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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer: Health Problems Individuals/Governments (Real IELTS Exam)
Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/her own healthy lifestyle. Others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There has been much recent policy advocacy related to what the proper role of governments in healthcare should be. Although I believe governments have begun to treat this issue with the seriousness it merits, the responsibility for taking care of one’s health should ultimately rest with individuals as they are more likely to stick with habits that they themselves have cultivated.
Those who favour strong governmental intervention often point out the role of the state in forming healthy eating habits through early intervention at public schools. In the United States, the vast majority of students attend state schools and in recent years the government has been implementing new policies aimed at curbing addiction to unhealthy foods. This means that they have reduced the total intake of saturated fats in school lunches and drastically cut down on sugar not only in prepared lunches but also in the ubiquitous vending machines placed around most schools. In the short term this has led to improved health for students but its true effect will be over the next several decades when these children grow up and are more likely to eschew fast food for the healthier alternatives now opening up to meet the growing demands of an increasingly health-conscious nation.
While there are clear benefits to governmental action, individuals are better at regulating their own behaviour in the long-term. People have always found ways to get around rules in order to satisfy their most basic desires, including those related to food. No matter what steps governments take, people will always crave unhealthy, delicious foods as our brains are hardwired to feel pleasure from saturated fats, carbohydrates, and sugar. For example, even a country like France, which has imposed strict rules over the food that children are served, is still facing an obesity crises. Therefore the only way for people to consistently combat poor health is to develop the discipline on their own. Individuals who make the choice to eat healthier are more likely to stick with this habit having worked out the reasons for themselves, rather than simply following a rule imposed by their schools at the behest of the government.
In conclusion, governments have a large role to play in public health but only individuals can take control of their own lives and make decisions that will truly benefit them in the future. In this case, the best solution is simply no solution. Standing back and allowing people to become more self-reliant will not only have more long-lasting effects but will also empower individuals in various other areas of their life to be more responsible.
IELTS Examiner Sample Answer Analysis
1. There has been much recent policy advocacy related to what the proper role of governments in healthcare should be. 2. Although I believe governments have begun to treat this issue with the seriousness it merits, the responsibility for taking care of one’s health should ultimately rest with individuals as they are more likely to stick with habits that they themselves have cultivated.
1. My first sentence quickly states the topic for the essay – spend a lot of time understanding the question correctly but don’t waste time writing this sentence – it isn’t that important!
2. Next is my opinion. State your opinion 100% clearly or you risk getting band 5 for task achievement!
1. Those who favour strong governmental intervention often point out the role of the state in forming healthy eating habits through early intervention at public schools. 2. In the United States, the vast majority of students attend state schools and in recent years the government has been implementing new policies aimed at curbing addiction to unhealthy foods. 3. This means that they have reduced the total intake of saturated fats in school lunches and drastically cut down on sugar not only in prepared lunches but also in the ubiquitous vending machines placed around most schools. 4. In the short term this has led to improved health for students but its true effect will be over the next several decades when these children grow up and are more likely to eschew fast food for the healthier alternatives now opening up to meet the growing demands of an increasingly health-conscious nation.
1. The first sentence is a topic sentence with my main idea for the whole paragraph (governments had a large impact in schools). Write a short, simple topic sentence to make your writing clear to the examiner!
2. My second sentence starts my example. Don’t waste any time – get right to your example and start to develop it for a really high task achievement score.
3. The third sentence continues to develop my example by talking about the specific effects of healthy foods at school.
4. My fourth sentence concludes the examples by further talking about the impact later in life for students who develop healthy eating habits from a young age due to government intervention.
1. While there are clear benefits to governmental action, individuals are better at regulating their own behaviour in the long-term. 2. People have always found ways to get around rules in order to satisfy their most basic desires, including those related to food. 3. No matter what steps governments take, people will always crave unhealthy, delicious foods as our brains are hardwired to feel pleasure from saturated fats, carbohydrates, and sugar. 4. For example, even a country like France, which has imposed strict rules over the food that children are served, is still facing an obesity crises. 5. Therefore the only way for people to consistently combat poor health is to develop the discipline on their own. 6. Individuals who make the choice to eat healthier are more likely to stick with this habit having worked out the reasons for themselves, rather than simply following a rule imposed by their schools at the behest of the government.
1. My first sentence is the topic sentence for this paragraph – again, keep it short, simple and clear as this will help both your cohesion/coherence and task achievement scores!
2. The second sentence begins to develop my main idea by explaining why unhealthy eating is so common.
3. The third sentence develops my idea by giving a counter-example: even with government intervention people still eat unhealthily.
4. My fourth sentence gives a more specific example to support my argument.
5. The fifth sentence suggests that people need to develop their own habits.
6. The sixth sentence argues that people who develop their own habits are more likely to stick to them because they understand the reasoning behind them well.
1. In conclusion, governments have a large role to play in public health but only individuals can take control of their own lives and make decisions that will truly benefit them in the future. 2. In this case, the best solution is simply no solution. 3. Standing back and allowing people to become more self-reliant will not only have more long-lasting effects but will also empower individuals in various other areas of their life to be more responsible.
1. The first sentence repeats my opinion. Be sure to have a clear opinion (choose a side) and say it in both your introduction and conclusion for full task achievement and cohesion/coherence marks.
2. My second sentence adds further support for my opinion.
3. The third sentence adds an extra detail that many examiners require for band 7+ and above for task achievement. You only need 2 sentences in your conclusion – maximum 3!
Sample Answer Vocabulary
What do the words in bold mean? If you’re not sure, don’t use a dictionary – try to figure out the meaning from the whole sentence then check your answers below!
There has been much recent policy advocacy related to what the proper role of governments in healthcare should be. Although I believe governments have begun to treat this issue with the seriousness it merits, the responsibility for taking care of one’s health should ultimately rest with individuals as they are more likely to stick with habits that they themselves have cultivated.
Those who favour strong governmental intervention often point out the role of the state in forming healthy eating habits through early intervention at public schools. In the United States, the vast majority of students attend state schools and in recent years the government has been implementing new policies aimed at curbing addiction to unhealthy foods. This means that they have reduced the total intake of saturated fats in school lunches and drastically cut down on sugar not only in prepared lunches but also in the ubiquitous vending machines placed around most schools. In the short term this has led to improved health for students but its true effect will be over the next several decades when these children grow up and are more likely to eschew fast food for the healthier alternatives now opening up to meet the growing demands of an increasingly health-conscious nation.
While there are clear benefits to governmental action, individuals are better at regulating their own behaviour in the long-term. People have always found ways to get around rules in order to satisfy their most basic desires, including those related to food. No matter what steps governments take, people will always crave unhealthy, delicious foods as our brains are hardwired to feel pleasure from saturated fats, carbohydrates, and sugar. For example, even a country like France, which has imposed strict rules over the food that children are served, is still facing an obesity crises. Therefore the only way for people to consistently combat poor health is to develop the discipline on their own. Individuals who make the choice to eat healthier are more likely to stick with this habit having worked out the reasons for themselves, rather than simply following a rule imposed by their schools at the behest of the government.
In conclusion, governments have a large role to play in public health but only individuals can take control of their own lives and make decisions that will truly benefit them in the future. In this case, the best solution is simply no solution. Standing back and allowing people to become more self-reliant will not only have more long-lasting effects but will also empower individuals in various other areas of their life to be more responsible.
Answers:
policy advocacy: supporting a policy
proper role: what you should be responsible for
the seriousness it merits: how important it really is
ultimately rest: finally must be responsible for
stick with: continue/maintain/keep up
cultivated: grown/made themselves
strong governmental intervention: the government making strong laws/policies
point out: argue/think
early intervention: taking action at an early stage
public schools: state funded schools
vast majority: most
implementing new policies: introducing new laws/rules
curbing: slowing down
total intake: the amount consumed
drastically cut down: decreased a lot
ubiquitous: common/everywhere
short term: not too far in the future
true effect: actual impact
eschew: avoid
healthier alternatives: more healthy options
meet the growing demands: supply the desires of consumers
increasingly health-conscious nation: a country more and more concerned with health
clear benefits: definite advantages
regulating: controlling
long-term: in the distant future
get around rules: avoid mandates
most basic desires: what people desire as humans
no matter what steps governments take: regardless of what governments try to do
crave: desire
hardwired: biologically fixed
imposed strict rules: enact harsh laws
served: given
facing an obesity crises: lots of fat people
consistently combat poor health: often unhealthy
discipline: punish
worked out: figure out
imposed: force
at the behest of the government: at the government’s request
large role: big part in
take control: be in charge
truly benefit: actual positive impact on
standing back: doing nothing
self-reliant: depending on only yourself
long-lasting effects: impact in the future
empower: give power
Pronunciation
ˈpɒlɪsi ˈædvəkəsi
ˈprɒpə rəʊl
ðə ˈsɪərɪəsnɪs ɪt ˈmɛrɪts
ˈʌltɪmɪtli rɛst
stɪk wɪð
ˈkʌltɪveɪtɪd
strɒŋ ˌgʌvənˈmɛntl ˌɪntə(ː)ˈvɛnʃən
pɔɪnt aʊt
ˈɜːli ˌɪntə(ː)ˈvɛnʃən
ˈpʌblɪk skuːlz
vɑːst məˈʤɒrɪti
ˈɪmplɪmɛntɪŋ njuː ˈpɒlɪsiz
ˈkɜːbɪŋ
ˈtəʊtl ˈɪnteɪk
ˈdræstɪk(ə)li kʌt daʊn
ju(ː)ˈbɪkwɪtəs
ʃɔːt tɜːm
truː ɪˈfɛkt
ɪsˈʧuː
ˈhɛlθɪər ɔːlˈtɜːnətɪvz
miːt ðə ˈgrəʊɪŋ dɪˈmɑːndz
ɪnˈkriːsɪŋli hɛlθ–ˈkɒnʃəs ˈneɪʃən
klɪə ˈbɛnɪfɪts
ˈrɛgjʊleɪtɪŋ
ˈlɒŋtɜːm
gɛt əˈraʊnd ruːlz
məʊst ˈbeɪsɪk dɪˈzaɪəz
nəʊ ˈmætə wɒt stɛps ˈgʌvnmənts teɪk
kreɪv
hɑːdˈwaɪəd
ɪmˈpəʊzd strɪkt ruːlz
sɜːvd
ˈfeɪsɪŋ ən əʊˈbiːsɪti ˈkraɪsiːz
kənˈsɪstəntli ˈkɒmbæt pʊə hɛlθ
ˈdɪsɪplɪn
wɜːkt aʊt
ɪmˈpəʊzd
æt ðə bɪˈhɛst ɒv ðə ˈgʌvnmənt
lɑːʤ rəʊl
teɪk kənˈtrəʊl
ˈtruːli ˈbɛnɪfɪt
ˈstændɪŋ bæk
sɛlf–rɪˈlaɪənt
lɒŋ–ˈlɑːstɪŋ ɪˈfɛkts
ɪmˈpaʊə
Vocabulary Practice
Remember and fill in the blanks:
There has been much recent ___________________ related to what the ___________________ of governments in healthcare should be. Although I believe governments have begun to treat this issue with ___________________, the responsibility for taking care of one’s health should ___________________ with individuals as they are more likely to ___________________ habits that they themselves have ___________________.
Those who favour ___________________ often ___________________ the role of the state in forming healthy eating habits through ___________________ at ___________________. In the United States, the ___________________ of students attend state schools and in recent years the government has been ___________________ aimed at ___________________ addiction to unhealthy foods. This means that they have reduced the ___________________ of saturated fats in school lunches and ___________________ on sugar not only in prepared lunches but also in the ___________________ vending machines placed around most schools. In the ___________________ this has led to improved health for students but its ___________________ will be over the next several decades when these children grow up and are more likely to ___________________ fast food for the ___________________ now opening up to ___________________ of an ___________________.
While there are ___________________ to governmental action, individuals are better at ___________________ their own behaviour in the ___________________. People have always found ways to ___________________ in order to satisfy their ___________________, including those related to food. ___________________, people will always ___________________ unhealthy, delicious foods as our brains are ___________________ to feel pleasure from saturated fats, carbohydrates, and sugar. For example, even a country like France, which has ___________________ over the food that children are ___________________, is still ___________________. Therefore the only way for people to ___________________ is to develop the discipline on their own. Individuals who make the choice to eat healthier are more likely to stick with this habit having ___________________ the reasons for themselves, rather than simply following a rule ___________________ by their schools ___________________.
In conclusion, governments have a ___________________ to play in public health but only individuals can ___________________ of their own lives and make decisions that will ___________________ them in the future. In this case, the best solution is simply no solution. ___________________ and allowing people to become more ___________________ will not only have more ___________________ but will also ___________________ individuals in various other areas of their life to be more responsible.
Links from YouTube and Articles
Which Diets Actually Work?
How the Food you Eat Affects your Brain
Myths You Learned in Health Class
Comment below – What are your most unhealthy habits?
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