 20% in 1986 and ____________ at ____________ 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group ____________ from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and ____________ at just above 30%.

Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest ____________ in 1966 (37%) before ____________ to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age ____________ increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then ____________ to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds ____________ this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In ____________ throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in ____________ steadily but still ____________ less than 5% of total mothers.

Listening Practice

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Reading Practice

https://family.org.au/the-truth-about-australia-s-birth-rate/

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