Young people committing crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are reformers today who argue that adults and young people should be treated equally under the law. In my opinion, despite the ostensible fairness of this proposal, it disregards crucial psychological differences.
Those who believe all ages should receive equal treatment, point out that this will engender a greater deterring effect. The main reason that all individuals in society are punished is not for justice alone, but as a means to ensure others will not commit similar crimes. Young people learn in school and the world generally that their actions will have consequences and that crimes are punishable with prison time and other penalties. If these censures are weakened, then the chances a young person will attempt to commit a crime will logically increase, even if the total number of young people engaging in criminal behavior today is lower than at any point in human history.
However, age is a just mitigating factor. Adults who commit crimes have had more time to develop socially and intellectually while young people might not fully grasp the consequences of their choices for themselves and others. For instance, there have been recent cases where young people were influenced by extremist elements now pervasive in social media. Young people are more impressionable in these situations and often lack the confidence and maturity to think for themselves. This vulnerability extends to their emotional and intellectual development and justifies laws that protect young people from receiving overly harsh sentences.
In conclusion, though there are practical reasons to support equal punishments for all ages, this alteration would be unfair to young people. Courts should consider a range of factors before selecting an appropriate punishment.
Analysis
1. There are reformers today who argue that adults and young people should be treated equally under the law. 2. In my opinion, despite the ostensible fairness of this proposal, it disregards crucial psychological differences.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those who believe all ages should receive equal treatment, point out that this will engender a greater deterring effect. 2. The main reason that all individuals in society are punished is not for justice alone, but as a means to ensure others will not commit similar crimes. 3. Young people learn in school and the world generally that their actions will have consequences and that crimes are punishable with prison time and other penalties. 4. If these censures are weakened, then the chances a young person will attempt to commit a crime will logically increase, even if the total number of young people engaging in criminal behavior today is lower than at any point in human history.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Explain your main idea.
Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
Keep developing it fully.
1. However, age is a just mitigating factor. 2. Adults who commit crimes have had more time to develop socially and intellectually while young people might not fully grasp the consequences of their choices for themselves and others. 3. For instance, there have been recent cases where young people were influenced by extremist elements now pervasive in social media. 4. Young people are more impressionable in these situations and often lack the confidence and maturity to think for themselves. 5. This vulnerability extends to their emotional and intellectual development and justifies laws that protect young people from receiving overly harsh sentences.
Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
Explain your new main idea.
Include specific details and examples.
Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
Finish the paragraph strong.
1. In conclusion, though there are practical reasons to support equal punishments for all ages, this alteration would be unfair to young people. 2. Courts should consider a range of factors before selecting an appropriate punishment.
Summarise your main ideas.
Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
There are reformers today who argue that adults and young people should be treated equally under the law. In my opinion, despite the ostensible fairness of this proposal, it disregards crucial psychological differences.
Those who believe all ages should receive equal treatment, point out that this will engender a greater deterring effect. The main reason that all individuals in society are punished is not for justice alone, but as a means to ensure others will not commit similar crimes. Young people learn in school and the world generally that their actions will have consequences and that crimes are punishable with prison time and other penalties. If these censures are weakened, then the chances a young person will attempt to commit a crime will logically increase, even if the total number of young people engaging in criminal behavior today is lowerthan at any point in human history.
However, age is a just mitigating factor. Adults who commit crimes have had more time to develop socially and intellectually while young people might not fully grasp the consequences of their choices for themselves and others. For instance, there have been recent cases where young people were influenced by extremist elements now pervasive in social media. Young people are more impressionable in these situations and often lack the confidence and maturity to think for themselves. This vulnerability extends to their emotional and intellectual development and justifies laws that protect young people from receiving overly harsh sentences.
In conclusion, though there are practical reasons to support equal punishments for all ages, this alteration would be unfair to young people. Courts should consider a range of factors before selecting an appropriate punishment.
Answers
For extra practice, write an antonym (opposite word) on a piece of paper to help you remember the new vocabulary:
reformers people who want to make changes
argue point out, contend
adults older people
young people people who are younger
treated equally under the law have the same punishments and dealt with the same way
despite regardless of
ostensible fairness seemingly just, right
proposal idea
disregards ignores
crucial key
psychological differences mental disparities
receive get
point out argue
engender creates
greater deterring effect does more to stop others from doing the same
justice fairness
as a means to in order to
ensure make sure of
commit similar crimes do the same things
generally overall
actions will have consequences you must be responsible
punishable can be punished in this way
prison time time in jail
penalties punishments
censures admonishments
weakened curbed, limited
chances odds of something happening
attempt try
logically rationally
engaging in taking part in
criminal behavior committing crimes
lowerthan at any point in human history never better than now
just right, fair
mitigating factor reason to lessen punishment
develop grow
socially relating to others
intellectually relating to the mind
might not fully grasp the consequences of their choices for themselves and others can’t completely understand the results of their actions
recent cases instances that happened not that long ago
influenced impacted
extremist elements strong opinions
pervasive common
social media Facebook, Instagram, TikTok, etc.
impressionable easily influenced
lack don’t have
confidence self-esteem
maturity feeling like an adult
vulnerability weakness
extends to also includes
emotional related to emotions
justifies gives reason for
protect keep safe
receiving overly harsh sentences get too strict punishments
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
There are r__________s today who a____e that a_____s and y____________e should be t________________________w. In my opinion, d__________e the o______________________s of this p_____________l, it d__________s c_________________________________________s.
Those who believe all ages should r_________e equal treatment, p________t that this will e_________r a g_____________________t. The main reason that all individuals in society are punished is not for j_____e alone, but a__________________________e others will not c____________________s. Young people learn in school and the world g__________y that their a____________________________________s and that crimes are p_____________e with p_________e and other p____________s. If these c____________s are w___________d, then the c_________s a young person will a_________t to commit a crime will l______________y increase, even if the total number of young people e________________n c___________________________r today is l______________________________________________________y.
However, age is a j____t m______________________r. Adults who commit crimes have had more time to d_______________________y and i___________________y while young people m___________________________________________________________________s. For instance, there have been r__________s where young people were i__________d by e____________________s now p___________e in s__________a. Young people are more i___________________e in these situations and often l___k the c____________e and m________y to think for themselves. This v_____________y e_________o their e_____________l and i_______________l development and j________s laws that p__________t young people from r__________________________________s.
In conclusion, though there are p________________s to support e________________________s for all ages, this a__________n would be unfair to young people. Courts should consider a___________________s before s__________g an a________________________t.
Listening Practice
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This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay from the new Cambridge IELTS 17 book of past test papers on the topic of a bar chart showing how families in one country spent weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
You can read essays and guides for the other IELTS Cambridge books, including Cambridge 17, here:
IELTS Cambridge 17 Task 1 Essay: Average Weekly Spending
The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart details average spending per week for families in a given country in the years 1968 and 2018. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that while spending for food, fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods declined, the inverse was true for the remaining categories, with only household goods unchanged. Although spending on food was by far the most common in 1968, by 2018 leisure occupied the majority of the family budget, followed closely by housing.
In 1968, families spent on average 35% of their weekly income on food, greatly outstripping other budgetary concerns, each of which represented between 5% and 10%. Among these, fuel and power was the lowest at 6%.
By 2018, spending patterns diverged more widely. Food represented a still significant 17% of the budget, trailing housing at 19% (a 9% overall rise) and leisure at 22% (a 13% increase). Transport also displayed a notable growth to 14%. Fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods all fell to 4%, 5%, and 4%, respectively. Household goods was the only expense to remain fixed, at 7%.
Analysis
1. The bar chart details average spending per week for families in a given country in the years 1968 and 2018. 2. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that while spending for food, fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods declined, the inverse was true for the remaining categories, with only household goods unchanged. 3. Although spending on food was by far the most common in 1968, by 2018 leisure occupied the majority of the family budget, followed closely by housing.
Paraphrase what the bar chart shows.
Write a clear overview summarising the differences.
This one is a little complex so it needs a second sentence for the overview.
1. In 1968, families spent on average 35% of their weekly income on food, greatly outstripping other budgetary concerns, each of which represented between 5% and 10%. 2. Among these, fuel and power was the lowest at 6%.
Begin writing about the data for the first categories.
Make sure you compare as much as possible.
1. By 2018, spending patterns diverged more widely. Food represented a still significant 17% of the budget, trailing housing at 19% (a 9% overall rise) and leisure at 22% (a 13% increase). 2. Transport also displayed a notable growth to 14%. Fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods all fell to 4%, 5%, and 4%, respectively. 3. Household goods was the only expense to remain fixed, at 7%.
Write about the final other parts of the graph – include everything!
Compare the categories.
Finish with the rest of the data.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
The bar chart details average spending per week for families in a given country in the years 1968 and 2018. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that while spending for food, fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods declined, the inverse was true for the remaining categories, with only household goods unchanged. Although spending on food was by far the most common in 1968, by 2018 leisure occupied the majority of the family budget, followed closely by housing.
In 1968, families spent on average 35% of their weekly income on food, greatly outstripping other budgetary concerns, each of which represented between 5% and 10%. Among these, fuel and power was the lowest at 6%.
By 2018, spending patterns diverged more widely. Food represented a still significant 17% of the budget, trailing housing at 19% (a 9% overall rise) and leisure at 22% (a 13% increase). Transport also displayed a notable growth to 14%. Fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods all fell to 4%, 5%, and 4%, respectively. Household goods was the only expense to remain fixed, at 7%.
Answers
For extra practice, write an antonym (opposite word) on a piece of paper to help you remember the new vocabulary:
details shows
average spending per week amount of money every 7 days spent on average
in a given country in a random nation
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that overall
declined decreased
the inverse was true for the opposite is the case for
remaining categories other groups
unchanged remained the same
by far the most common a lot more popular
occupied represented
majority most of
family budget how much money a family spends on average
followed closely by right after that
weekly income money earned each week
greatly outstripping much more than
other budgetary concerns different things to spend money on
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
The bar chart d_______s a___________________________k for families i___________________y in the years 1968 and 2018. L___________________________________________________________t while spending for food, fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods d_________d, t_____________________________r the r_________________s, with only household goods u_______________d. Although spending on food was b________________________n in 1968, by 2018 leisure o__________d the m_________y of the f_____________t, f____________________y housing.
In 1968, families spent on average 35% of their w___________e on food, g_______________________________g o______________________s, e___________________________d between 5% and 10%. A____________e, fuel and power was the l_________t at 6%.
By 2018, s______________________s d____________________y. Food r_________________d a still s_____________t 17% of the budget, t____________g housing at 19% (a 9% overall rise) and leisure at 22% (a 13% increase). Transport also d__________d a n____________________h to 14%. Fuel and power, clothing and footware, and personal goods all fell to 4%, 5%, and 4%, r________________y. Household goods was the only e__________e to r______________d, at 7%.
Listening Practice
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This is an IELTS writing task 2 sample answer essay from the new Cambridge IELTS 17 book of past test papers related to a map of an industrial area in the town of Norbiton.
IELTS Cambridge 17 Essay: Map of an Industrial Area (Norbiton)
The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
The above maps detail Norbiton in the present day and plans for future development. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the town will become less industrial and more residential with the construction of facilities for housing, education, shopping, and medical care. This development will occur primarily to the west and north with only a small patch of farmland remaining undisturbed.
In the current town, there is a central roundabout surrounded by factories and a road running from west to east out of Norbiton. In the future, the roundabout will remain but the factories around it will become shops, new housing will line a northwestern road, and there will be a new hospital built to the southeast. The original road going to the east will also now have housing on either side along with a large playground to the north and a school at the easternmost border of the town.
Outside the center of the town, there are also plans for a smaller roundabout in the south which will bisect an existing street. In the north, there will be a bridge over the river and the farmland to the north will be partly replaced with housing, though not to the east where no alterations will be made.
Analysis
1. The above maps detail Norbiton in the present day and plans for future development. 2. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the town will become less industrial and more residential with the construction of facilities for housing, education, shopping, and medical care. 3. This development will occur primarily to the west and north with only a small patch of farmland remaining undisturbed.
Paraphrase what the map shows.
Write a clear overview summarising the differences.
You might need another sentence for your overview.
1. In the current town, there is a central roundabout surrounded by factories and a road running from west to east out of Norbiton. 2. In the future, the roundabout will remain but the factories around it will become shops, new housing will line a northwestern road, and there will be a new hospital built to the southeast. 3. The original road going to the east will also now have housing on either side along with a large playground to the north and a school at the easternmost border of the town.
Begin writing about the first part of the map.
Make sure you compare as much as possible.
Don’t leave anything out!
1. Outside the center of the town, there are also plans for a smaller roundabout in the south which will bisect an existing street. 2. In the north, there will be a bridge over the river and the farmland to the north will be partly replaced with housing, though not to the east where no alterations will be made.
Write about the final, other parts of the map – include everything!
Mention anything that has not changed on the map too.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
The above maps detail Norbiton in the present day and plans for future development. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the town will become less industrial and more residential with the construction of facilities for housing, education, shopping, and medical care. This development will occur primarily to the west and north with only a small patch of farmland remaining undisturbed.
In the current town, there is a central roundabout surrounded by factories and a road running from west to east out of Norbiton. In the future, the roundabout will remain but the factories around it will become shops, new housing will line a northwestern road, and there will be a new hospital built to the southeast. The original road going to the east will also now have housing on either sidealong with a large playground to the north and a school at the easternmost border of the town.
Outside the center of the town, there are also plans for a smaller roundabout in the south which will bisect an existing street. In the north, there will be a bridge over the river and the farmland to the north will be partly replaced with housing, though not to the east where no alterations will be made.
Answers
For extra practice, write an antonym (opposite word) on a piece of paper to help you remember the new vocabulary:
above over
detail show
in the present day today
future development plans for later
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that overall
less industrial not as many factories and businesses
more residential more people living there in homes
construction building of
facilities places
housing places to live
education schools
shopping places to shop
medical care hospitals
occur primarily happens mostly
to the west and north in the right and top part
small patch little piece
farmland agricultural land
remaining undisturbed staying unchanged
In the current town where it is now
central roundabout rotary in the middle
surrounded by on all sides
running from west to east out of going from left to right
line are alongside of
northwestern top left
southeast. bottom right
original how it was
on either side on both sides of
along with and
playground place for kids to play
easternmost border to the east, the furthest point
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
The a______e maps d______l Norbiton i_________________y and plans for f_____________________t. L___________________________________________t the town will become l_______________l and m________________l with the c______________n of f_________s for h_________g, e__________n, s_______g, and m____________e. This development will o____r p_________y t____________________________h with only a s________h of f__________________________d.
I___________________n, there is a c___________________t s_________________y factories and a road r______________________________f Norbiton. In the future, the roundabout will remain but the factories around it will become shops, new housing will l____e a n_____________n road, and there will be a new hospital built to the s_____________t. The o_________l road going to the east will also now have housing o_____________ea___________h a large p____________d to the north and a school at the e__________________r of the town.
O__________e the center of the town, there are also plans for a smaller roundabout in the south which will b_______t an e___________g street. In the north, there will be a b_______e over the river and the farmland to the north will be p____________d with housing, t_________h not to the east where no a___________s will be made.
Listening Practice
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In an era of globalization, some people think that studying abroad is the best way to attain a well-paid job while others believe other options are better.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some today would argue that the rise of globalization necessitates studying abroad if an individual desires a stable career path. In my opinion, though this is an ideal route to success, there are superior methods.
Those who argue in favor of studying abroad make the contention that it allows a person to network and understand the world better. The majority of students who study in other countries are leaving less developed nations to study in more affluent countries. When studying abroad, not only will they be exposed to other cultures and ways of living, but they are also likely to make key connections that can help them in the future. After graduation, they can rely on their network when applying for jobs, starting businesses, or simply seeking advice. Without these advantages, a person will have a more difficult time attaining a well-paying job.
However, the surest pathway to success is to gain experience in any given profession, regardless of the location. A person who is studying and working abroad faces roughly the same obstacles when applying for jobs. If they remain in their country of origin, they will not only understand the local market better but also possess inherent advantages in terms of language, culture, and family support. Many of the most successful entrepreneurs in the world and highly-regarded executives studied and work in their native country. For instance, in Vietnam there are numerous start-up businesses that identify local needs and work to meet demand, oftentimes without the benefit of an education abroad or even an advanced university degree.
In conclusion, most individuals studying abroad are more likely to succeed because of other factors and therefore most individuals should pursue different means of securing stable employment in today’s volatile employment market. Governments should naturally support individuals in these matters.
Analysis
1. Some today would argue that the rise of globalization necessitates studying abroad if an individual desires a stable career path. 2. In my opinion, though this is an ideal route to success, there are superior methods.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those who argue in favor of studying abroad make the contention that it allows a person to network and understand the world better. 2. The majority of students who study in other countries are leaving less developed nations to study in more affluent countries. 3. When studying abroad, not only will they be exposed to other cultures and ways of living, but they are also likely to make key connections that can help them in the future. 4. After graduation, they can rely on their network when applying for jobs, starting businesses, or simply seeking advice. 5. Without these advantages, a person will have a more difficult time attaining a well-paying job.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Explain your main idea.
Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
Keep developing it fully.
Short sentences can make your writing clearer.
1. However, the surest pathway to success is to gain experience in any given profession, regardless of the location. 2. A person who is studying and working abroad faces roughly the same obstacles when applying for jobs. 3. If they remain in their country of origin, they will not only understand the local market better but also possess inherent advantages in terms of language, culture, and family support. 4. Many of the most successful entrepreneurs in the world and highly-regarded executives studied and work in their native country. 5. For instance, in Vietnam there are numerous start-up businesses that identify local needs and work to meet demand, oftentimes without the benefit of an education abroad or even an advanced university degree.
Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
Explain your new main idea.
Include specific details and examples.
Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
Finish the paragraph strong.
1. In conclusion, most individuals studying abroad are more likely to succeed because of other factors and therefore most individuals should pursue different means of securing stable employment in today’s volatile employment market. 2. Governments should naturally support individuals in these matters.
Summarise your main ideas.
Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
Some today would argue that the rise of globalization necessitates studying abroad if an individual desires a stable career path. In my opinion, though this is an ideal route to success, there are superior methods.
Those who argue in favor of studying abroad make the contention that it allows a person to network and understand the world better. The majority of students who study in other countries are leaving less developed nations to study in more affluent countries. When studying abroad, not only will they be exposed to other cultures and ways of living, but they are also likely to make key connections that can help them in the future. After graduation, they can rely on their network when applying for jobs, starting businesses, or simply seeking advice. Without these advantages, a person will have a more difficult time attaining a well-paying job.
However, the surest pathway to success is to gain experience in any given profession, regardless of the location. A person who is studying and working abroad faces roughly the same obstacles when applying for jobs. If they remain in their country of origin, they will not only understand the local market better but also possess inherent advantagesin terms of language, culture, and family support. Many of the most successful entrepreneurs in the world and highly-regarded executives studied and work in their native country. For instance, in Vietnam there are numerous start-up businesses that identify local needs and work to meet demand, oftentimes without the benefit of an education abroad or even an advanced university degree.
In conclusion, most individuals studying abroad are more likely to succeed because of other factors and therefore most individuals should pursue different means of securing stable employment in today’s volatile employment market. Governments should naturally support individuals in these matters.
Answers
For extra practice, write an antonym (opposite word) on a piece of paper to help you remember the new vocabulary:
argue make the point that
rise of globalization more and more countries interacting and influencing each other
necessitates makes it needed to do this
studying abroad learning in other countries
desires hopes to, wants to
stable career path good job
ideal route best way
success achievement
superior methods better ways
those who argue in favor of people who support
contention argument
allows permits
network people that you know
understand the world better learn more about life
The majority of most of
leaving less developed nations going away from poorer countries
affluent countries rich nations
exposed to be able to learn about
ways of living culture
make key connections network
graduation leaving school
rely on depend on
applying for making applications for
seeking advice looking for ideas
Without these advantages not having these benefits
difficult time attaining a well-paying job hard time getting good employment
surest pathway best way
gain experience have time doing things
any given profession a job
regardless of the location wherever you are
faces roughly the same obstacles has more or less similar challenges
remain stay
local market the place where you live
possess inherent advantages has intrinsic benefits
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
Some today would a_____e that the r________________n n____________s s_______________d if an individual d_________s a s_______________h. In my opinion, though this is an i___________e to s________s, there are s______________________s.
T___________________________f studying abroad make the c____________n that it a_______s a person to n__________k and u___________________________r. T________________________f students who study in other countries are l___________________________s to study in more a_______________s. When studying abroad, not only will they be e_____________o other cultures and w________________g, but they are also likely to m_____________________s that can help them in the future. After g_____________n, they can r________n their network when a______________r jobs, starting businesses, or simply s_________________e. W______________________s, a person will have a more d__________________________________________b.
However, the s__________________y to success is to g_____________e in a_______________n, r___________________n. A person who is studying and working abroad f___________________________s when applying for jobs. If they r_______n in their country of origin, they will not only understand the l____________t better but also p__________________si___________f language, culture, and f______________t. Many of the most successful e_____________s in the world and h_____________________s studied and work in their native country. For instance, in Vietnam there are n__________________________s that i_____________________s and work to m____________d, o_____________s w_______________________f an education abroad or e_______________________e.
In conclusion, most individuals studying abroad are more likely to succeed because of other factors and therefore most individuals should p__________________________________________t in t_________________________t. Governments should n______________________t individuals i_____________________s.
Listening Practice
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Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way.
Do you agree or disagree?
Some traditional parents argue that they should be allowed to punish their children physically. I am in strong disagreement with this contention despite the legitimacy of parental rights.
Those in favor of parents being permitted to punish their children physically point out this is an historically ingrained privilege. For thousands of years, parents have had the ability to raise their children according to their own beliefs and values. This includes choices related to culture, religion, diet, and lifestyle. Physical punishment can be theoretically added to this list as it has a massive impact on a child’s psychology and future identity. The support for this practice is that many successful individuals have anecdotally expressed gratitude to parents who hit them when they were younger, believing that it instilled a sense of discipline in them.
However, research has shown that the positive impact in select cases of corporal punishment is greatly outweighed by emotional and psychological abuse. The vast majority of children who were physically abused develop either temporary or lasting side-effects. The most common one is that children are not as confident and willing to express themselves because they consistently fear punishment from a loved one. As they get older, this can become a barrier both for interpersonal relationships and their public persona. Many children who have only learned discipline through physical punishment end up hitting their own children and this can create an ongoing cycle of abuse.
In conclusion, although parents should have the right to raise their children as they see fit, this prerogative must be limited in the case of physical abuse. In most nations, there are already laws banning corporal punishment.
Analysis
1. Some traditional parents argue that they should be allowed to punish their children physically. 2. I am in strong disagreement with this contention despite the legitimacy of parental rights.
Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
Write a clear opinion. Read more about introductions here.
1. Those in favor of parents being permitted to punish their children physically point out this is an historically ingrained privilege. 2. For thousands of years, parents have had the ability to raise their children according to their own beliefs and values. 3. This includes choices related to culture, religion, diet, and lifestyle. 4. Physical punishment can be theoretically added to this list as it has a massive impact on a child’s psychology and future identity. 5. The support for this practice is that many successful individuals have anecdotally expressed gratitude to parents who hit them when they were younger, believing that it instilled a sense of discipline in them.
Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
Explain your main idea.
Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
Keep developing it fully.
Short sentences can make your writing clearer.
1. However, research has shown that the positive impact in select cases of corporal punishment is greatly outweighed by emotional and psychological abuse. 2. The vast majority of children who were physically abused develop either temporary or lasting side-effects. 3. The most common one is that children are not as confident and willing to express themselves because they consistently fear punishment from a loved one. 4. As they get older, this can become a barrier both for interpersonal relationships and their public persona. 5. Many children who have only learned discipline through physical punishment end up hitting their own children and this can create an ongoing cycle of abuse.
Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
Explain your new main idea.
Include specific details and examples.
Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
Finish the paragraph strong.
1. In conclusion, although parents should have the right to raise their children as they see fit, this prerogative must be limited in the case of physical abuse. 2. In most nations, there are already laws banning corporal punishment.
Summarise your main ideas.
Include a final thought. Read more about conclusions here.
Vocabulary
What do the words in bold below mean?Make some notes on paper to aid memory and then check below.
Some traditional parents argue that they should be allowed to punish their children physically. I am in strong disagreement with this contention despite the legitimacy of parental rights.
Those in favor of parents being permitted to punish their children physically point out this is an historically ingrained privilege. For thousands of years, parents have had the ability to raise their children according to their own beliefs and values. This includes choices related to culture, religion, diet, and lifestyle. Physical punishment can be theoretically added to this list as it has a massive impact on a child’s psychology and future identity. The support for this practice is that many successful individuals have anecdotally expressed gratitude to parents who hit them when they were younger, believing that it instilled a sense of discipline in them.
However, research has shown that the positive impact in select cases of corporal punishment is greatly outweighed by emotional and psychological abuse. The vast majority of children who were physically abused develop either temporary or lasting side-effects. The most common one is that children are not as confident and willing to express themselves because they consistently fear punishment from a loved one. As they get older, this can become a barrier both for interpersonal relationships and their public persona. Many children who have only learned discipline through physical punishment end up hitting their own children and this can create an ongoing cycle of abuse.
In conclusion, although parents should have the right to raise their children as they see fit, this prerogative must be limited in the case of physical abuse. In most nations, there are already laws banning corporal punishment.
Answers
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traditional parents conservative moms and dads
argue point out
allowed to permitted to
punish hurt
physically related to the body
I am in strong disagreement with this contention I greatly disagree with this idea
despite regardless of
legitimacy rightness
parental rights what parents should be allowed to do
those in favor of people who support
permitted allowed
point out argue
historically ingrained privilege a right that dates back a long time
raise how a parent nurtures a child
according to because of
beliefs ideas
values what you believe is important
includes choices what you decide
related to concerning
culture the traditions in your country
religion belief in God
diet what you eat
lifestyle how you live
theoretically in theory
added to combined with
list verb of list
massive impact lots of effect
psychology related to the mind
future identity who you are later in life
The support for this practice people who are in favor of this
anecdotally based on stories
expressed gratitude to given thanks to
hit beat
believing having faith in
instilled put into someone
sense of discipline feeling of controlling yourself
however despite
positive impact good effect
in select cases in certain situations
corporal punishment hurting the body, physical punishment
outweighed stronger than
emotional related to feelings
psychological abuse hurting the mind
vast majority most of
physically abused hurting the body
temporary not lasting
lasting side-effects the results last a long time
confident good self-esteem
willing to express can act how they want
consistently steadily
loved one parent
barrier obstacle
interpersonal relationships friends and partners
public persona at work, outside the home
learned discipline through became more strong-willed
I recommend getting a pencil and piece of paper because that aids memory. Then write down the missing vocabulary from my sample answer in your notebook:
Some t________________________s a______e that they should be a______________o p_______h their children p__________y. I________________________________________________n d______e the l_____________y of p______________s.
T________________f parents being p__________d to punish their children physically p________t this is an h_______________________________________e. For thousands of years, parents have had the ability to r______e their children a______________o their own b_______s and v_______s. This i___________________________________e, r_________n, d____t, and l__________e. Physical punishment can be t___________________y a_________o this l___t as it has a m______________t on a child’s p_______________y and f____________y. T__________________________e is that many successful individuals have a_____________y e________________________o parents who h__t them when they were younger, b________g that it i_________d a s____________________e in them.
H__________r, research has shown that the p______________t i___________________s of c________________t is greatly o______________d by e______________l and p__________________e. The v_____________y of children who were p___________________d develop either t____________y or l____________________s. The most common one is that children are not as c__________t and w____________________s themselves because they c____________y fear punishment from a l_____________e. As they get older, this can become a b________r both for i________________________________s and their p________________a. Many children who have only l__________________________h physical punishment e________p hitting their own children and this can create an o_______________e of abuse.
In conclusion, although parents should have the right to r______e their children as they s_________t, this p____________e must be l_____________________________f physical abuse. In most nations, there are already laws b___________g corporal punishment.
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