This is an IELTS Writing Task 2 sample answer related to railway lines from the IELTS Cambridge 12 book of past practice tests.
The question itself isn’t very tricky – should cities invest more in new railway lines or update existing public transport?
But it’s probably not a topic that you have thought a lot about or have very strong opinions on.
No problem, you can still write about it! The key, as always, is to focus on one main idea per paragraph and fully developed support for that one main idea.
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IELTS Examiner Sample Answer from Cambridge 12: Railyway Lines (by Dave)
In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Cambridge IELTS 12
Governments must always balance demands for newer modes of transport, including newer railway lines to connect cities, with maintaining current transportation infrastructure. In my opinion, the maintanence of current transport has a greater overall impact although the importance of fast trains will make life more convenient for commuters in the short-term.
The rationale for investing in newer, faster railway lines is that they will make it easier for people to travel between cities. Recent examples of this can be seen in Japan, which is famous for its ‘bullet trains’ that allow residents to traverse the country in a matter of hours. This provides an economic boon by allowing businessmen to travel easily from city to city. Moreover, tourists can also use these trains for convenient transnational travel, thereby making the country more tourist-friendly and helping to expand the industry.
Although I concede the above advantages, the majority of people are served by already existing forms of public transportation. Tourists and businessmen travelling between cities are the exception compared with those travelling inside cities. These travellers rely on buses, subways and city streets to get around. Simple improvements or additions to a subway line impacts millions of people. A new bus route can help workers get to and from work more easily. Even the lowering of fares is a reform that would benefit less affluent travellers.
In conclusion, cities that are more concerned with actual improvements, rather than publicity grabbing headlines, should focus on the most-used forms of public transport. In the future high speed rails may even become redundant as people commute less and transition to jobs based primarily online.
Analysis
1. Governments must always balance demands for newer modes of transport, including newer railway lines to connect cities, with maintaining current transportation infrastructure. 2. In my opinion, the maintenance of current transport has a greater overall impact although the importance of fast trains will make life more convenient for commuters in the short-term.
1. My first sentence repeats the overall topic. Change some words and write this sentence quickly.
2. The second sentence is my opinion – make sure that you opinion is 100% clear!
1. The rationale for investing in newer, faster railway lines is that they will make it easier for people to travel between cities. 2. Recent examples of this can be seen in Japan, which is famous for its ‘bullet trains’ that allow residents to traverse the country in a matter of hours. 3. This provides an economic boon by allowing businessmen to travel easily from city to city. 4. Moreover, tourists can also use these trains for convenient transnational travel, thereby making the country more tourist-friendly and helping to expand the industry.
1. My first sentence is a topic sentence that gives my main idea for this paragraph – it is easier to travel.
2. The second sentence begins my example. Start your example as soon as possible!
3. My third sentence develops the example.
4. The fourth sentence adds how this can help tourists as well as businessmen.
1. Although I concede the above advantages, the majority of people are served by already existing forms of public transportation. 2. Tourists and businessmen travelling between cities are the exception compared with those travelling inside cities. 3. These travellers rely on buses, subways and city streets to get around. 4. Simple improvements or additions to a subway line impacts millions of people. 5. A new bus route can help workers get to and from work more easily. 6. Even the lowering of fares is a reform that would benefit less affluent travellers.
1. My first sentence is a topic sentence explaining that current transport is more important.
2. The second sentence compares this to the main idea from the paragraph below to show contrast.
3. My third sentence supports my main idea by detailing the transport that people in cities use. Be as specific as you can!
4. My fourth sentence explains how improving subways can help.
5. The fifth sentence describes how bus routes can also be helpful – specific!
6. My last sentence adds an additional reform to existing infrastructure that would have a large impact.
1. In conclusion, cities that are more concerned with actual improvements, rather than publicity grabbing headlines, should focus on the most-used forms of public transport. 2. In the future high speed rails may even become redundant as people commute less and transition to jobs based primarily online.
1. My first sentence restates my overall opinion – be sure that you are very clear and don’t sit in the middle!
2. The second sentence gives an extra detail that many IELTS examiners require for band 7 and up.
Sample Answer Vocabulary
What do the phrases highlighted below mean in your own words? Is there a translation in your language?
Governments must always balance demands for newer modes of transport, including newer railway lines to connect cities, with maintaining current transportation infrastructure. In my opinion, the maintenance of current transport has a greater overall impact although the importance of fast trains will make life more convenient for commuters in the short-term.
The rationale for investing in newer, faster railway lines is that they will make it easier for people to travel between cities. Recent examples of this can be seen in Japan, which is famous for its ‘bullet trains‘ that allow residents to traverse the country in a matter of hours. This provides an economic boon by allowing businessmen to travel easily from city to city. Moreover, tourists can also use these trains for convenient transnational travel, thereby making the country more tourist-friendly and helping to expand the industry.
Although I concede the above advantages, the majority of people are served by already existing forms of public transportation. Tourists and businessmen travelling between cities are the exception compared with those travelling inside cities. These travellers rely on buses, subways and city streets to get around. Simple improvements or additions to a subway line impacts millions of people. A new bus route can help workers get to and from work more easily. Even the lowering of fares is a reform that would benefit less affluent travellers.
In conclusion, cities that are more concerned with actual improvements, rather than publicity grabbing headlines, should focus on the most-used forms of public transport. In the future high speed rails may even become redundant as people commute less and transition to jobs based primarily online.
Answers:
balance demands make concessions to make everyone happy
newer modes of transport more recent developments in transportation
maintaining keeping up with
infrastructure roads, buildings, etc.
greater overall impact more effect on
commuters people who travel in to work
short-term in the next few years
rationale reason for
investing putting money into
bullet trains super fast trains
traverse go across
a matter of hours just a short time
economic boon help the economy
transnational across the country
thereby causing
tourist-friendly easy for tourists
concede admit
existing currently available
exception not including
rely depend on
get around travel
subway line the route for the subway
get to and from go to
fares money for travelling on the bus/subway
reform change
less affluent poor
publicity grabbing headlines solely for the good press
most-used high usage
redundant superfluous
transition change to
jobs based primarily jobs located mainly
Pronunciation
ˈbæləns dɪˈmɑːndz
ˈnjuːə məʊdz ɒv ˈtrænspɔːt
meɪnˈteɪnɪŋ
ˈɪnfrəˌstrʌkʧə
ˈgreɪtər ˈəʊvərɔːl ˈɪmpækt
kəˈmjuːtəz
ʃɔːt-tɜːm
ˌræʃəˈnɑːl
ɪnˈvɛstɪŋ
ˈbʊlɪt treɪnz
ˈtrævə(ː)s
ə ˈmætər ɒv ˈaʊəz
ˌiːkəˈnɒmɪk buːn
trænzˈnæʃənəl
ˈðeəˈbaɪ
ˈtʊərɪst-ˈfrɛndli
kənˈsiːd
ɪgˈzɪstɪŋ
ɪkˈsɛpʃən
rɪˈlaɪ
gɛt əˈraʊnd
ˈsʌbweɪ laɪn
gɛt tuː ænd frɒm
feəz
ˌriːˈfɔːm
lɛs ˈæflʊənt
pʌbˈlɪsɪti ˈgræbɪŋ ˈhɛdlaɪnz
məʊst-juːzd
rɪˈdʌndənt
trænˈsɪʒən
ʤɒbz beɪst ˈpraɪmərɪli
Listen and repeat:
Vocabulary Practice
Governments must always _______________ for _______________, including newer railway lines to connect cities, with _______________ current transportation ______________. In my opinion, the maintenance of current transport has a _______________ although the importance of fast trains will make life more convenient for _______________ in the ______________.
The _______________ for _______________ in newer, faster railway lines is that they will make it easier for people to travel between cities. Recent examples of this can be seen in Japan, which is famous for its ‘______________‘ that allow residents to _______________ the country in ______________. This provides an _______________ by allowing businessmen to travel easily from city to city. Moreover, tourists can also use these trains for convenient _______________ travel, _______________ making the country more _______________ and helping to expand the industry.
Although I _______________ the above advantages, the majority of people are _______________ by already _______________ forms of public transportation. Tourists and businessmen travelling between cities are the _______________ compared with those travelling inside cities. These travellers _______________ on buses, subways and city streets to ______________. Simple improvements or additions to a _______________ impacts millions of people. A new bus route can help workers _______________ work more easily. Even the lowering of _______________ is a _______________ that would benefit _______________ travellers.
In conclusion, cities that are more concerned with actual improvements, rather than _______________ , should focus on the _______________ forms of public transport. In the future high speed rails may even become _______________ as people commute less and _______________ to _______________ online.
Listen and check:
Listening Practice
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Reading Practice
Read the article below to review more about Japanese bullet trains:
Please evaluate my writing and give me a band, I would really appreciate it. Thank you.
In nowadays advancing times, numerous people in several different countries believe that money should be invested in the construction of fast train railways to allow rapid transport from city to city. However, others may say that this money would be better invested in improving public transport which is already available. In my opinion, the maintenance of existing transport would be a better idea and overall more profitable for both the government and the general public.
The construction of fast trains would make travelling between cities very easy. For example, bullet trains in Japan have allowed its population to travel very easily from city to city, thus allowing people to conserve their precious time and energy. This has specially been very beneficial for businesses and tourists, as businessmen can attend multiple meetings during the day in several different locations and tourists can easily travel to and fro from various destinations and not be limited to one city. This ease of travel allowed by the bullet trains has lead to a fruitful economic boom for Japan and its economy.
Although I acknowledge the above advantages, the majority of people in many cities usually benefit more considerably from existing transport as they travel more frequently within the city, with the exception of businessmen and tourists. These people rely on trams, subways, buses etc. to commute to work, school and several other places within their city. Thus, investing money into these modes of transport and bringing about simple yet effective changes would vastly benefit millions of people. For instance, an addition of new bus routes would allow easier travel for people going to work or even reducing fare rates would be hugely beneficial for members of the public belonging to lower socioeconomic backgrounds.
In conclusion, many people believe that the construction of high speed trains should be prioritised and that’s where the funds should be invested. On the other hand, some say these funds would be better spent on upgrading existing public transport. I believe, that the money should be spent on improvements which can benefit a larger group of people, thus it would be wiser to improve public transport, as travel between cities may become redundant in the future for businesses as many may choose to work from online platforms.
Sure, I’ll give you some feedback on it!
Just use fixed expressions that you have seen in sample essays from native speakers, don’t make up your own like ‘In nowadays advancing times’ – it’s wrong so just say ‘Nowadays.’
Great opinion and a very clear introduction!
Your second paragraph has a clear main idea and strong support. The last sentence is a bit strong – is that really the reason why Japan’s economy is booming?
As I read it, I notice that it follows my example very closely – paraphrasing all my points so it is difficult to give you an overall score especially for task achievement and cohesion/coherence since they are based on my answer.
Try writing your own from scratch on a similar topic and I’ll let you know your band scores!
band 6.5
hi, Dave
I am going to take IELTS in 3 weeks. Would you please evaluate my essay if I send you one?
Sure Sisil but I do that as part of a service: course.howtodoielts.com/band-scores-corrections
Hi
I’ve just recently booked for IELTS exam, and while registering, I wrote my name in small caps( except for the first letter of my name and surname) though its all caps in my passport. Will this be a problem later on, maybe when I am applying to universities?
I would assume not but you can double check with where you took the test if you are unsure, John.