This is my IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of patriotism from the real IELTS exam.
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IELTS Essay: Patriotism
Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large.
Do the advantages of patriotism outweigh its disadvantages?
Many feel that patriotism has a beneficial impact overall. In my opinion, although there are legitimate reasons to be proud of one’s country, patriotic feelings do generally produce more negatives than positives.
Proponents of patriotism argue it is a natural impulse with tangible benefits. Firstly, a strong sense of patriotism can be motivating. Individuals who have pride in their country are more likely to work hard for the common good. This applies to a variety of positions in society and may include soldiers serving in the military, healthcare workers during times of national emergencies, and even common workers contributing to a flourishing national economy. Secondly, individuals can use investment in their country’s successes to support their own self-esteem. Most people support their country similar to how sports fans root for a team. Success elevates their mood and connects them to a wider community.
However, patriotism is often taken to extremes. This occurs most frequently with vulnerable segments of society. For instance, it is common for military recruiters to target less affluent individuals. If they serve in a war abroad, then there is a strong likelihood they will later suffer from a mental or physical handicap. More generally, most people employ patriotism as a proxy for their own personal achievements. This can be evidenced during the furor surrounding the Olympics every four years. This quintessentially patriotic event costs taxpayers tremendously, inflames tensions between rival countries, and distracts from investing time in personal development. At best, patriotism is a marginal net negative and at worst it can foster an unhealthy dependency.
In conclusion, though patriotism is beneficial economically and in terms of one’s self-esteem at times, the drawbacks related to disassociation are more significant. Mental health should not be dependent on the fortunes of one’s compatriots.
Analysis
1. Many feel that patriotism has a beneficial impact overall. 2. In my opinion, although there are legitimate reasons to be proud of one’s country, patriotic feelings do generally produce more negatives than positives.
- Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
- Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Proponents of patriotism argue it is a natural impulse with tangible benefits. 2. Firstly, a strong sense of patriotism can be motivating. 3. Individuals who have pride in their country are more likely to work hard for the common good. 4. This applies to a variety of positions in society and may include soldiers serving in the military, healthcare workers during times of national emergencies, and even common workers contributing to a flourishing national economy. 5. Secondly, individuals can use investment in their country’s successes to support their own self-esteem. 6. Most people support their country similar to how sports fans root for a team. Success elevates their mood and connects them to a wider community.
- Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
- Explain your main idea.
- Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
- Keep developing it fully.
- Use short and long sentences.
- Finish the paragraph strong.
1. However, patriotism is often taken to extremes. 2. This occurs most frequently with vulnerable segments of society. For instance, it is common for military recruiters to target less affluent individuals. 3. If they serve in a war abroad, then there is a strong likelihood they will later suffer from a mental or physical handicap. 4. More generally, most people employ patriotism as a proxy for their own personal achievements. 5. This can be evidenced during the furor surrounding the Olympics every four years. 6. This quintessentially patriotic event costs taxpayers tremendously, inflames tensions between rival countries, and distracts from investing time in personal development. 7. At best, patriotism is a marginal net negative and at worst it can foster an unhealthy dependency.
- Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
- Explain your new main idea.
- Include specific details and examples.
- Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
- Develop the example fully.
- Make sure you have something really specific.
- Conclude the paragraph.
1. In conclusion, though patriotism is beneficial economically and in terms of one’s self-esteem at times, the drawbacks related to disassociation are more significant. 2. Mental health should not be dependent on the fortunes of one’s compatriots.
- Summarise your main ideas.
- Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean? Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
Many feel that patriotism has a beneficial impact overall. In my opinion, although there are legitimate reasons to be proud of one’s country, patriotic feelings do generally produce more negatives than positives.
Proponents of patriotism argue it is a natural impulse with tangible benefits. Firstly, a strong sense of patriotism can be motivating. Individuals who have pride in their country are more likely to work hard for the common good. This applies to a variety of positions in society and may include soldiers serving in the military, healthcare workers during times of national emergencies, and even common workers contributing to a flourishing national economy. Secondly, individuals can use investment in their country’s successes to support their own self-esteem. Most people support their country similar to how sports fans root for a team. Success elevates their mood and connects them to a wider community.
However, patriotism is often taken to extremes. This occurs most frequently with vulnerable segments of society. For instance, it is common for military recruiters to target less affluent individuals. If they serve in a war abroad, then there is a strong likelihood they will later suffer from a mental or physical handicap. More generally, most people employ patriotism as a proxy for their own personal achievements. This can be evidenced during the furor surrounding the Olympics every four years. This quintessentially patriotic event costs taxpayers tremendously, inflames tensions between rival countries, and distracts from investing time in personal development. At best, patriotism is a marginal net negative and at worst it can foster an unhealthy dependency.
In conclusion, though patriotism is beneficial economically and in terms of one’s self-esteem at times, the drawbacks related to disassociation are more significant. Mental health should not be dependent on the fortunes of one’s compatriots.
Answers
For extra practice, write an antonym (opposite word) on a piece of paper to help you remember the new vocabulary:
patriotism caring a lot and loving and feeling pride for your country
beneficial impact overall good in general
legitimate reasons real justifications
proud feel good about
patriotic feelings emotions of love for your country
generally produce overall create
negatives harmful
positives benefits
proponents people who support
argue point out
natural impulse normal feeling
tangible benefits real help
strong sense big feeling
motivating encouraging
pride love, thinking highly of
work hard for the common good help everyone
applies relates to
variety different kinds
positions jobs
soldiers serving in the military people who fight in wars, the army
healthcare workers doctors and nurses
times of national emergencies when there are big problems
common workers normal people
contributing to adding to
a flourishing national economy the economy doing well
investment caring about
successes doing well
support their own self-esteem help how about they feel about themselves
similar to like
root for support
elevates lifts up
mood feelings
connects puts together with
wider community society
taken to extremes in some instances
occurs most frequently happens a lot
vulnerable segments of society poorer people
military recruiters people looking for soldiers
target less affluent individuals look for poor people
serve be in
war abroad fights in other countries
strong likelihood good chance of
suffer have difficulty
mental or physical handicap bad mental health or out of shape
more generally applying to others
employ patriotism use feelings of pride
proxy substitute
personal achievements what you do yourself
evidenced shown
furor surrounding noise about
quintessentially patriotic definitively patriotic
costs taxpayers tremendously expensive
inflames tensions makes people angry
between rival countries nations competing
distracts takes focus away from
investing time putting time into
personal development growth
marginal net negative overall bad
at worst in the worst cases
economically related to the economy
in terms of concerning
at times sometimes
drawbacks downsides
related to concerning
disassociation feeling distant
significant important
mental health emotionally
dependent on reliant on
fortunes luck
compatriots people from your country
Pronunciation
Practice saying the vocabulary below and use this tip about Google voice search:
ˈpætrɪətɪzm
ˌbɛnɪˈfɪʃəl ˈɪmpækt ˈəʊvərɔːl
lɪˈʤɪtɪmɪt ˈriːznz
praʊd
ˌpætrɪˈɒtɪk ˈfiːlɪŋz
ˈʤɛnərəli ˈprɒdjuːs
ˈnɛgətɪvz
ˈpɒzətɪvz
prəˈpəʊnənts
ˈɑːgjuː
ˈnæʧrəl ˈɪmpʌls
ˈtænʤəbl ˈbɛnɪfɪts
strɒŋ sɛns
ˈməʊtɪveɪtɪŋ
praɪd
wɜːk hɑːd fɔː ðə ˈkɒmən gʊd
əˈplaɪz
vəˈraɪəti
pəˈzɪʃənz
ˈsəʊlʤəz ˈsɜːvɪŋ ɪn ðə ˈmɪlɪtəri
ˈhɛlθkeə ˈwɜːkəz
taɪmz ɒv ˈnæʃənl ɪˈmɜːʤənsiz
ˈkɒmən ˈwɜːkəz
kənˈtrɪbju(ː)tɪŋ tuː
ə ˈflʌrɪʃɪŋ ˈnæʃənl i(ː)ˈkɒnəmi
ɪnˈvɛstmənt
səkˈsɛsɪz
səˈpɔːt ðeər əʊn sɛlf-ɪsˈtiːm
ˈsɪmɪlə tuː
ruːt fɔː
ˈɛlɪveɪts
muːd
kəˈnɛkts
ˈwaɪdə kəˈmjuːnɪti
ˈteɪkən tuː ɪksˈtriːmz
əˈkɜːz məʊst ˈfriːkwəntli
ˈvʌlnərəbl ˈsɛgmənts ɒv səˈsaɪəti
ˈmɪlɪtəri rɪˈkruːtəz
ˈtɑːgɪt lɛs ˈæflʊənt ˌɪndɪˈvɪdjʊəlz
sɜːv
wɔːr əˈbrɔːd
strɒŋ ˈlaɪklɪhʊd
ˈsʌfə
ˈmɛntl ɔː ˈfɪzɪkəl ˈhændɪkæp
mɔː ˈʤɛnərəli
ɪmˈplɔɪ ˈpætrɪətɪzm
ˈprɒksi
ˈpɜːsnl əˈʧiːvmənts
ˈɛvɪdənst
ˈfɜːrə səˈraʊndɪŋ
ˌkwɪntɪˈsɛnʃəli ˌpætrɪˈɒtɪk
kɒsts ˈtæksˌpeɪəz trɪˈmɛndəsli
ɪnˈfleɪmz ˈtɛnʃənz
bɪˈtwiːn ˈraɪvəl ˈkʌntriz
dɪsˈtrækts
ɪnˈvɛstɪŋ taɪm
ˈpɜːsnl dɪˈvɛləpmənt
ˈmɑːʤɪnəl nɛt ˈnɛgətɪv
æt wɜːst ɪt
ˌiːkəˈnɒmɪkəli
ɪn tɜːmz ɒv
æt taɪmz
ˈdrɔːbæks
rɪˈleɪtɪd tuː
dɪs əˌsəʊsɪˈeɪʃ(ə)n
sɪgˈnɪfɪkənt
ˈmɛntl hɛlθ
dɪˈpɛndənt ɒn
ˈfɔːʧənz
kəmˈpætrɪəts
Vocabulary Practice
Many feel that p___________m has a b_____________________l. In my opinion, although there are l_________________s to be p______d of one’s country, p_________________s do g__________________e more n_________s than p_____________s.
P_______________s of patriotism a_____e it is a n________________e with t_________________s. Firstly, a s_______________e of patriotism can be m____________g. Individuals who have p_____e in their country are more likely to w_______________________d. This a__________s to a v_________y of p_________s in society and may include s______________________y, h__________________s during t__________________________s, and even c________________s c__________________o a_________________________y. Secondly, individuals can use i____________t in their country’s s____________s to s____________________m. Most people support their country s______________o how sports fans r_________r a team. Success e_________s their m____d and c__________s them to a w________________y.
However, patriotism is often t__________________s. This o____________________y with v_________________________y. For instance, it is common for m__________________s to t_________________________s. If they s_____e in a w____________d, then there is a s__________________d they will later s______r from a m_____________________p. M______________y, most people e____________________m as a p_____y for their own p____________________s. This can be e____________d during the f____________________g the Olympics every four years. This q_______________________c event c___________________________y, i___________________________________s, and d_________s from i_______________e in p___________________t. At best, patriotism is a m__________________________e and a_________t it can foster an unhealthy dependency.
In conclusion, though patriotism is beneficial e______________y and i______________f one’s self-esteem a_______s, the d____________s r______________o d__________________n are more s_____________t. M______________h should not be d____________________n the f_____________s of one’s c______________s.
Listening Practice
Reading Practice
https://worldpopulationreview.com/country-rankings/most-patriotic-countries
Speaking Practice
Your Home Nation/Country
- Where are you from?
- What do you like the most about your country?
- Where would you like to live in your country?
- Are people in your country patriotic?
Writing Practice
Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity.
Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
Very nice and interesting essay
Introduction:
There has been considerable controversy between the camp of those who think patriotism is generally negative and those who think it serves a greater good in society. From my perspective, the merits of patriotism overshadow any demerits that are associated with being patriotic which I aim to discuss in this essay from a socio-economic standpoint.
Working on my introduction, please kindly help me check it out for improvement. Thanks.
Your take on the subject matter was really good btw
Good intro, I would change the word ‘demerits’ though.
Thanks!