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IELTS Essay: Whole Family Raising Children
It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and so on are involved in a child’s upbringing, rather than just their parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many today feel that is important for the entire extended family to play a role in child-rearing, while others feel that parents are sufficient. In my opinion, the whole family should be part of the process.
Those who doubt the value of the whole family in raising children often point out the potentially negative influence of particular relatives. In an ideal world, each family member would impart their own unique, mature perspectives in the interests of raising a well-rounded child. In practice, many relatives are more likely to serve as bad examples or contradict the efforts of the parents. The best case scenario with such individuals is confusion and in more extreme cases it could lead to developmental problems. There is even the possibility that a close relative is engaging in physical or mental abuse of a child without the parent’s awareness.
Nonetheless, the instances above are exceptions that can be dealt with on a case-by-case basis; in most families extra help lessens the burden on parents. A good example of this would be in countries with very tight-knit families such as in Asia and South America. There it is very common for aunts, uncles and the extended family to lend a hand with raising children. The main benefits of this are for parents and children. Parents get a much needed break from looking after their kids. Children benefit from the undivided attention of their relatives. When they come back home, their mother and father are also more likely to feel recharged and fully engaged in parenting duties having had some time to themselves.
In conclusion, though there are rare situations where the whole family raising a child can be a negative, it is important for parents to receive support from relatives. Parents should strive to have this familial environment in order to raise well-adjusted adults.
Analysis
1. Many today feel that is important for the entire extended family to play a role in child-rearing, while others feel that parents are sufficient. 2. In my opinion, the whole family should be part of the process.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those who doubt the value of the whole family in raising children often point out the potentially negative influence of particular relatives. 2. In an ideal world, each family member would impart their own unique, mature perspectives in the interests of raising a well-rounded child. 3. In practice, many relatives are more likely to serve as bad examples or contradict the efforts of the parents. 4. The best case scenario with such individuals is confusion and in more extreme cases it could lead to developmental problems. 5. There is even the possibility that a close relative is engaging in physical or mental abuse of a child without the parent’s awareness.
Develop your main idea or explain it if necessary.
Continue to develop the same main idea.
State the possible results – keep your claims weak.
State further results to continue developing your idea.
1. Nonetheless, the instances above are exceptions that can be dealt with on a case-by-case basis; in most families extra help lessens the burden on parents. 2. A good example of this would be in countries with very tight-knit families such as in Asia and South America. 3. There it is very common for aunts, uncles and the extended family to lend a hand with raising children. 4. The main benefits of this are for parents and children. 5. Parents get a much needed break from looking after their kids. 6. Children benefit from the undivided attention of their relatives. 7. When they come back home, their mother and father are also more likely to feel recharged and fully engaged in parenting duties having had some time to themselves.
Write another topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Start a specific example as soon as possible.
Develop the exam.
State the results of the example.
Keep developing the same example.
State the results on everyone involved.
Conclude with a strong statement.
1. In conclusion, though there are rare situations where the whole family raising a child can be a negative, it is important for parents to receive support from relatives. 2. Parents should strive to have this familial environment in order to raise well-adjusted adults.
Summarise your main ideas and repeat your opinion.
Add a final thought or detail at the end. Read more about writing a conclusion here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
Many today feel that is important for the entire extended family to play a role in child-rearing, while others feel that parents are sufficient. In my opinion, the whole family should be part of the process.
Those who doubt the value of the whole family in raising children often point out the potentially negative influence of particular relatives. In an ideal world, each family member would impart their own unique, mature perspectives in the interests of raising a well-rounded child. In practice, many relatives are more likely to serve as bad examples or contradict the efforts of the parents. The best case scenario with such individuals is confusion and in more extreme cases it could lead to developmental problems. There is even the possibility that a close relative is engaging in physical or mental abuse of a child without the parent’s awareness.
Nonetheless, the instances above are exceptions that can be dealt with on a case-by-case basis; in most families extra help lessens the burden on parents. A good example of this would be in countries with very tight-knit families such as in Asia and South America. There it is very common for aunts, uncles and the extended family to lend a hand with raising children. The main benefits of this are for parents and children. Parents get a much needed break from looking after their kids. Children benefit from the undivided attention of their relatives. When they come back home, their mother and father are also more likely to feel recharged and fully engaged in parenting duties having had some time to themselves.
In conclusion, though there are rare situations where the whole family raising a child can be a negative, it is important for parents to receive support from relatives. Parents should strive to have this familial environment in order to raise well-adjusted adults.
Answers
entire extended family uncles, aunts, cousins, etc.
play a role help with
child-rearing raising a child
sufficient enough
whole family entire family
part of the process play a role in
doubt question
value believe to be important
point out argue
potentially negative influence possibly hurt
particular relatives certain family members
in an ideal world in a perfect world
impart give/influence
unique individual
mature perspectives adult views
the interests of for others
well-rounded child kid with diverse interests
in practice in reality
serve as bad examples not good examples
contradict go against
efforts attempts
best case scenario the dream situation
confusion misunderstanding
more extreme cases worst case scenarios
developmental problems mental issues
possibility chance
close relative family member that knows them well
engaging in physical or mental abuse hurting, neglecting, abusing
without the parent’s awareness the mother/father not knowing
nonetheless regardless
exceptions cases outside the norm
dealt with handled
case-by-case basis situation to situation
lessens the burden on parents helps parents get by
Many today feel that is important for the e____________________y to p___________e in c________________g, while others feel that parents are s_____________t. In my opinion, the w_____________y should be p_____________s.
Those who d________t the v________e of the whole family in raising children often p____________t the p___________________________e of p______________________s. I_________________d, each family member would i___________t their own u__________e, m________________________s in t_____________________f raising a w_____________________d. I______________e, many relatives are more likely to s___________________s or c_____________t the e__________s of the parents. The b___________________o with such individuals is c_____________n and in m_____________________s it could lead to d__________________________s. There is even the p______________y that a c__________________e is e__________________________________e of a child w_________________________________s.
N_____________s, the instances above are e_____________s that can be d____________________h on a c_____________________s; in most families extra help l___________________________s. A good example of this would be in countries with very t______________________s such as in Asia and South America. There it is very common for aunts, uncles and the extended family to l______________d with raising children. The main benefits of this are for parents and children. Parents get a m___________________k from l___________________r their kids. Children b_____________t from the u______________________n of their relatives. When they come back home, their mother and father are also more likely to feel r____________d and fully e__________d in p____________________s having had some t__________________s.
In conclusion, though there are r_______________s where the whole family raising a child can be a negative, it is important for parents to r____________________t from relatives. Parents should s_________e to have this f______________________t in order to raise w_____________________s.
Listening Practice
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Reading Practice
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This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of arts and education funding from the real exam.
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IELTS Essay: Arts & Education Funding
The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education.
To what extent do you agree?
Due to the limits of national budgets, many today are fiercely debating the proper level of funding for the arts and education. While some argue that the arts have important historic value, I side with those who recognize the societal value of education.
On the one hand, many insist that the arts are an important reminder of national history. A good example of this would be the countless paintings of historic events and key figures that became prominent and fashionable during the Renaissance. These pictures now deepen not only our understanding of those events but also the psychology and values of the individuals producing and becoming patrons of art at that time. It is therefore likely that art made today will also give important clues to future generations as to the history and character of their ancestors.
On the other hand, education is the key for the progress of a nation. This can be most clearly seen in developing countries. After World War II, for instance, South Korea’s economy was decimated and there were few pathways to a stable nation. The government invested massively in education and the result is some of the most important companies in the world were founded ranging from Samsung to LG to Hyundai. These companies contribute to the economy and have greatly raised the standard of living for all citizens. I believe efforts to fund education like the one detailed above have a clear and tangible impact.
In conclusion, art is important for its value in terms of history but education is by far more important for its economic effects. Governments should strike some balance but prioritise education.
Analysis
1. Due to the limits national budgets, many today are fiercely debating the proper level of funding for the arts and education. 2. While some argue that the arts have important historic value, I side with those who recognize the societal value of education.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Learn more about introductions here.
1. On the one hand, many insist that the arts are an important reminder of national history. 2. A good example of this would be the countless paintings of historic events and key figures that became prominent and fashionable during the Renaissance. 3. These pictures now deepen not only our understanding of those events but also the psychology and values of the individuals producing and becoming patrons of art at that time. 4. It is therefore likely that art made today will also give important clues to future generations as to the history and character of their ancestors.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Begin a specific example.
Develop the example.
Draw conclusions or generalise from your example.
1. On the other hand, education is the key for the progress of a nation. This can be most clearly seen in developing countries. 2. After World War II, for instance, South Korea’s economy was decimated and there were few pathways to a stable nation. 3. The government invested massively in education and the result is some of the most important companies in the world were founded ranging from Samsung to LG to Hyundai. 4. These companies contribute to the economy and have greatly raised the standard of living for all citizens. 5. I believe efforts to fund education like the one detailed above have a clear and tangible impact.
Write another topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Begin another specific example.
Develop it and don’t switch to a new example.
State the results.
Conclude with a strong statement.
1. In conclusion, art is important for its value in terms of history but education is by far more important for its economic effects. 2. Governments should strike some balance but prioritise education.
Repeat your main ideas and your opinion.
Include a final thought/detail. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
Due to the limits of national budgets, many today are fiercely debating the proper level of funding for the arts and education. While some argue that the arts have important historic value, I side with those who recognize the societal value of education.
On the one hand, many insist that the arts are an important reminder of national history. A good example of this would be the countless paintings of historic events and key figures that became prominent and fashionable during the Renaissance. These pictures now deepen not only our understanding of those events but also the psychology and values of the individuals producing and becoming patrons of art at that time. It is therefore likely that art made today will also give important clues to future generations as to the history and character of their ancestors.
On the other hand, education is the key for the progress of a nation. This can be most clearly seen in developing countries. After World War II, for instance, South Korea’s economy was decimated and there were few pathways to a stable nation. The government invested massively in education and the result is some of the most important companies in the world were founded ranging from Samsung to LG to Hyundai. These companies contribute to the economy and have greatly raised the standard of living for all citizens. I believe efforts to fund education like the one detailed above have a clear and tangible impact.
In conclusion, art is important for its value in terms of history but education is by far more important for its economic effects. Governments should strike some balance but prioritise education.
Answers
limits of national budgets constraints of money available
fiercely debating hotly arguing about
proper level of funding correct amount of money
important historic value key to understanding the past
side with agree with
recognize understand
societal value of education importance of schools
insist feel strongly about
reminder makes one remember
national history history of a country
countless paintings of historic events many pictures of events from the past
key figures important people
prominent common
fashionable in vogue
Renaissance period of artistic and scientific growth in Europe around the 1500s
deepen understand more
psychology how people think
becoming patrons of contributing money for
clues hints
future generations people in the future, our grandchildren, etc.
character personality
ancestors people who came before us
progress how the world gets better
most clearly seen obvious in
decimated destroyed
pathways means
stable nation prosperous country
invested massively put a lot of money into
ranging from including
contribute give to
raised the standard of living for all citizens make life better for all
Due to l_____________________________s, many today are f________________g the p__________________________g for the arts and education. While some argue that the arts have i__________________________e, I s_______________h those who r_____________e the s____________________________n.
On the one hand, many i_________t that the arts are an important r__________r of n________________y. A good example of this would be the c_______________________________s and k____________________s that became p________________t and f_______________e during the R______________e. These pictures now d___________n not only our understanding of those events but also the p_____________y and values of the individuals producing and b____________________f art at that time. It is therefore likely that art made today will also give important c_______s to f___________________s as to the history and c_____________r of their a_____________s.
On the other hand, education is the key for the p___________s of a nation. This can be m_________________n in developing countries. After World War II, for instance, South Korea’s economy was d______________d and there were few p____________s to a s______________n. The government i_________________y in education and the result is some of the most important companies in the world were founded r_________________m Samsung to LG to Hyundai. These companies c________________e to the economy and have greatly r___________________________________s. I believe e__________s to fund education like the one d_______________e have a c_________________________t.
In conclusion, art is important for its value in terms of history but education is by far more important for its economic effects. Governments should s____________________e but p______________e education.
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IELTS Task 1 Essay: Bar Chart (Education)
The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in the UK in 2010.
The chart details age demographics as they relate to levels of education in the UK in 2010. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that older people, particularly in the oldest age bracket, tended to have no or fewer qualifications.
Looking first of all at younger people, precisely 27% of individuals from ages 16-50 had no qualifications. Breaking that down further, 20% of the 16-24 and 35-50 groups had school certification and 71% had university degrees. For ages 24-35, the numbers are slightly different with 76% having graduated university and 15% with a school certification.
Turning to the older demographics, for those aged 50-75, 50% had a university degree, 20% a school certificate and 30% no qualification. This figure expanded to 72% for people over 75, with just 3% having earned a school certificate and 25% a university degree.
Analysis
1. The chart details age demographics as they relate to levels of education in the UK in 2010. 2. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that older people, particularly in the oldest age bracket, tended to have no or fewer qualifications.
Paraphrase what the graph shows.
Write a general overview that fully covers all areas.
1. Looking first of all at younger people, precisely 27% of individuals from ages 16-50 had no qualifications. 2. Breaking that down further, 20% of the 16-24 and 35-50 groups had school certification and 71% had university degrees. 3. For ages 24-35, the numbers are slightly different with 76% having graduated university and 15% with a school certification.
Begin to describe the data.
Make sure that you include all data.
And try to compare as much as possible.
1. Turning to the older demographics, for those aged 50-75, 50% had a university degree, 20% a school certificate and 30% no qualification. 2. This figure expanded to 72% for people over 75, with just 3% having earned a school certificate and 25% a university degree.
Group together the other age groups and write about them.
Finish with all the data and double check to make sure it is accurate.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
The chart details age demographics as they relate to levels of education in the UK in 2010. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that older people, particularly in the oldest age bracket, tended to have no or fewer qualifications.
Looking first of all at younger people, precisely 27% of individuals from ages 16-50 had no qualifications. Breaking that down further, 20% of the 16-24 and 35-50 groups had school certification and 71% had unviersity degrees. For ages 24-35, the numbers are slightly different with 76% having graduated university and 15% with a school certification.
Turning to the older demographics, for those aged 50-75, 50% had a university degree, 20% a school certificate and 30% no qualification. This figure expanded to 72% for people over 75, with just 3% having earned a school certificate and 25% a university degree.
Answers
age demographics age groups
relate to have to do with
looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that overall
age bracket age groups
tended to usually
qualifications degrees, certifications
looking first of all at beginning with
breaking that down further looking more deeply/closely
school certification a degree or paper from a school
The chart details a___________________s as they r___________o levels of education in the UK in 2010. L_________________________________________________t older people, particularly in the oldest a___________t, t___________o have no or fewer q_____________s.
L______________________t younger people, precisely 27% of individuals from ages 16-50 had no qualifications. B_________________________r, 20% of the 16-24 and 35-50 groups have s_______________________n and 71% have unviersity degrees. For ages 24-35, the numbers are s____________________t with 76% having g______________________y and 15% w____h a school certification.
T_______________o the older demographics, for those aged 50-75, 50% have a university degree, 20% a school certificate and 30% no qualification. This figure e____________d to 72% for people over 75, with just 3% having e__________d a school certificate and 25% a university degree.
This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay on the topic of the elderly and education from the real IELTS exam.
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IELTS Essay: The Elderly and Education
Some people think governments should care more about elderly while others think they should focus on investing in education for younger people.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are many today who believe that it is more important to prioritise education for younger people over looking after the elderly. In my opinion, this makes utilitarian sense but ignores more important justifications.
Those who argue in favour of education can easily draw on the tangible benefits. Some nations have gone so far as to suggest that education is the most important national priority and deserves the greatest allocation of resources. This was famously the case in countries like Japan, South Korea, and Finland decades ago and its efficacy has been evidenced by the growth of innovative industries and progressively rising standards of living. The conclusions from those countries is simple: money spent on education not only contributes to producing jobs in the short-term and stimulating the consumer economy, but the results years later of a well-educated populace will benefit political participation, the economy, safety, and a host of other areas.
Nonetheless, investment on education has peaked and care for the elderly is a sadly neglected area. No one would suggest drastically slashing education budgets, but some resources ought to be diverted to the people who contributed most to present living stangards. Past generations often had to work longer hours at more difficult jobs to build the modern infrastructure and political and economic systems now taken for granted. As these people age, many of them struggle with paying the bills if they do not have a supportive, financially stable family. They might not be able to work anymore so it therefore falls to the government to find ways of taking care of them ranging from retirement homes to monthly checks for living expenses to being aware of how policy changes might affect older people.
In conclusion, education is crucial but it is more important to keep in mind the debt owed to the elderly and take good care of them. Governments must of course balance a multitude of priorities but old people should not slip down the list.
Analysis
1. There are many today who believe that it is more important to prioritise education for younger people over looking after the elderly. 2. In my opinion, this makes utilitarian sense but ignores more important justifications.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Learn more about conclusions here.
1. Those who argue in favour of education can easily draw on the tangible benefits. 2. Some nations have gone so far as to suggest that education is the most important national priority and deserves the greatest allocation of resources. 3. This was famously the case in countries like Japan, South Korea, and Finland decades ago and its efficacy has been evidenced by the growth of innovative industries and progressively rising standards of living. 4. The conclusions from those countries is simple: money spent on education not only contributes to producing jobs in the short-term and stimulating the consumer economy, but the results years later of a well-education populace will benefit political participation, the economy, safety, and a host of other areas.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Explain your main idea.
Use specific examples to develop your main idea.
State the full results of your example.
1. Nonetheless, investment on education has peaked and care for the elderly is a sadly neglected area. 2. No one would suggest drastically slashing education budgets, but some resources ought to be diverted to the people who contributed most to present living stangards. 3. Past generations often had to work longer hours at more difficult jobs to build the modern infrastructure and political and economic systems now taken for granted. 4. As these people age, many of them struggle with paying the bills if they do not have a supportive, financially stable family. 5. They might not be able to work anymore so it therefore falls to the government to find ways of taking care of them ranging from retirement homes to monthly checks for living expenses to being aware of how policy changes might affect older people.
Write another topic sentence with another clear main idea at the end.
Explain or begin developing the main idea.
Be as specific as possible supporting your main idea.
Don’t switch to new main idea.
Conclude with a strong statement and specific ideas.
1. In conclusion, education is crucial but it is more important to keep in mind the debt owed to the elderly and take good care of them. 2. Governments must of course balance a multitude of priorities but old people should not slip down the list.
Repeat your opinion summarise your main ideas.
Add a final thought/detail. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
There are many today who believe that it is more important to prioritise education for younger people over looking after the elderly. In my opinion, this makes utilitarian sense but ignores more important justifications.
Those who argue in favour of education can easily draw on the tangible benefits. Some nations have gone so far as to suggest that education is the most important national priority and deserves the greatest allocation of resources. This was famously the case in countries like Japan, South Korea, and Finland decades ago and its efficacy has been evidenced by the growth of innovative industries and progressively rising standards of living. The conclusions from those countries is simple: money spent on education not only contributes to producing jobs in the short-term and stimulating the consumer economy, but the results years later of a well-educated populace will benefit political participation, the economy, safety, and a host of other areas.
Nonetheless, investment on education has peaked and care for the elderly is a sadly neglected area. No one would suggest drastically slashing education budgets, but some resources ought to be diverted to the people who contributed most to present living stangards. Past generations often had to work longer hours at more difficult jobs to build the modern infrastructure and political and economic systems now taken for granted. As these people age, many of them struggle with paying the bills if they do not have a supportive, financially stable family. They might not be able to work anymore so it therefore falls to the government to find ways of taking care of them ranging from retirement homes to monthly checks for living expenses to being aware of how policy changes might affect older people.
In conclusion, education is crucial but it is more important to keep in mind the debt owed to the elderly and take good care of them. Governments must of course balance a multitude of priorities but old people should not slip down the list.
Answers
prioritise focus on
looking after taking care of
utilitarian sense just caring about what it pragmatic
ignores not pay attention to
justifications reasons for
argue in favour of support
easily draw on can point out
tangible benefits real advantages
gone so far as to taken to the extreme of
most important national priority crucial for the country
deserves should get
greatest allocation of resources most money for
famously the case well known example
decades ago more than 10 years ago
efficacy effectiveness
innovative industries companies that develop new products
progressively rising standards of living life getting better and better
not only not limited to
short-term not far in the future
stimulating the consumer economy selling more products
well-educated populace smart citizens
political participation voting
safety lack of crime
a host of many
nonetheless regardless
peaked reached a high point
sadly neglected area unfortunately neglected/forgotten
drastically slashing education budgets cutting money for schools a lot
ought should
diverted taken to another area
contributed most give the most
past generations older people
modern infrastructure buildings, roads, etc.
political related to politics and voting
economic systems how the economy works
taken for granted not appreciated
struggle fight with
supportive helpful
financially stable family family with money
falls to must be responsible for
find ways locate methods
retirement homes places for old people to live
monthly checks for living expenses retirement fund
aware knkow about
policy changes reforms
crucial very important
keep in mind be mindful of
debt owed responsible
take good care of them look after well
balance keep both in mind
multitude of priorities many areas to consider
slip down the list be forgotten, become less important
There are many today who believe that it is more important to p___________e education for younger people over l___________r the elderly. In my opinion, this makes u________________e but i__________s more important j_______________s.
Those who a_________________f education can e_______________n the t____________________s. Some nations have g________________o suggest that education is the m____________________y and d___________s the g___________________________s. This was f_________________e in countries like Japan, South Korea, and Finland d____________o and its e_________y has been evidenced by the growth of i____________________s and p____________________________g. The conclusions from those countries is simple: money spent on education n_________y contributes to producing jobs in the s___________m and s______________________________y, but the results years later of a w_______________________e will benefit p__________________________n, the economy, s_________y, and a___________f other areas.
N______________s, investment on education has p_________d and care for the elderly is a s______________________a. No one would suggest d__________________________________s, but some resources o__________t to be d_____________d to the people who c__________________t to present living stangards. P_________________s often had to work longer hours at more difficult jobs to build the m________________________e and p___________l and e_________________s now t___________________d. As these people age, many of them s______________e with paying the bills if they do not have a s_______________e, f_____________________y. They might not be able to work anymore so it therefore f___________o the government to f______________s of taking care of them ranging from r_________________s to m_____________________s to being a_________e of how p________________s might affect older people.
In conclusion, education is c__________l but it is more important to k______________d the d____________d to the elderly and t_______________________m. Governments must of course b____________e a m______________________s but old people should not s______________________t.
Listening Practice
Learn what it is like to be old in Japan:
Reading Practice
Read the following article about education as a social ladder here:
This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay from the real IELTS exam on the topic of taxing sugar.
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IELTS Essay: Taxing Sugar
Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree.
Discuss both views and give you own opinion.
Many believe that new taxes on sugary products are beneficial for the public while others feel they impinge on individual freedoms. In my opinion, despite the drawbacks, the benefits to health justify these regulations.
Those who oppose such laws point out the limits placed on less affluent customers. The wealthy can still afford to buy sugary foods and drinks as the taxes are small enough. However, poorer individuals will find that an extra few dollars for a soda or candy bar is prohibitively expensive. They will rightly feel the right to make choices about their own health and the foods they like has been restricted by government. Consumers buying sugary foods and drinks are already well aware of the associated health risks; they have simply decided to value short-term gratification over long-term health.
Nonetheless, freedom and safety will always be in conflict and this change is unequivocally for the public good. Sugar has been shown in studies to be more harmful that fatty foods and is one of the driving factors behind a variety of conditions ranging from obesity to diabetes to, allegedly, cancer. Soda companies like Coca Cola and candy manufacturers like Nestle have tapped into a basic human desire for sweets to attract customers and build their brands. Because they were allowed free latitude in the past, the only solution now is draconian taxes that can begin to slowly dissuade people from sugary products and eventually break down their dependence to a healthy, moderate level.
In conclusion, though there are class issues associated with taxing sugar, these are outweighed by their benefits to public health. Governments around the world ought to adopt some variation of these important reforms.
Analysis
1. Many believe that new taxes on sugary products are beneficial for the public while others feel they impinge on individual freedoms. 2. In my opinion, despite the drawbacks, the benefits to health justify these regulations.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those who oppose such laws point out the limits placed on less affluent customers. 2. The wealthy can still afford to buy sugary foods and drinks as the taxes are small enough. 3. However, poorer individuals will find that an extra few dollars for a soda or candy bar is prohibitively expensive. 4. They will rightly feel the right to make choices about their own health and the foods they like has been restricted by government. 5. Consumers buying sugary foods and drinks are already well aware of the associated health risks; they have simply decided to value short-term gratification over long-term health.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Develop your main idea.
Continue to develop by stating further results.
Don’t swich to a new main idea.
Summarise your argument for the paragraph.
1. Nonetheless, freedom and safety will always be in conflict and this change is unequivocally for the public good. 2. Sugar has been shown in studies to be more harmful that fatty foods and is one of the driving factors behind a variety of conditions ranging from obesity to diabetes to, allegedly, cancer. 3. Soda companies like Coca Cola and candy manufacturers like Nestle have tapped into a basic human desire for sweets to attract customers and build their brands. 4. Because they were allowed free latitude in the past, the only solution now is draconian taxes that can begin to slowly dissuade people from sugary products and eventually break down their dependence to a healthy, moderate level.
Write another topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
Use studies to support your ideas when possible.
Develop your idea with specific, real examples.
Add as much detail as you can.
1. In conclusion, though there are class issues associated with taxing sugar, these are outweighed by their benefits to public health. 2. Governments around the world ought to adopt some variation of these important reforms.
Summarise your main ideas and repeat your opinion.
Add a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?
Many believe that new taxes on sugary products are beneficial for the public while others feel they impinge on individual freedoms. In my opinion, despite the drawbacks, the benefits to health justify these regulations.
Those who oppose such laws point out the limits placed onless affluent customers. The wealthy can still afford to buy sugary foods and drinks as the taxes are small enough. However, poorer individuals will find that an extra few dollars for a soda or candy bar is prohibitively expensive. They will rightly feel the right to make choices about their own health and the foods they like has been restricted by government. Consumers buying sugary foods and drinks are already well aware of the associated health risks; they have simply decided to value short-term gratification over long-term health.
Nonetheless, freedom and safety will always be in conflict and this change is unequivocally for the public good. Sugar has been shown in studies to be more harmful that fatty foods and is one of the driving factors behind a variety of conditions ranging from obesity to diabetes to, allegedly, cancer. Soda companies like Coca Cola and candy manufacturers like Nestle have tapped into a basic human desire for sweets to attract customers and build their brands. Because they were allowed free latitude in the past, the only solution now is draconian taxes that can begin to slowly dissuade people from sugary products and eventually break down their dependence to a healthy, moderate level.
In conclusion, though there are class issues associated with taxing sugar, these are outweighed by their benefits to public health. Governments around the world ought to adopt some variation of these important reforms.
Answers
taxes money paid to the government
sugary products cupcakes, cakes, candy, etc.
beneficial good
the public citizens, all people
impinge limit
individual freedoms what individuals are permitted to do
despite the drawbacks regardless of the negatives
justify give reason for
regulations keep in check
oppose go against
point out argue
limits placed on restrictions on
less affluent customers poor people
afford can buy
small enough not too big
find realise
extra few dollars some more money
prohibitively expensive too much to be able to buy
rightly correctly
restricted by government limited by law
consumers people who buy, customers
associated health risks related health problems
value short-term gratification over long-term health only care about the present moment
in conflict not in agreement
unequivocally undoubtedly
public good for the benefit of all
fatty foods foods high in fat like pizza, burgers, etc.
Many believe that new t_____s on s__________________s are b___________l for t_____________c while others feel they i__________e on i____________________s. In my opinion, d______________________s, the benefits to health j________y these r______________s.
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Nonetheless, freedom and safety will always be i____________t and this change is u____________________y for the p___________d. Sugar has been shown in studies to be more harmful that f___________s and is one of the d________________s behind a v____________________s ranging from o________y to d__________s to, a__________y, cancer. Soda companies like Coca Cola and candy m__________________s like Nestle have t____________o a basic human desire for sweets to a_____________________s and b_________________s. Because they were allowed f_______________e in the past, the only solution now is d________________n taxes that can begin to s_____________________e people from sugary products and eventually b____________n their d______________e to a healthy, m___________________l.
In conclusion, though there are c_____________s associated with taxing sugar, these are o_____________d by their benefits to p_____________h. Governments around the world o________t to a___________________n of these i_______________________s.
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