This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer related to the topic of female rates from the real past test.
You can find all the most recent questions from the test for writing hereand for speaking here.
This graph was drawn by a student and posted on Facebook – but it accurately reflects the real question from the test.
The most important detail is that this graph shows change over time and that impacts both your general overview and the vocabulary that you will use in your sample answer.
The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006.
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The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.
Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.
Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.
Analysis
1. The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. 2. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. 3. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.
Your first sentence should simply paraphrase what the graph shows. This sentence is unimportant so write it fast!
This is the most important sentence you will write on all of IELTS. For this kind of graph, include the trend (up/down/stay the same) for all areas and some ranking/speed. Read more about overviews here.
1. Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. 2. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. 3. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.
For this sentence I start to compare younger women. Make sure you have clear paragraphs and compare as much as possible!
The next sentence focuses on the specific data – include ALL the data!
Try to vary up your grammar and vocabulary as much as possible without sounding unnatural.
1. Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. 2. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 3. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. 4. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.
Now compare the other parts of the chart/graph. For this one I now focus on older women.
Keep including all the data, varying your vocabulary and grammar.
You don’t have to include the years each time or it will be too repetitive.
Make sure that you don’t miss out on any of the categories even if they are minor!
Vocabulary
Try to figure out what the words in bold mean based on the sentences:
The given graph presents data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, birth rates for younger women fell while the number of women having children later in life increased greatly. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.
Looking first of all at younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 declined over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to just over 20% in 1986 and ending at nearly 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group similarly halved from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and finishing at just above 30%.
Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest demographic in 1966 (37%) before fluctuating to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age bracket increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then surged to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds generally mirrored this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In last position throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in proportion steadily but still made up less than 5% of total mothers.
The given graph ____________ data comparing the ages when women in Australia gave birth in the years 1966, 1986, and 2006. Overall, ____________ for younger women fell while the number of women having children ____________ increased ____________. Women aged 30-34 became the largest group and those with the fewest children were under 19 and over 40.
________________________ younger women, both those under 19 and between 20 and 24 ____________ over the period. The first group started at around 33% in 1966 before falling to ____________ 20% in 1986 and ____________ at ____________ 15% in 2006. The 20 to 24 group ____________ from over 60% in 1966 (leading all ages then) to under 40% in 1986 and ____________ at just above 30%.
Mothers aged 25 – 30 were the second highest ____________ in 1966 (37%) before ____________ to over 50% and back down to 42% by 2006. Women in the 30-34 age ____________ increased more steadily from 12% to 19% and then ____________ to become the leader at 47%. 34 – 39 year olds ____________ this climb rising from 7% to 12% to 29%. In ____________ throughout was women aged 40+ who increased in ____________ steadily but still ____________ less than 5% of total mothers.
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I want to make some simple suggestions for how you can use these recent graphs to practice.
To be honest, students get too obsessed with the most recent questions.
You can practice with a question from years ago and a question from yesterday – it makes absolutely no difference.
What makes an actual difference is how you study.
Here is what I recommend:
Practice writing about a graph in 20 minutes, in test conditions.
This is your ability. Now, check it by underlining the vocabulary, grammar, data. Are there many grammar mistakes? Do you use the same words over and over? Do you include all the data?
Now that you know your weaknesses, you can also sign up to have them marked by me here.
Write about another one focusing on your mistakes. Don’t worry about timing. Take as long as you need to make it perfect.
Repeat this process over and over until your start to notice your writing improving.
This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of television from the real IELTS test.
I took the question in an interesting direction by focusing on television in terms of how it is streamed online and not actually watched on a physical TV.
It is a little risky so let me know what you think of it in the comments!
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer: Television (Real IELTS Test)
Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time being active or creative.
What is the reason for this?
What measures should be taken to encourage children to be more active?
Today children spend more time watching television than at any point in the past. The reason for this is the development of online streaming websites and parents should eschew smartphones to curb this trend towards passivity.
The main reason that many children today spend an outsized amount of time watching television is that it is widely available on streaming websites. YouTube was the earliest, and now the most popular, streaming website for video content. Children are often allowed to watch it on smartphones or iPads. The more recent rise of streaming websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as television on the internet. Simply put, children spend more time watching because they have the ability to choose whatever show they want, pause it, and binge watch TV shows on a variety of portable devices with limited adult supervision.
In order to discourage children from watching television, parents should not give their children smartphones under any circumstances. This is the first step that responsible parents must undertake. Once children are no longer tempted by phones, it is much easier to get them interested in creative outlets. Parents can sign up their children for art or music lessons. They could encourage them to do art at home and instead of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and art supplies. Children’s natural curiosity and artistic energy will naturally take over from that point and parents then need only supervise, guide and intervene when called upon.
In conclusion, parents can counterbalance the rise of streaming by banning portable devices and stocking up on art supplies. Unfortunately, it will take a concerted effort from the majority of parents to prevent children without devices from being ostracised socially.
Analysis
1. Today children spend more time watching television than at any point in the past. 2. The reason for this is the development of online streaming websites and parents should eschew smartphones to curb this trend towards passivity.
Your first sentence should simply restate the topic for the essay – write it quickly and simply.
For the second sentence, answer the two questions clearly. You will repeat this again in the conclusion.
1. The main reason that many children today spend an outsized amount of time watching television is that it is widely available on streaming websites. 2. YouTube was the earliest, and now the most popular, streaming website for video content. 3. Children are often allowed to watch it on smartphones or iPads. 4. The more recent rise of streaming websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as television on the internet. 5. Simply put, children spend more time watching because they have the ability to choose whatever show they want, pause it, and binge watch TV shows on a variety of portable devices with limited adult supervision.
Your first sentence should be a topic sentence that clearly states your main idea. Read more about topic sentences here.
In the next sentence, I begin to talk about YouTube. Start your examples quickly and make them as specific as you can.
Your third sentence should keep develop the same example. Don’t introduce a new main idea or a second example.
The fourth sentence also develops the same example with more specific detail. Be specific!
My fifth sentence also develops the same example. Develop, develop, develop!
1. In order to discourage children from watching television, parents should not give their children smartphones under any circumstances. 2. This is the first step that responsible parents must undertake. 3. Once children are no longer tempted by phones, it is much easier to get them interested in creative outlets. 4. Parents can sign up their children for art or music lessons. 5. They could encourage them to do art at home and instead of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and art supplies. 6. Children’s natural curiosity and artistic energy will naturally take over from that point and parents then need only supervise, guide and intervene when called upon.
Just like the last paragraph, this first sentence is a topic sentence with the main idea for this paragraph. In this essay the first paragraph describes the reason and the second one describes my solution.
My second sentence here explains my main idea. You don’t always need this sentence.
Your third sentence should give specific support through an example or hypothetical situation.
The fourth sentence should continue developing…
The fifth sentence does the same – don’t go off topic – stick the same main idea!
Conclude your paragraph with more support.
1. In conclusion, parents can counterbalance the rise of streaming by banning portable devices and stocking up on art supplies. 2. Unfortunately, it will take a concerted effort from the majority of parents to prevent children without devices from being ostracised socially.
The first sentence of the conclusion should repeat your answer to the two questions asked. If you don’t answer them directly, you will get band 5 for task achievement.
You last sentence should add a final thought/extra detail. Don’t forget to include this sentence.
Vocabulary
Today children spend more time watching television than at any point in the past. The reason for this is the development of online streaming websites and parents should eschew smartphones to curb this trend towards passivity.
The main reason that many children today spend an outsized amount of time watching television is that it is widely available on streaming websites. YouTube was the earliest, and now the most popular, streaming website for video content. Children are often allowed to watch it on smartphones or iPads. The more recent rise of streaming websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as television on the internet. Simply put, children spend more time watching because they have the ability to choose whatever show they want, pause it, and binge watch TV shows on a variety of portable devices with limited adult supervision.
In order to discourage children from watching television, parents should not give their children smartphones under any circumstances. This is the first step that responsible parents must undertake. Once children are no longer tempted by phones, it is much easier to get them interested in creative outlets. Parents can sign up their children for art or music lessons. They could encourage them to do art at home and instead of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and art supplies. Children’s natural curiosity and artistic energy will naturally take over from that point and parents then need only supervise, guide and intervene when called upon.
In conclusion, parents can counterbalance the rise of streaming by banning portable devices and stocking up on art supplies. Unfortunately, it will take a concerted effort from the majority of parents to prevent children without devices from being ostracised socially.
Answers
at any point at any time
online streaming sites like YouTube and Netflix
eschew avoid
curb slow down
passivity not active, lazy
outsized too much importance
video content videos
simply put said in a simple way
binge watch watch multiple episodes in a row
portable devices phones and tablets
limited adult supervision parents not paying attention
Today children spend more time watching television than _______________ in the past. The reason for this is the development of _______________ websites and parents should _______________ smartphones to _______________ this trend towards _______________.
The main reason that many children today spend an _______________ amount of time watching television is that it is widely available on streaming websites. YouTube was the earliest, and now the most popular, streaming website for _______________. Children are often allowed to watch it on smartphones or iPads. The more recent rise of streaming websites like Netflix and Hulu provide the same experience as television on the internet. _______________, children spend more time watching because they have the ability to choose whatever show they want, pause it, and _______________ TV shows on a variety of _______________ with _______________.
In order to _______________ children from watching television, parents should not give their children smartphones _______________. This is the first step that responsible parents must _______________. Once children are no longer _______________ by phones, it is much easier to get them interested in _______________. Parents can sign up their children for art or music lessons. They could encourage them to do art at home and instead of putting a TV in their room, fill it with books and art supplies. Children’s _______________ and _______________ will naturally _______________ from that point and parents then need only _______________, guide and _______________ when _______________.
In conclusion, parents can _______________ the rise of streaming by portable devices and _______________ on art supplies. Unfortunately, it will take a _______________ effort from the majority of parents to prevent children without devices from being _______________.
Listening Practice
Watch the video below and review the ideas/vocabulary from my sample answer:
Reading Practice
Read more about the impact of television on children:
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The advent of social networking sites, mainly Facebook and Instagram, in the early decades of the 21st century have transformed the ways that people interact with their friends and community. I am in complete agreement that they have had a negative overall impact on both individuals and society.
Social networking sites hurt individuals by replacing more active forms of enjoyment with transitory, unhealthy self-esteem boosts. In the past, people were more likely to take up an active hobby such as painting, playing a sport or learning a musical instrument. Over time those hobbies increase self-esteem, provide hours of enjoyment, and can be seen as active and healthy to varying degrees. Facebook and Instagram replace not only the time spent on worthwhile hobbies but users also get stuck in a feedback loop which gives them temporary bursts of dopamine in place of longer lasting feelings of accomplishment.
Just as social media has undoubtedly hurt individuals, it has also taken its toll on society. It is a common refrain to hear older people complaining about how generations today are narcissists, glued to their phones. There is an element of truth in this. Social networking sites, coupled with smartphones, allow people to withdraw and be anonymous in public places. Over time people will come to feel they have less in common with their fellow man and society will become fragmented and more insular with deeply complex political, individual and social consequences.
In conclusion, the rise of social networking platforms has hurt individuals and society greatly. In order to combat this, governments and parents should at least better regulate their availability to children and young teens.
Analysis
1. The advent of social networking sites, mainly Facebook and Instagram, in the early decades of the 21st century have transformed the ways that people interact with their friends and community. 2. I am in complete agreement that they have had a negative overall impact on both individuals and society.
My first sentence gives the topic for the whole essay – keep this sentence short, simple and clear (mine is a bit long because I try to show off with it).
Your second sentence should give your opinion. I chose to agree completely so that I could fully develop my ideas about individuals and society in separate paragraphs – use this structure in your writing!
1. Social networking sites hurt individuals by replacing more active forms of enjoyment with transitory, unhealthy self-esteem boosts. 2. In the past, people were more likely to take up an active hobby such as painting, playing a sport or learning a musical instrument. 3. Over time those hobbies increase self-esteem, provide hours of enjoyment, and can be seen as active and healthy to varying degrees. 4. Facebook and Instagram replace not only the time spent on worthwhile hobbies but users also get stuck in a feedback loop which gives them temporary bursts of dopamine in place of longer lasting feelings of accomplishment.
Your first sentence should be a simple topic sentence containing the topic and your single main idea. Read more about topic sentences here.
For the second sentence begin to develop, not explain, your main idea.
Keep developing it – be as clear, specific and detailed as possible. Notice the strong vocabulary that comes out in my answer because I’m writing very specifically.
Finish developing the main idea for the paragraph. Don’t mention a second main idea!
1. Just as social media has undoubtedly hurt individuals, it has also taken its toll on society. 2. It is a common refrain to hear older people complaining about how generations today are narcissists, glued to their phones. 3. There is an element of truth in this. 4. Social networking sites, coupled with smartphones, allow people to withdraw and be anonymous in public places. 5. Over time people will come to feel they have less in common with their fellow man and society will become fragmented and more insular with deeply complex political, individual and social consequences.
Just like in the last paragraph, simple topic sentence!
Develop this main idea as well – try to show off a bit with your vocabulary like I did.
Vary your sentences – sometimes long and complex, sometimes simple and accurate. Like taking a pause when you talk.
The more nuance and detail the better!
My last sentence concludes the main idea for this paragraph.
1. In conclusion, the rise of social networking platforms has hurt individuals and society greatly. 2. In order to combat this, governments and parents should at least better regulate their availability to children and young teens.
The first sentence of your conclusion should repeat your opinion (and offer some summary).
Your final sentence must add a final detail that many examiners require for band 7+ for task achievement.
Vocabulary
Try to figure out what all the words in bold mean below:
The advent of social networking sites, mainly Facebook and Instagram, in the early decades of the 21st century have transformed the ways that people interact with their friends and community. I am in complete agreement that they have had a negative overall impact on both individuals and society.
Social networking sites hurt individuals by replacing more active forms of enjoyment with transitory, unhealthy self-esteem boosts. In the past, people were more likely to take up an active hobby such as painting, playing a sport or learning a musical instrument. Over time those hobbies increase self-esteem, provide hours of enjoyment, and can be seen as active and healthy to varying degrees. Facebook and Instagram replace not only the time spent on worthwhile hobbies but users also get stuck in a feedback loop which gives them temporary bursts of dopamine in place oflonger lasting feelings of accomplishment.
Just as social media has undoubtedly hurt individuals, it has also taken its toll on society. It is a common refrain to hear older people complaining about how generations today are narcissists, glued to their phones. There is an element of truth in this. Social networking sites, coupled with smartphones, allow people to withdraw and be anonymous in public places. Over time people will come to feel they have less in common with their fellow man and society will become fragmented and more insular with deeply complex political, individual and social consequences.
In conclusion, the rise of social networking platforms has hurt individuals and society greatly. In order to combat this, governments and parents should at least better regulate their availability to children and young teens.
Answers
advent beginning
early decades of the 21st century 2000 – 2020
transformed revolutionised
interact with communicate
complete agreement agree 100%
overall impact total effect
replacing swapping positions with
active forms not passive ways
transitory not lasting
unhealthy self-esteem boosts bad ways to feel good about yourself
active hobby not passive pasttime
increase self-esteem feel better about yourself
varying degrees different levels of
worthwhile hobbies worth spending time on
stuck can’t get out of
feedback loop back and forth relationship
temporary bursts short jolts
dopamine a happy neurochemical
in place oflonger lasting instead of something more permanent
Try to remember and fill in the vocabulary from my sample answer:
The ______________ of social networking sites, mainly Facebook and Instagram, in the______________ have ______________ the ways that people ______________ their friends and community. I am in ______________ that they have had a negative ______________ on both individuals and society.
Social networking sites hurt individuals by ______________ more ______________ of enjoyment with ______________, ______________. In the past, people were more likely to take up an ______________ such as painting, playing a sport or learning a musical instrument. Over time those hobbies ______________, provide hours of enjoyment, and can be seen as active and healthy to ______________. Facebook and Instagram replace not only the time spent on ______________ but users also get ______________ in a ______________ which gives them ______________ of ______________ feelings of accomplishment.
Just as social media has ______________ hurt individuals, it has also ______________ on society. It is a ______________ to hear older people complaining about how generations today are ______________, ______________ to their phones. There is an ______________ in this. Social networking sites, ______________ smartphones, allow people to ______________ and be ______________ in ______________. Over time people will come to feel they have less ______________ their ______________ and society will become ______________ and more ______________ with ______________ political, individual and social ______________.
In conclusion, the rise of social networking platforms has hurt individuals and society greatly. In order to combat this, governments and parents should at least ______________ their ______________ to children and young teens.
This is an IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer from the general training test on the topic of whether or not towns should be building shopping malls or public parks/sports facilities.
The only tricky area is whether or not you need to write about both parks and sports facilities.
I think that they are similar enough that you can group them together.
If you need to learn more about IELTS structures, you can read about them here.
Some people think that it is better to build more public parks and sports facilities in new towns rather than shopping malls.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Real Past IELTS Tests
It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
Analysis
1. It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. 2. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
Your first sentence should restate the topic for the essay. Simple and clear.
The next sentence must include your opinion. Choose a side and be 100% clear about your opinion.
1. The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. 2. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. 3. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
You should write a topic sentence for both paragraphs. This one contains my single main idea: benefit for the economy.
Your second sentence should begin to develop that main idea with specific examples/ideas. Be as specific as you can!
The third sentence in this paragraph also develops the same main idea. This paragraph is a little bit short – aim for 4 – 5 sentences.
1. Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. 2. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. 3. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. 4. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. 5. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
You should always start the paragraph with a topic sentence. Make it very clear and only include one main idea per paragraph.
After your topic sentence, begin to develop your main idea and be as specific as possible!
Your third sentence should also develop the same main idea.
The fourth sentence continues to develop the main idea. The more specific, the better your vocabulary and cohesion/coherence score will be!
Your last sentence can either summarise or continue to develop. It is better to continue to develop because it will help your task achievement score.
1. In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. 2. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
The first sentence of your conclusion should repeat your opinion. Don’t worry about summarising.
Your final sentence should add an extra detail.Read more about that here.
Vocabulary
It is often suggested that it would be better to erect parks and exercise facilities in new urban developments rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an ideal solution as it would spur on increased health awareness.
The main reason detractors are in favour of shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from cashiers to store clerks to managers as well as the various members of janitorial staff charged with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you couple these factors with the increased revenue that businesses bring in the form of taxation and propping up the local consumer product market.
Notwithstanding the economic returns malls bring, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon readily available, is no longer a pressing issue. However, health has become the dominant concern of the decade as obesity soars and heart disease has reached pandemic levels. Well maintained, beautifully landscaped parks and outdoor exercise facilities would instill in residents an obligation to work out. If they are numerous, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to access them.
In conclusion, the job market is less important than the health of ordinary residents. The bigger issue is the feasibility of such an approach given the lack of financial incentive for those towns to prioritise the foundations for their residents’ well-being over business interests.
Answers
often suggested many advise
erect build
new urban developments new towns/cities
ideal solution best way forward
spur on encourage
health awareness caring about your health
detractors opponents
in favour of rathering
cashiers people who ring up your purchases
store clerks people working in shops
janitorial staff charged cleaners
couple combine
increased revenue more money
taxation taxes
local consumer product market items being sold there
It is __________________ that it would be better to __________________ parks and exercise facilities in __________________ rather than shopping malls. I agree that this would be an __________________ as it would __________________ increased __________________.
The main reason __________________ are __________________ shopping malls is their benefit to the economy. Malls employ hundreds of workers from __________________ to __________________ to managers as well as the various members of __________________ with maintaining the mall itself. The benefits are clear when you __________________ these factors with the __________________ that businesses bring in the form of __________________ and propping up the __________________.
__________________ the __________________ malls __________________, parks and sports facilities would do more to encourage better health. In most developed nations, buying more products, especially with online services such as Amazon __________________, is __________________ a __________________. However, health has become the __________________ of the decade as __________________ and heart disease has __________________. __________________, beautifully __________________ parks and outdoor exercise facilities would __________________ in residents an __________________ to work out. If they are __________________, then older people and children, who may not be able to travel far, will also be able to __________________ them.
In conclusion, the __________________ is less important than the health of __________________ residents. The bigger issue is the __________________ of such an approach given the __________________ for those towns to __________________ the foundations for their residents’ __________________ over __________________.
[G1]Really
great intro – nice to include your overall opinion as well as the main idea for
it – great sentence!
[G2]Good
clear paragraph, the vocabulary is good but nothing special
[G3]Also
good, it could be a bit more specific and detailed to fully support your
reasons. If people life far from parks, especially in poorer neighborhoods
where children need the exercise the most, they are unlikely to have the time
or ability to get there. Or focus as well on older people who need exercise but
are unlikely to have the desire or ability to travel far.
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