This is an IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer from the general training test on the topic of whether or not towns should be building shopping malls or public parks/sports facilities.
The only tricky area is whether or not you need to write about both parks and sports facilities.
I think that they are similar enough that you can group them together.
If you need to learn more about IELTS structures, you can read about them here.
Some people think that it is better to build more public parks and sports facilities in new towns rather than shopping malls.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
Analysis
1. It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. 2. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
Your first sentence should restate the topic for the essay. Simple and clear.
The next sentence must include your opinion. Choose a side and be 100% clear about your opinion.
1. The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. 2. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. 3. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
You should write a topic sentence for both paragraphs. This one contains my single main idea: benefit for the economy.
Your second sentence should begin to develop that main idea with specific examples/ideas. Be as specific as you can!
The third sentence in this paragraph also develops the same main idea. This paragraph is a little bit short – aim for 4 – 5 sentences.
1. Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. 2. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. 3. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. 4. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. 5. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
You should always start the paragraph with a topic sentence. Make it very clear and only include one main idea per paragraph.
After your topic sentence, begin to develop your main idea and be as specific as possible!
Your third sentence should also develop the same main idea.
The fourth sentence continues to develop the main idea. The more specific, the better your vocabulary and cohesion/coherence score will be!
Your last sentence can either summarise or continue to develop. It is better to continue to develop because it will help your task achievement score.
1. In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. 2. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
The first sentence of your conclusion should repeat your opinion. Don’t worry about summarising.
Your final sentence should add an extra detail.Read more about that here.
Vocabulary
It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
Answers
often suggested many advise
erect build
new urban developments new towns/cities
ideal solution best way forward
spur on encourage
health awareness caring about your health
detractors opponents
in favour of rathering
cashiers people who ring up your purchases
store clerks people working in shops
janitorial staff charged cleaners
couple combine
increased revenue more money
taxation taxes
local consumer product market items being sold there
It is __________________ that it would be better to __________________ parks and exercise facilities in __________________ rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an __________________ as it would __________________ increased __________________.
The main reason __________________ are __________________ shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from __________________ to __________________ to managers as well as the various members of __________________ with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you __________________ these factors with the __________________ that businesses bring in the form of __________________ and propping up the __________________.
__________________ the __________________ malls __________________, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon __________________, is __________________ a __________________. However, health has become the __________________ of the decade as __________________ and heart disease has __________________. __________________, beautifully __________________ parks and outdoor exercise facilities would __________________ in residents an __________________ to work out. If they are __________________, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to __________________ them.
In conclusion, the __________________ is less important than the health of __________________ residents. The bigger issue is the __________________ of such an approach given the __________________ for those towns to __________________ the foundations for their residents’ __________________ over __________________.
[G1]Really
great intro – nice to include your overall opinion as well as the main idea for
it – great sentence!
[G2]Good
clear paragraph, the vocabulary is good but nothing special
[G3]Also
good, it could be a bit more specific and detailed to fully support your
reasons. If people life far from parks, especially in poorer neighborhoods
where children need the exercise the most, they are unlikely to have the time
or ability to get there. Or focus as well on older people who need exercise but
are unlikely to have the desire or ability to travel far.
Most agree that we should be training children to recycle waste to preserve the Earth’s natural resources. However, some believe that it is parents who should teach their children to recycle waste while others feels schools are more responsible.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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The general sentiment in most quarters is that recycling is an integral part of combatting climate change and most debate now circles around whether parents or teachers should be most responsible. In my opinion, schools reach the largest number of children overall.
Many believe that instilling values is a parental right. Parents have the basic right to influence their children according to their own beliefs. For example, a Muslim living in a Christian country will likely still follow many Islamic traditions. Even if the child learns implicitly or explicitly about Judeo-Christian tenets in school, the parents have a right to raise their child in the manner they think is most culturally fitting. This also applies to recycling, though it is hardly a matter of subjective belief to most informed citizens today.
Despite the rare potential parents who may be against recycling, schools should be where recycling is taught because government mandates will reach all children. There is simply no way to legislate every single family to make their children recycle but this can be easily enacted in schools. A good example of this would be in Japan where school children take an active role in cleaning and separating their own rubbish for recycling. Not only does this make a huge difference in it of itself but it is also a nationally comprehensive approach to fostering life-long environmentally conscious habits across an entire generation.
In conclusion, schools are more likely to have a larger impact on recycling habits and therefore this is their responsibility. Governments ought to make recycling one of their top educational priorities in the future as part of a cohesive plan to better the environment.
Analysis
1. The general sentiment in most quarters is that recycling is an integral part of combatting climate change and most debate now circles around whether parents or teachers should be most responsible. 2. In my opinion, schools reach the largest number of children overall.
The first sentence simply paraphrases the main topic. Don’t waste too much time making this sentence perfect.
You should write a clear opinion for a second sentence. My opinion here isn’t 100% clear but that is ok because I will make it clearer in my conclusion.
1. Many believe that instilling values is a parental right. 2. Parents have the basic right to influence their children according to their own beliefs. 3. For example, a Muslim living in a Christian country will likely still follow many Islamic traditions. 4. Even if the child learns implicitly or explicitly about Judeo-Christian tenets in school, the parents have a right to raise their child in the manner they think is most culturally fitting. 5. This also applies to recycling, though it is hardly a matter of subjective belief to most informed citizens today.
For you first sentence, write a simple clear topic sentence with your main idea for the whole paragraph.
My second sentence explains my main idea. You might not always need this sentence if your main idea is obvious.
The next sentence should begin an example focused on that main idea. Focus on just 1 main idea, just 1 example, fully developed.
My fourth sentence develops the example.
The last sentence extends the example to the topic of the essay to make a clear connection.
1. Despite the rare potential parents who may be against recycling, schools should be where recycling is taught because government mandates will reach all children. 2. There is simply no way to legislate every single family to make their children recycle but this can be easily enacted in schools. 3. A good example of this would be in Japan where school children take an active role in cleaning and separating their own rubbish for recycling. 4. Not only does this make a huge difference in it of itself but it is also a nationally comprehensive approach to fostering life-long environmentally conscious habits across an entire generation.
My first sentence is another topic sentence. A bit longer this time but still with a single main idea.
The second sentence develops the main idea.
My third sentence begins a specific example. These are the centerpieces of your writing.
The last sentence conludes the paragraph and my example.
1. In conclusion, schools are more likely to have a larger impact on recycling habits and therefore this is their responsibility. 2. Governments ought to make recycling one of their top educational priorities in the future as part of a cohesive plan to better the environment.
In my conclusion, I make my opinion crystal clear.
Add in an extra detail or final thought at the end of your essay – it is important – don’t forget it!
Vocabulary
Try to figure out what the words in bold mean. If you’re not sure, use the context of the sentence and paragraph to work it out!
The general sentiment in most quarters is that recycling is an integral part of combatting climate change and most debate now circles around whether parents or teachers should be most responsible. In my opinion, schools reach the largest number of children overall.
Many believe that instilling values is a parental right. Parents have the basic right to influence their children according to their own beliefs. For example, a Muslim living in a Christian country will likely still follow many Islamic traditions. Even if the child learns implicitly or explicitly about Judeo-Christian tenets in school, the parents have a right to raise their child in the manner they think is most culturally fitting. This also applies to recycling, though it is hardly a matter of subjective belief to most informed citizens today.
Despite the rare potential parents who may be against recycling, schools should be where recycling is taught because government mandates will reach all children. There is simply no way to legislate every single family to make their children recycle but this can be easily enacted in schools. A good example of this would be in Japan where school children take an active role in cleaning and separating their own rubbish for recycling. Not only does this make a huge difference in it of itself but it is also a nationally comprehensive approach to fostering life-long environmentally conscious habits across an entire generation.
In conclusion, schools are more likely to have a larger impact on recycling habits and therefore this is their responsibility. Governments ought to make recycling one of their top educational priorities in the future as part of a cohesive plan to better the environment.
Answers
general sentiment opinion of most people
most quarters the majority of people
integral part important element
circles around surrounds
reach decide on
instilling values enforcing beliefs
parental right parents should be able to
Islamic traditions values from Muslims
implicitly not overtly
explicitly overtly
Judeo-Christian tenets values from the Bible
manner way
culturally fitting that accords with their culture
hardly barely
subjective belief personal feeling
informed citizens educated voters
against recycling oppose recycling
government mandates proclamations/rules from the government
legislate make laws about
easily enacted simple to create and enforce
take an active role be a big part of
in it of itself just by itself
nationally comprehensive approach way of reaching the whole country
fostering life-long environmentally conscious habits encouraging good habits for their whole life
top educational priorities important educational goals
The __________________ in ___________________ is that recycling is an ___________________ of combatting climate change and most debate now ___________________ whether parents or teachers should be most responsible. In my opinion, schools ___________________ the largest number of children overall.
Many believe that ___________________ is a ___________________. Parents have the basic right to influence their children according to their own beliefs. For example, a Muslim living in a Christian country will likely still follow many ___________________. Even if the child learns ___________________ or ___________________ about ___________________ in school, the parents have a right to raise their child in the ___________________ they think is most ___________________. This also applies to recycling, though it is ___________________ a matter of ___________________ to most ___________________ today.
Despite the rare potential parents who may be ___________________, schools should be where recycling is taught because ___________________ will reach all children. There is simply no way to ___________________ every single family to make their children recycle but this can be ___________________ in schools. A good example of this would be in Japan where school children___________________ in cleaning and separating their own rubbish for recycling. Not only does this make a huge difference ___________________ but it is also a ___________________ to___________________ across an entire generation.
In conclusion, schools are more likely to have a larger impact on recycling habits and therefore this is their responsibility. Governments ought to make recycling one of their ___________________ in the future as part of a ___________________ to ___________________ the environment.
Listening Practice
Watch this video to see the example that I wrote about in the third paragraph:
This would also be band 6.5. Lots of
good accurate vocabulary and grammar but nothing too remarkable. The arguments
are good and well supported and it is clear. To get to band 7 you need better
more detailed examples and more natural vocabulary.
Dave
[A1]In
this essay, I will examiner both sides of the argument and then present my own
opinion.
[A2]Awkward
phrasing better to say ‘there are reasons why it is better for parents to …’
Students should be primarily taught academic subjects so that they can pass exams, and practical skills such as cooking should not be taught.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Many educators today feel pressure to teach to the test and emphasise academic subjects over more practical ones. In my opinion, this approach is overtly short-sighted and practical skills play an important role in a well-rounded education.
Those who support a singular focus on academics can point to its tangible outcome in higher test scores. A good example of this would be accelerating academic progress at inner city schools. There have been numerous reforms in the last several decades to help the poorest performing districts catch up. The results have been uneven at times but overall more students from impoverished or troubled backgrounds can now go to college, often being the first person in their family to do so. Passing exams has the very real benefit of giving them opportunities outside of menial work and, in the most extreme cases, crime.
Though there might be a case for overemphasis on academics in select districts, learning practical skills is an important part of becoming an all around person. Those who possess certain skills, such as a sharp memory and logical thinking, will perform better in academics like math and physics. This means that these skills are rewarded and may become over-developed at the expense of skills related to practical work such as spatial thinking and multi-tasking. Graduates who know how to please their teachers and get good grades in academic subjects will find themselves lacking in real world skills. Adding in practical skills goes a long way towards making this a reality.
In conclusion, the argument for academics only applies to niche segments of society and learning practical skills has tremendous benefits. Schools should find ways to balance both despite external pressure from the government and parents for the reductive measure of higher marks.
Word count: 293
Analysis
1. Many educators today feel pressure to teach to the test and emphasise academic subjects over more practical ones. 2. In my opinion, this approach is overtly short-sighted and practical skills play an important role in a well-rounded education.
The first sentence restates the overall topic of the entire essay.
My second sentence gives my opinion. Always state your opinion clearly, never sit in the middle!
1. Those who support a singular focus on academics can point to its tangible outcome in higher test scores. 2. A good example of this would be accelerating academic progress at inner city schools. 3. There have been numerous reforms in the last several decades to help the poorest performing districts catch up. 4. The results have been uneven at times but overall more students from impoverished or troubled backgrounds can now go to college, often being the first person in their family to do so. 5. Passing exams has the very real benefit of giving them opportunities outside of menial work and, in the most extreme cases, crime.
This is a topic sentence that has my main idea for the whole paragraph.
My second sentence begins my example – don’t waste any time – get right to your example as fast as possible!
The third sentence develops the example. The whole paragraph will be developing this single example.
My fourth sentence also develops the example with more specific detail.
The fiffth sentence summarises my point and further develops the same example.
1. Though there might be a case for overemphasis on academics in select districts, learning practical skills is an important part of becoming an all around person. 2. Those who possess certain skills, such as a sharp memory and logical thinking, will perform better in academics like math and physics. 3. This means that these skills are rewarded and may become over-developed at the expense of skills related to practical work such as spatial thinking and multi-tasking. 4. Graduates who know how to please their teachers and get good grades in academic subjects will find themselves lacking in real world skills. 5. Adding in practical skills goes a long way towards making this a reality.
The next paragraph also begins with a topic sentence with a new main idea: practical skills help people become more well rounded.
My second sentence begins a specific, detailed example.
The third sentence continues to develop this example – be as specific as you can!
My fourth sentence adds more specific detail.
The last sentence ties this back to the importance of practical skills.
1. In conclusion, the argument for academics only applies to niche segments of society and learning practical skills has tremendous benefits. 2. Schools should find ways to balance both despite external pressure from the government and parents for the reductive measure of higher marks.
The first sentence of my conclusion repeats my opinion – be simple and clear!
My final sentence adds an extra detail that many examiners will require for band 7+ for task achievement.
Vocabulary
Try to figure out what the words in bold mean. If you’re not sure, use the context of the sentence and paragraph to work it out!
Many educators today feel pressure to teach to the test and emphasise academic subjects over more practical ones. In my opinion, this approach is overtly short-sighted and practical skills play an important role in a well-rounded education.
Those who support a singular focus on academics can point to its tangible outcome in higher test scores. A good example of this would be accelerating academic progress at inner city schools. There have been numerous reforms in the last several decades to help the poorest performing districts catch up. The results have been uneven at times but overall more students from impoverished or troubled backgrounds can now go to college, often being the first person in their family to do so. Passing exams has the very real benefit of giving them opportunities outside of menial work and, in the most extreme cases, crime.
Though there might be a case for overemphasis on academics in select districts, learning practical skills is an important part of becoming an all around person. Those who possess certain skills, such as a sharp memory and logical thinking, will perform better in academics like math and physics. This means that these skills are rewarded and may become over-developedat the expense of skills related to practical work such as spatial thinking and multi-tasking. Graduates who know how to please their teachers and get good grades in academic subjects will find themselves lacking in real world skills. Adding in practical skills goes a long way towards making this a reality.
In conclusion, the argument for academics only applies to niche segments of society and learning practical skills has tremendous benefits. Schools should find ways to balance both despite external pressure from the government and parents for the reductive measure of higher marks.
Answers
educators teachers
teach to the test focus on exams
overtly short-sighted not a long-term vision
play an important role an important part in
well-rounded education wide range of knowledge
singular focus driven, with blinders on
point reference
tangible outcome clear result
accelerating getting faster
inner city schools poor, urban schools
reforms changes
poorest performing districts schools doing badly
catch up get up to date
uneven at times inconsistent
troubled backgrounds difficult history/home life
very real benefit clear positive
menial work physical work
most extreme cases outliers
overemphasis too much focus on
select districts some neighborhoods
all around everywhere
sharp memory never forgets
logical thinking rational thinking
perform better get better marks
rewarded receive something good
over-developed too much skill at
at the expense of negelecting
spatial thinking thinking about objects and physical space
Many ________________ today feel pressure to ________________ and emphasise academic subjects over more practical ones. In my opinion, this approach is ________________ and practical skills ________________ in a________________.
Those who support a ________________ on academics can ________________ to its ________________ in higher test scores. A good example of this would be ________________ academic progress at________________. There have been numerous ________________ in the last several decades to help the ________________. The results have been________________ but overall more students from impoverished or ________________ can now go to college, often being the first person in their family to do so. Passing exams has the ________________ of giving them opportunities outside of ________________ and, in the________________, crime.
Though there might be a case for ________________ on academics in ________________, learning practical skills is an important part of becoming an ________________ person. Those who possess certain skills, such as a ________________ and ________________, will ________________ in academics like math and physics. This means that these skills are ________________ and may become ________________ skills related to practical work such as ________________ and ________________. Graduates who know how to ________________ their teachers and get good grades in academic subjects will find themselves ________________ in real world skills. ________________ practical skills ________________________________.
In conclusion, the argument for academics only applies to ________________ of society and learning practical skills has tremendous benefits. Schools should find ways to ________________ both despite ________________ from the government and parents for the ________________ of higher marks.
Listen and check:
Listening Practice
Use the video below to practice your listening skills. Here are some ideas for how to practice.
[G1]Yes, technically it is ok to sit in the middle in this way – but why do it? It is very risky and there are some examiners you will get a band 5 for this possibly! Just choose a side!
[G9]Extra
sentence require for band 7+ for task achievement
[G10]There
is no opinion here – this is why it is a mistake to sit in the middle as you
did in the introduction. The introduction was fine, technically. The conclusion
is not and most examiners will lean band 5 or 6 for TA – definitely not band 7
despite all your support for your ideas.
[G11]Word count is 422 words – way too long and unrealistic so it is very difficult to mark…
Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Many feel that education is the best way to tackle hunger while others feel that immediate food aid is a better solution. As far as I’m concerned, education is clearly the better long-term remedy.
Many charities are active in food aid efforts because of its clear impact in emergency situations. A good example of this would be famines in a sub-Saharan African nations. These are caused by unpredictable weather conditions and coupled with governmental instability can result in mass malnutrition and even death. It is impossible to deal with the sources of these famines over time but food aid addresses its symptoms and keeps actual people alive now. The tangible results of this kind of aid are the strongest arguments in its favour.
Although the above mentioned methods are appropriate in emergencies, they do little to disrupt the underlying causes of hunger. If people are better educated then they can get better jobs and hunger disappears as a problem. There may be other relevant economic realities, such as the unemployment rate, that need addressing but education will still go a long way to eradicating hunger. Education can also help in regions that are prone to hunger as farmers will be able to develop better agricultural methods. Simply put, if citizens have good jobs, there is little real threat of hunger even under exceptional circumstances.
In conclusion, although food aid has its use, I feel education is a clearly better option. Governments ought to divert more resources into education to see world hunger ended over the course of the next century.
Analysis
1. Many feel that education is the best way to tackle hunger while others feel that immediate food aid is a better solution. 2. As far as I’m concerned, education is clearly the better long-term remedy.
The first sentence of your essay should paragraphs the topic. Just change some words and write this sentence quickly.
Give your opinion – always!
1. Many charities are active in food aid efforts because of its clear impact in emergency situations. 2. A good example of this would be famines in a sub-Saharan African nations. 3. These are caused by unpredictable weather conditions and coupled with governmental instability can result in mass malnutrition and even death. 4. It is impossible to deal with the sources of these famines over time but food aid addresses its symptoms and keeps actual people alive now. 5. The tangible results of this kind of aid are the strongest arguments in its favour.
Write clear, simple topic sentences that have your main idea at the end of the sentence.
Begin your examples as quickly as possible and develop them for the entire paragraph.
Keep developing your examples with specific details.
Continue to develop the same main idea – don’t switch to a new main idea!
Conclude your paragraph (this is optional).
1. Although the above mentioned methods are appropriate in emergencies, they do little to disrupt the underlying causes of hunger. 2. If people are better educated then they can get better jobs and hunger disappears as a problem. 3. There may be other relevant economic realities, such as the unemployment rate, that need addressing but education will still go a long way to eradicating hunger. 4. Education can also help in regions that are prone to hunger as farmers will be able to develop better agricultural methods. 5. Simply put, if citizens have good jobs, there is little real threat of hunger even under exceptional circumstances.
Write another simple topic sentence for your next paragraph.
As in the last paragraph, develop the same main idea.
Add more and more specific detail to really bump up your task achievement score and use high level vocabulary.
Keep developing the same main idea.
Conclude your paragraph.
1. In conclusion, although food aid has its use, I feel education is a clearly better option. 2. Governments ought to divert more resources into education to see world hunger ended over the course of the next century.
Summarise your opinion.
Add in an extra detail.
Vocabulary
Many feel that education is the best way to tackle hunger while others feel that immediate food aid is a better solution. As far as I’m concerned, education is clearly the better long-term remedy.
Many charities are active in food aid efforts because of its clear impact in emergency situations. A good example of this would be famines in a sub-Saharan African nations. These are caused by unpredictable weather conditions and coupled with governmental instability can result in mass malnutrition and even death. It is impossible to deal with the sources of these famines over time but food aid addresses its symptoms and keeps actual people alive now. The tangible results of this kind of aid are the strongest arguments in its favour.
Although the above mentioned methods are appropriate in emergencies, they do little to disrupt the underlying causes of hunger. If people are better educated then they can get better jobs and hunger disappears as a problem. There may be other relevant economic realities, such as the unemployment rate, that need addressing but education will still go a long way to eradicating hunger. Education can also help in regions that are prone to hunger as farmers will be able to develop better agricultural methods. Simply put, if citizens have good jobs, there is little real threat of hunger even under exceptional circumstances.
In conclusion, although food aid has its use, I feel education is a clearly better option. Governments ought to divert more resources into education to see world hunger ended over the course of the next century.
Answers
tackle hunger fight hunger
immediate food aid food for an emergency
as far as I’m concerned in my opinion
long-term remedy solution that will last
active not passive
food aid efforts working to fight hunger
emergency situations something that need tackling right away
famines massive hunger
sub-Saharan African nations countries in Africa below the Sahara
unpredictable weather conditions hard to predict weather
coupled combined with
governmental instability changing governments
mass malnutrition lots of hunger
addresses its symptoms solves the problem
tangible results clear outcome
strongest arguments in its favour best reasons to support
appropriate well suited
disrupt undermine
underlying causes real sources
relevant economic realities economic facts
unemployment rate number of people without jobs
addressing resolving
go a long way help to
eradicating hunger getting rid of hunger
prone to hunger likely to go hungry
simply put said simply
little real threat not much of chance of it happening
under exceptional circumstances difficult time
divert take away from
over the course of the next century in the next 100 years
Many feel that education is the best way to __________________ while others feel that __________________ is a better solution. __________________ , education is clearly the better __________________ .
Many charities are __________________ in __________________ because of its clear impact in __________________ . A good example of this would be __________________ in a __________________ . These are caused by __________________ and __________________ with __________________ can result in __________________ and even death. It is impossible to deal with the sources of these famines over time but food aid __________________and keeps actual people alive now. The __________________ of this kind of aid are the __________________ .
Although the above mentioned methods are __________________ in emergencies, they do little to __________________ the __________________ of hunger. If people are better educated then they can get better jobs and hunger disappears as a problem. There may be other __________________ , such as the __________________ , that need __________________ but education will still __________________ to __________________ . Education can also help in regions that are __________________ as farmers will be able to develop better agricultural methods. __________________ , if citizens have good jobs, there is __________________ of hunger even __________________ .
In conclusion, although food aid has its use, I feel education is a clearly better option. Governments ought to __________________ more resources into education to see world hunger ended __________________ .
There are two main solutions to solve
hunger worldwide: boosting the education and suppor with ting by food
aid. In my opinion, both ways are necessary but we should concentrate more on
education than food aid for better long-term results.
Food aid is an immediate solution for
hunger to help people avoid starvation, such asespecially
after a natural disaster. For example, every year in the middle provinces(regions)
of Vietnam, floods are the root cause which makes people
losing their home, their crops, their animals, etc…and so on.
Governments need to organize many assistancet
programmes to provide food, water, clothes, daily stuffsgoods,
and medicines
for people to be alive; andas well as later
to rebuild their lives.
In another perspectiveOn the other
hand, education may help to improve people’s’
mindsets. Hunger often mainly comes fromaffects
poor people, who do not work effectivelymay have
trouble finding good work. To be more specific, ethnic minorities
in the highlands of Vietnam often struggle in having enough food for the whole
family. Mostly,
thereThere is usually only one
member of the family who usually is manual labor worker. They do not earn a lot
of money because they have low literacy so , it
is not easy for them to learn new techniquesskills, which cannot
help them to become securea
steady long-term employment. The other members of the family may do some
agriculture work but they are far behind modern science, so they cannot harvest
products which are good in quality and quantity.
Although I concede that food aid has its
benefits, I strongly believe that education is of greater importance in this
matter. Governments must haveshould develop
specific policiesy to encourage
education from primary school to college or university, which
provides
people a solid foundation for building happy lives by their owns.
The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The pie charts compare water usage in San Diego County and California as a whole to worldwide figures. Looking from an overall perspective it is readily apparent that while in San Diego and California the majority of water was used for homes (followed by industry and agriculture), worldwide use focused overwhelmingly on agriculture over industry and finally residential use.
Water usage in San Diego County and California displayed broadly similar patterns. In San Diego, 60% of water was used by households, compared to 39% for all of California. The sector with the second most usage for San Diego and California was industrial with 23% and 33%, respectively. In the final position was agricultural usage at 17% (San Diego) and 28% (California).
In contrast, worldwide usage was dominated by agriculture at 69%, followed by industry and residential at 23% and 8% in turn.
Words: 143
Analysis
1. The pie charts compare water usage in San Diego County and California as a whole to worldwide figures. 2. Looking from an overall perspective it is readily apparent that while in San Diego and California the majority of water was used for homes (followed by industry and agriculture), worldwide use focused overwhelmingly on agriculture over industry and finally residential use.
The first sentence simply paraphrases the sentence above the graph. Don’t waste time making this sentence perfect, it isn’t that important compared to other sentences in your writing.
My next sentence is the general overview and it is the most important sentence in all of your task 1 writing. It must include the trend, speed and ranking for all charts to get above band 6 for task achievement (learn more about overviews here).
1. Water usage in San Diego County and California displayed broadly similar patterns. 2. In San Diego, 60% of water was used by households, compared to 39% for all of California. 3. The sector with the second most usage for San Diego and California was industrial with 23% and 33%, respectively. 4. In the final position was agricultural usage at 17% (San Diego) and 28% (California).
The first sentence is a topic sentence comparing San Diego and California in general. You don’t always need topic sentences for task 1 writing but they do help your cohesion and coherence score.
My second sentence begins to compare and describe the data. Always compare, always include the data.
The next sentence continues to the compare the data.
The final sentence finishes the comparison and data. Include all the data.
1. In contrast, worldwide usage was dominated by agriculture at 69%, followed by industry and residential at 23% and 8% in turn.
This last sentence includes all the data for the final pie chart. It is ok to have a one sentence paragraph if you can include all the data in a single sentence.
Words: 143
(You should write between 150 and 200 but technically anything over 141 is fine).
Vocabulary
Try to write a synonym or think of a definition for the words in bold below:
The pie charts compare water usage in San Diego County and California as a whole to worldwide figures. Looking from an overall perspective it is readily apparent that while in San Diego and California the majority of water was used for homes (followed by industry and agriculture), worldwide use focused overwhelmingly on agriculture over industry and finally residential use.
Water usage in San Diego County and California displayed broadly similar patterns. In San Diego, 60% of water was used by households, compared to 39% for all of California. The sector with the second most usage for San Diego and California was industrial with 23% and 33%, respectively. In the final position was agricultural usage at 17% (San Diego) and 28% (California).
In contrast, worldwide usage was dominated by agriculture at 69%, followed by industry and residential at 23% and 8% in turn.
Answers
as a whole taken all together
figures numbers
looking from an overall perspective it is readily apparent that in general
majority most of
overwhelmingly strongly
displayed broadly similar patterns almost the same trend
The pie charts compare water usage in San Diego County and California __________________ to worldwide __________________. __________________while in San Diego and California the __________________ of water was used for homes (followed by industry and agriculture), worldwide use focused __________________ on agriculture over industry and finally residential use.
Water usage in San Diego County and California __________________. In San Diego, 60% of water was used by households, compared to 39% for all of California. The __________________ with the second most usage for San Diego and California was industrial with 23% and 33%, respectively. In the final position was agricultural usage at 17% (San Diego) and 28% (California).
__________________, worldwide usage was __________________ by agriculture at 69%, followed by industry and residential at 23% and 8% __________________.
Listen and check:
Listening Practice
Watch the video below to review about the topic in general. It may come up on other parts of IELTS so it makes sense to put in some extra practice now.
Read the corrections on a student sample below to get some idea of your own score.
The pie charts demonstrate how much water is consumed in for the purposes of residential, industrialy and agricultural purposese in San Diego County, California, and throughout the world.
It can be clearly seen that while residential
water consumption of residential in San Diego and
California was the highest, at 60% and 39 % respectively, water used in
homes which is used across the globe is the
least, atonly stood at 8%. In contrast, the
opposite trend can be witnessed in the domain of aAgriculture,
which
makes up the highest percentage at 69% of water
worldwide is used for this purpose, but it
accounts for only 17% and 28 % of water usage in San Diego and
California.
Regarding industrial usey,
there are
no massive changes in the usage of water[G2]the
disparity between the charts is smaller. The same proportions are
seen in the water consumption of industry in San Diego and around the world, with the
figure being twenty three percent(23%), but it
occupies the higher percentage at 33% in California.while the
number for California is slightly higher at 33%.
[G1]The
overview must touch on all areas if possible. There is no mention at all of
industry and agriculture in san diego and California so it is a maximum band 5
for task achievement.
[G2]This
graph does not show change at all – just disparity
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