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This is an IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay on the topic of department stores and online stores in Australia from the real IELTS exam.

This one is tricky just because there is not a lot of data so I had to make it wordier to make sure that it was long enough and to be on the safe side!

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IELTS Essay Task 1: Department Stores and Online Stores in Australia

The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Department StoresOnline Stores
Number of Businesses67368
Profit (AUD)807863
Sales Revenue (AUD)12,70013,400
Growth.4%.6%
IELTS Essay: Department Stores and Online Stores in Australia in 2011

The table displays figures for purchase-related data comparing Australian department stores and online stores in 2011. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that online stores were considerably more popular in terms of the number of businesses in operation though profits and revenue were relatively closer together, with online holding a small edge for each. The online stores also experienced meaningfully greater growth.

The number of businesses was overwhelmingly in favor of online stores according to the data at 368 online to just 67 physical locations. However, profit figures in Australian dollars (AUD) presented a more narrow advantage for online retail at $863 and $807 for department stores.

Concerning revenue, online purchases also displayed marginally higher final numbers. Online purchase revenue accounted for $13,400 compared to $12,700 for department locations. Finally, the growth percentage was considerably higher for online (.6%) relative to physical department stores (.4%).

Analysis

1. The table displays figures for purchase-related data comparing Australian department stores and online stores in 2011. 2. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that online stores were considerably more popular in terms of the number of businesses in operation though profits and revenue were relatively closer together, with online holding a small edge for each. 3. The online stores also experienced meaningfully greater growth.

  1. Paraphrase what the process shows.
  2. Write a clear overview summarising the differences.
  3. You might need a second sentence for your overview.

1. The number of businesses was overwhelmingly in favor of online stores according to the data at 368 online to just 67 physical locations. 2. However, profit figures in Australian dollars (AUD) presented a more narrow advantage for online retail at $863 and $807 for department stores.

  1. Begin writing about the data for the first category.
  2. Describe the next area and compare it to the area before.

1. Concerning revenue, online purchases also displayed marginally higher final numbers. 2. Online purchase revenue accounted for $13,400 compared to $12,700 for department locations. 3. Finally, the growth percentage was considerably higher for online (.6%) relative to physical department stores (.4%).

  1. Write about the final other parts of the table – include everything!
  2. Try to paraphrase some words used before as well.
  3. Make sure nothing is missed.

Vocabulary

What do the words in bold below mean? Take some notes on a piece of paper to aid your memory:

The table displays figures for purchase-related data comparing Australian department stores and online stores in 2011. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that online stores were considerably more popular in terms of the number of businesses in operation though profits and revenue were relatively closer together, with online holding a small edge for each. The online stores also experienced meaningfully greater growth.

The number of businesses was overwhelmingly in favor of online stores according to the data at 368 online to just 67 physical locations. However, profit figures in Australian dollars (AUD) presented a more narrow advantage for online retail at $863 and $807 for department stores.

Concerning revenue, online purchases also displayed marginally higher final numbers. Online purchase revenue accounted for $13,400 compared to $12,700 for department locations. Finally, the growth percentage was considerably higher for online (.6%) relative to physical department stores (.4%).

Answers

Try to write down or think of an antonym/opposite word for further practice:

displays figures shows numbers

purchase-related data statistics related to buying stuff

comparing relative to

department stores places where items are sold

online stores websites and apps

Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that overall

considerably more popular much more people doing it

in terms of when it comes to

in operation open

profits money made after expenses deducted

revenue total money earned

relatively compared to

holding a small edge just a little bit more

experienced meaningfully greater growth underwent a lot more increase

overwhelmingly a lot more

in favor of with the other one higher

according to the data concerning the numbers

just only

physical locations actual places

presented shown

narrow advantage a little more

retail items being sold

concerning related to

displayed marginally higher final numbers showing a bit higher data

accounted for occupied

compared to relative to

considerably higher much more

relative to compared to

Pronunciation

Practice saying the words below using this tip with Google voice dictation:

dɪsˈpleɪz ˈfɪgəz 
ˈpɜːʧəs-rɪˈleɪtɪd ˈdeɪtə 
kəmˈpeərɪŋ 
dɪˈpɑːtmənt stɔːz 
ˈɒnˌlaɪn stɔːz 
ˈlʊkɪŋ frɒm ən ˈəʊvərɔːl pəˈspɛktɪv, ɪt ɪz ˈrɛdɪli əˈpærənt ðæt 
kənˈsɪdərəbli mɔː ˈpɒpjʊlə 
ɪn tɜːmz ɒv 
ɪn ˌɒpəˈreɪʃən 
ˈprɒfɪts 
ˈrɛvɪnjuː 
ˈrɛlətɪvli 
ˈhəʊldɪŋ ə smɔːl ɛʤ 
ɪksˈpɪərɪənst ˈmiːnɪŋfʊli ˈgreɪtə grəʊθ
ˌəʊvəˈwɛlmɪŋli 
ɪn ˈfeɪvər ɒv 
əˈkɔːdɪŋ tuː ðə ˈdeɪtə 
ʤʌst 
ˈfɪzɪkəl ləʊˈkeɪʃənz
prɪˈzɛntɪd 
ˈnærəʊ ədˈvɑːntɪʤ 
ˈriːteɪl 
kənˈsɜːnɪŋ 
dɪsˈpleɪd ˈmɑːʤɪnəli ˈhaɪə ˈfaɪnl ˈnʌmbəz
əˈkaʊntɪd fɔː 
kəmˈpeəd tuː 
kənˈsɪdərəbli ˈhaɪə 
ˈrɛlətɪv tuː 

Vocabulary Practice

Remember and fill in the blanks. Note it on a piece of paper so you can remember better:

The table d____________________s for p___________________________________g Australian d____________________s and o_________________s in 2011. L____________________________________________________________t online stores were c_________________________________________f the number of businesses i________________n though p_________s and r__________e were r___________y closer together, with online h_________________________e for each. The online stores also e_________________________________________h.

The number of businesses was o_______________y i________________f online stores a______________________a at 368 online to j______t 67 p____________________s. However, profit figures in Australian dollars (AUD) p_____________d a more n____________________e for online r_______l at $863 and $807 for department stores.

C_____________g revenue, online purchases also d______________________________________s. Online purchase revenue a______________r $13,400 c_______________o $12,700 for department locations. Finally, the growth percentage was c______________________r for online (.6%) r_______________o physical department stores (.4%).

Listening Practice

Listen to the related topic below and practice with these activities:

Reading Practice

Read more and use these ideas to practice:

https://www.news.com.au/finance/business/retail/can-australia-avoid-the-death-of-local-malls/news-story/2194daf845345456b239927d7c6081fd

Speaking Practice

Practice with the following related questions from the real IELTS speaking exam:

Buying

  1. Which item do you buy the most?
  2. Do you care about the price when buying an item?
  3. What was the last thing you bought?
  4. Are good products always expensive?

Writing Practice

Practice with the related line graph below and then check with my sample answer:


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