This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of fathers having time off from work after their children are born from the real IELTS general training exam.
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IELTS Essay: Time Off Work for Fathers
All fathers should be entitled to time-off from work when their children are born.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is becoming increasingly common for fathers to be granted paternity leave upon the birth of a new child. In my opinion, though this has economic ramifications, it is a progressive reform that should be encouraged.
Critics argue that in the aggregate the implications are negative for the economy. Most companies already account for maternity leave in their yearly budget. If fathers were to take off a similar amount of time, then many corporations would struggle to achieve the same profits. Since most businesses, both large and small, are unwilling to sacrifice revenue for the sake of their employees, the likely result would be a compensating reduction in workers’ wages. This would mean less money for consumers and the very parents who require additional means to provide for their children. Governments might be able to regulate this to an extent but corporate entities are committed to their bottom line over all else.
Nonetheless, this change is illustrative of a positive change in the understanding of gender equality. In the past, there was an historically ingrained, more institutionalised hierarchy between males and females. The shift towards increasingly equal treatment in the last century affects primarily women but must be fair in order to not engender resentment from men. One way of evidencing that gender equality concerns both sexes is paternity leave. Since men do not have to recover physically, this paid leave should be shorter but still significant. Governments can easily propose and force through legislation ensuring that the same protections enshrined in law for women, have a comparable statute safeguarding the rights of fathers.
In conclusion, though there is an economic tradeoff, men should be granted leave to be with their newly born children. The negatives can be mitigated if the time is limited relative to maternity leave.
Analysis
1. It is becoming increasingly common for fathers to be granted paternity leave upon the birth of a new child. 2. In my opinion, though this has economic ramifications, it is a progressive reform that should be encouraged.
- Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
- Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Critics argue that in the aggregate the implications are negative for the economy. 2. Most companies already account for maternity leave in their yearly budget. 3. If fathers were to take off a similar amount of time, then many corporations would struggle to achieve the same profits. 4. Since most businesses, both large and small, are unwilling to sacrifice revenue for the sake of their employees, the likely result would be a compensating reduction in workers’ wages. 5. This would mean less money for consumers and the very parents who require additional means to provide for their children. 6. Governments might be able to regulate this to an extent but corporate entities are committed to their bottom line over all else.
- Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
- Explain your main idea.
- Develop it with specific detail.
- Continue to develop it.
- Develop it as fully as possible.
- Any extra development will help your task achievement score.
1. Nonetheless, this change is illustrative of a positive change in the understanding of gender equality. 2. In the past, there was an historically ingrained, more institutionalised hierarchy between males and females. 3. The shift towards increasingly equal treatment in the last century affects primarily women but must be fair in order to not engender resentment from men. 4. One way of evidencing that gender equality concerns both sexes is paternity leave. 5. Since men do not have to recover physically, this paid leave should be shorter but still significant. 6. Governments can easily propose and force through legislation ensuring that the same protections enshrined in law for women, have a comparable statute safeguarding the rights of fathers.
- Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
- Explain your new main idea.
- Include specific details and examples.
- The more specific, the better.
- Add on any extra detail that you can that is related for a better task achievement score.
- This paragraph can be slightly longer but not too much!
1. In conclusion, though there is an economic tradeoff, men should be granted leave to be with their newly born children. 2. The negatives can be mitigated if the time is limited relative to maternity leave.
- Summarise your main ideas.
- Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean? Take notes on a piece of paper so that you remember them better:
It is becoming increasingly common for fathers to be granted paternity leave upon the birth of a new child. In my opinion, though this has economic ramifications, it is a progressive reform that should be encouraged.
Critics argue that in the aggregate the implications are negative for the economy. Most companies already account for maternity leave in their yearly budget. If fathers were to take off a similar amount of time, then many corporations would struggle to achieve the same profits. Since most businesses, both large and small, are unwilling to sacrifice revenue for the sake of their employees, the likely result would be a compensating reduction in workers’ wages. This would mean less money for consumers and the very parents who require additional means to provide for their children. Governments might be able to regulate this to an extent but corporate entities are committed to their bottom line over all else.
Nonetheless, this change is illustrative of a positive change in the understanding of gender equality. In the past, there was an historically ingrained, more institutionalised hierarchy between males and females. The shift towards increasingly equal treatment in the last century affects primarily women but must be fair in order to not engender resentment from men. One way of evidencing that gender equality concerns both sexes is paternity leave. Since men do not have to recover physically, this paid leave should be shorter but still significant. Governments can easily propose and force through legislation ensuring that the same protections enshrined in law for women, have a comparable statute safeguarding the rights of fathers.
In conclusion, though there is an economic tradeoff, men should be granted leave to be with their newly born children. The negatives can be mitigated if the time is limited relative to maternity leave.
Answers
increasingly common more and more pervasive
granted given
paternity leave time off from work to be with your child after birth
economic ramifications implications for the economy
progressive reform positive, modern change
encouraged promoted
critics those who disagree
in the aggregate overall
implications effects
account for make up
yearly budget money earned/spent in a year
take off not work
struggle have difficulty
achieve get done
unwilling not wanting to
sacrifice revenue give up money
sake interest
likely result probably end in
reduction making it less
consumers customers
require need
means money earned
provide for take care of
regulate make laws, restrictions, etc.
to an extent to some degree
corporate entities companies
committed caring about
bottom line how much money they make
over all else above everything
nonetheless regardless
illustrative evidences
understanding changed thinking on
gender equality fairness between men and women
historically ingrained from a long time past part of society
institutionalised hierarchy the entities that order people within society
shift change
treatment how someone is dealt with
century 100 years
primarily mostly
engender resentment create a counter-reaction
evidencing showing
sexes genders
paternity leave time off for men to stay with newborns
recover get better
physically related to the body
paid leave time off with pay/salary
significant important
easily without effort
propose suggest
force through make sure
ensuring making it sure
protections safeguards
enshrined codified
comparable can be compared
statute law
safeguarding protecting
tradeoff downside
newly born just born
mitigated curbed, lessened
limited constrained
relative to in comparison to
Pronunciation
ɪnˈkriːsɪŋli ˈkɒmən
ˈgrɑːntɪd
pəˈtɜːnɪti liːv
ˌiːkəˈnɒmɪk ˌræmɪfɪˈkeɪʃənz
prəʊˈgrɛsɪv ˌriːˈfɔːm
ɪnˈkʌrɪʤd
ˈkrɪtɪks
ɪn ði ˈægrɪgɪt
ˌɪmplɪˈkeɪʃənz
əˈkaʊnt fɔː
ˈjɪəli ˈbʌʤɪt
teɪk ɒf
ˈstrʌgl
əˈʧiːv
ʌnˈwɪlɪŋ
ˈsækrɪfaɪs ˈrɛvɪnjuː
seɪk
ˈlaɪkli rɪˈzʌlt
rɪˈdʌkʃən
kənˈsjuːməz
rɪˈkwaɪə
miːnz
prəˈvaɪd fɔː
ˈrɛgjʊleɪt
tuː ən ɪksˈtɛnt
ˈkɔːpərɪt ˈɛntɪtiz
kəˈmɪtɪd
ˈbɒtəm laɪn
ˈəʊvər ɔːl ɛls
ˌnʌnðəˈlɛs
ˈɪləstreɪtɪv
ˌʌndəˈstændɪŋ
ˈʤɛndər i(ː)ˈkwɒlɪti
hɪsˈtɒrɪkəli ɪnˈgreɪnd
ˌɪnstɪˈtjuːʃənəlaɪzd ˈhaɪərɑːki
ʃɪft
ˈtriːtmənt
ˈsɛnʧʊri
ˈpraɪmərɪli
ɪnˈʤɛndə rɪˈzɛntmənt
ˈɛvɪdənsɪŋ
ˈsɛksɪz
pəˈtɜːnɪti liːv
rɪˈkʌvə
ˈfɪzɪkəli
peɪd liːv
sɪgˈnɪfɪkənt
ˈiːzɪli
prəˈpəʊz
fɔːs θruː
ɪnˈʃʊərɪŋ
prəˈtɛkʃənz
ɪnˈʃraɪnd
ˈkɒmpərəbl
ˈstætjuːt
ˈseɪfgɑːdɪŋ
treɪd ɒf
ˈnjuːli bɔːn
ˈmɪtɪgeɪtɪd
ˈlɪmɪtɪd
ˈrɛlətɪv tuː
Vocabulary Practice
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
It is becoming i________________________n for fathers to be g_________d p__________________e upon the birth of a new child. In my opinion, though this has e_________________________s, it is a p_________________m that should be e__________________d.
C_________s argue that i________________e the i______________s are negative for the economy. Most companies already a___________r maternity leave in their y________________t. If fathers were to t_________f a similar amount of time, then many corporations would s_________e to a_________e the same profits. Since most businesses, both large and small, are u__________g to s___________________e for the s________e of their employees, the l_____________t would be a compensating r_________n in workers’ wages. This would mean less money for c___________s and the very parents who r________e additional m_________s to p____________r their children. Governments might be able to r___________e this t____________t but c_________________s are c__________d to their b_______________e o_______________e.
N_______________s, this change is i_______________e of a positive change in the u______________g of g______________y. In the past, there was an h________________d, more i__________________________y between males and females. The s____t towards increasingly equal t_____________t in the last c________y affects p__________y women but must be fair in order to not e__________r r______________t from men. One way of e__________g that gender equality concerns both s______s is p_______________e. Since men do not have to r_________r p____________y, this p__________e should be shorter but still s___________t. Governments can e________________e and f________________h legislation e__________g that the same p_____________s e___________d in law for women, have a c______________e s_____________e s__________________g the rights of fathers.
In conclusion, though there is an economic t___________f, men should be granted leave to be with their n__________n children. The negatives can be m______________d if the time is l_________d r_______________o maternity leave.
Listening Practice
Learn more about this topic in the video below and practice with these activities:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oPjtoZJAJi4
Reading Practice
Read more about this topic and use these ideas to practice:
https://www.nytimes.com/2020/02/19/parenting/why-dads-dont-take-parental-leave.html
Speaking Practice
Practice with the following speaking questions from the real IELTS speaking exam:
Work
- Why did you choose your job?
- How much work do you do in a week?
- Do you have to work on weekends as well?
Writing Practice
Practice with the related topic below and then check with my sample answer:
Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children.
To what extent do you agree?
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