This sample answer is based on a real IELTS Writing Task 1 question from Jan 2018. But there is so much more in this post than just a sample answer. Aren’t you guys lucky? I’ve also included:
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A quick analysis of the question – check here for more detailed analysis.
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Line by line analysis of the sample answer.
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Useful Vocabulary from the sample answer and links to practice games and exercises.
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Cool topic-related links about all things orangey.
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Question Analysis
Looking at the diagram above, you can see the question focuses on how fresh and reconstituted orange juice is produced. An exciting topic!
If you need more help with analysing this process, check out my recent post on how to identify the kind of process, how to divide the process into its main stages, and how to recognise what is happening at every step.
I suggest making notes on the diagram in the exam, in order to number the steps and divide them logically into main stages. Your question paper should end up looking something like this:
Sample Answer
The diagram illustrates the linear process of producing fresh and concentrated orange juice for the purposes of selling in supermarkets. There are total of 17 steps which can be organised into three main stages. These include producing and delivering fresh orange juice to supermarkets, processing the fresh juice to create concentrated juice for storage, and finally producing reconstituted orange juice which is then sold to the general public.
The process commences with fresh oranges being delivered to a factory, where the raw product is washed and juice is extracted with excess solid waste being used as animal feed. At this point in the process the fresh juice is either delivered in refrigerated trucks for evaporation or packaged and transported to supermarkets for selling to customers. Evaporation is carried out at a separate facility, removing water and resulting in the production of concentrated orange juice, which is subsequently canned and stored in a warehouse. As required, the orange concentrate is then processed in a third and final plant, where it is mixed with water in order to produce reconstituted orange juice, which is then packaged and ultimately delivered to supermarkets.
Analysis
Firstly, it’s important to note that this answer has clear paragraphing.
The first paragraph contains an introductory sentence and the overview. The second paragraph presents the detailed figures.
Although in IELTS Writing Task 1, paragraphing isn’t mentioned in the band descriptors below band 8, it is still a good idea to use paragraphs to organise your writing as it makes it more logical.
This helps the examiner to read your answer, and that is always a good thing!
Paragraph 1: Introduction and Overview
The diagram illustrates the linear process of producing fresh and concentrated orange juice for the purposes of selling in supermarkets. There are total of 17 steps which can be organised into three main stages. These include producing and delivering fresh orange juice to supermarkets, processing the fresh juice to create concentrated juice for storage, and finally producing reconstituted orange juice which is then sold to the general public.
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The first sentence introduces the process, by paraphrasing (not copying) the question.
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The second sentence begins the overview of the process by confirming the number of steps and main stages.
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The third sentence completes the overview by summarising the whole process by identifying the three main stages.
Paragraph 2: Detailed Figures
The process commences with fresh oranges being delivered to a factory, where the raw product is washed and juice is extracted with excess solid waste being used as animal feed. At this point in the process the fresh juice is either delivered in refrigerated trucks for evaporation or packaged and transported to supermarkets for selling to customers. Evaporation is carried out at a separate facility, removing water and resulting in the production of concentrated orange juice, which is subsequently canned and stored in a warehouse. As required, the orange concentrate is then processed in a third and final plant, where it is mixed with water in order to produce reconstituted orange juice, which is then packaged and ultimately delivered to supermarkets.
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The first sentence begins the description of the detail of the process by describing the first six steps.
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The second sentence describes steps 7-10.
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The third sentence describes steps 11-14.
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The fourth sentence completes the detailed description of the process by describing steps 15-17. No conclusion is required for Task 1 writing.
Useful Vocabulary (see Quizlet link below for practice activities)
a diagram (n) – a picture
illustrates (v) – shows
a linear process (n) – a process happening in a line
fresh (adj) – recently picked or prepared
concentrated (adj) – made stronger by removing water
purpose (n) – a reason for doing something
reconstituted (adj) – to add water to something
raw (adJ) – not cooked or processed
extraction (n) – to remove something
excess (n) – too much
solid waste (n) – leftover hard material (not a liquid or gas)
animal feed (n) – food for animals
evaporation (n) – remove water by heating
a facility (n) – a place with a special purpose
packaged (v) – to put in a packet or box for selling
transported (v) – to be moved from one place to another
delivered (v) – to be transported to the end user or customer
subsequently (adv) – after something else happened
a plant (n) – a factory
ultimately (adv) – finally
FREE Online Vocabulary Practice
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Try it out, and use it whenever you have a spare few minutes.
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HI Nick and Dave, I find these are very helpful. By the way, this is my essay. Would you please comment on this including the band level ?
The diagram illustrates the process of producing orange juice. Overall, it is readily apparent that fresh oranges are used as the major ingredient, while water is used in few steps. Meanwhile, two identical processes are explicit in packing and distributing orange juice to the supermarkets.
Looking first, fresh oranges are transported to the factories in aid of trucks, where oranges undergo with a washing procedure and cleansed fruits directly convey to an extraction machine which turns out pure fresh juice. Solid wastes for instance, orange peels are resulted as the by product and these are consumed for animal food in farms. Collected fruit juice are packed in containers (approximately similar for a rectangular box in appearance ) and finally they are dispatched to the supermarkets.
In the second procedure, extracted juice are transferred to a refrigerator truck which delivers them for a particular location, where an evaporating operation (removal of water) takes place. The outcome of this is highly concentrated juice, which consists with a higher ratio of orange extract, contrary to water. These are canned for further consumption and send to a factory via warehouses, to reconstitute with water for diluting intents. Accustomed packaging and distribution for the supermarkets repeats correspondingly as the final step.
Sure!
Your overview needs to define the stages a bit more – see my sample answer.
There are lots of little mistakes with vocabulary and grammar – especially the passive voice. I’d recommend practicing the passive and fixing the mistakes in your essay above then reposting it.
Lots of strong vocabulary though and this essay is in the band 6 range!
Thanks Dave . Thumbs up for your support !
After comparing I realized my overview is poor. Is that the cause for band 6 ?
Partly but there are also a lot of issues with vocabulary and word formation.
Thank you very much Dave !
You’re welcome!
The picture presents the process flow of orange juice production from logistic to final product packaging. Overall orange juice is presented to the market in two version. One is fresh juice which is produced immediately after 6 process step and another which follows couple of more steps than the former one, is concentrated in order to be able to keep it for longer time in warehouse and then process it again to produce orange juice.
In the process route to produce fresh orange juice there are totally six process steps to convert fresh oranges to fresh orange juice. That is after transporting the oranges into the factory they are washed and then entered to extraction machines which press the orange to extract their juice and separate the solid waste material. The waste material then are sent to other processing plants in order to manufacture animal feed and fresh juice is now ready to be packaged and presented to the market.
In the second approach; however, there couple of more process step which are taken in order to keep the orange juice concentrate for the seasons which there are not fresh oranges available. The extra steps include boiling the orange juice in order to remove its water content and make it concentrated. The orange concentrate is then packaged in cans and sent to suitable warehouses. In order to convert them to orange juice they are mixed with water again to produce orange juice. After remixing the concentrate and orange juice, they are then packaged and then comes the logistic which take care of distribution of product the supermarkets.
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Thanks
You’re welcome!
Hi Dave!
Your essay samples have helped me alot in improving my writing these past few days, so thank you for that :). Can you please check my essay and score it?
The diagram above shows the manufacturing process of orange juice.
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the entire procedure of making orange juice is divided into three main industrial stages including the extraction of fresh oranges, evaporation to produce concentrated juice and lastly, rehydration. The final product can either be consumed as a fresh juice or as a canned one.
At the initial stage, the fresh oranges are delivered to the factory and washed before being extracted. At this point in the process, fresh juice, the main product, is packaged and sent to the supermarket whereas solid waste, the by-product, is utilised for the farm feed.
However, in order to manufacture canned juice, the freshly made juice is also transported to the factory for evaporation and concentration before being stored in the warehouse. Next, the processed juice is rehydrated at the factory and made available for use at the supermarket as a packaged product.
You’re welcome, Mo!
Good overview, careful with some fixed expressions (IN the initial stages) – besides that it is really strong!
Thankyou so much! I will keep that in mind.
No problem, Mo!
What score would it get though? So that I can further improve.
Sorry Mo but I just provide scores for the students who sign up on my Patreon.com/howtodoielts!
No problem!
HI Nick and Dave, could u please take a look on my essay and give me some comments for improvement? thanks a lot.
The given process illustrates how to produce orange juice.
Overall, the linear process of making orange juice can be divided in three main stages. Starting with extracting and animal feeding, followed by packaging, and retailing, finally concentrating, rewatering and ready for sell.
To start with, fresh oranges are transported to a factory by a truck. After cleaning the surface of the oranges, those oranges are extracted into solid waste and fresh juice by a machine. In addition, the solid waste is then utilized to feed animal, while the remaining fresh juice are used for selling.
A part of the orange juice is then transported to the supermarket after packaging. Subsequently, some amount of juice is sent to a factory by a refrigerated vehicle. Next, the juice is water-freed after evaporation and form concentrated juice. The follow stage is to pack the processed juice into some cans and send to a warehouse before rewatering in a factory. Ultimately, the orange juice is packed and retailed in the market for customers.