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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Others think they should begin after 7 years of age.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many feel that children ought to commence formal schooling from a very young age while others feel classes should start after the age of 7. In my opinion, though there are social benefits to early schooling, many of these can be replicated outside the classroom and there are emotional advantages to attending school later.
There are legitimate reasons for young children to enter school related to socializing. This can be best illustrated by the case of home-schooled children who often have underdeveloped social skills that can persist into adulthood. In contrast, children who are active members of a social group from a young age are far more likely to develop outgoing, positive ways of engaging with others. As they progress through normal childhood developmental stages and become less egocentric, the presence of other children, and teachers to some extent, has enormous benefits. However, parents can reproduce these advantages by ensuring their children have time to socialize with neighborhood friends.
Furthermore, entering school after the age of 7 can serve as a long-term boon for emotional health. When students begin formal schooling, they necessarily feel stressed not only from competition with other children but also due to the burden of homework and grades. If children remain home longer, they will form stronger familial bonds that will encourage healthy relationships later in life. Research has shown that the early years are essential in dictating how a child will develop interpersonally. A child who received adequate love and attention is considerably more likely to feel secure and establish healthy relationships with friends and family in adulthood. Academics can always be strengthened later but this is not always true for unseen emotional work.
In conclusion, despite the social benefits of schooling for young children, the emotional ramifications of remaining home in a supportive environment are more important. School administrators should consider this question carefully.
1. Many feel that children ought to commence formal schooling from a very young age while others feel classes should start after the age of 7. 2. In my opinion, though there are social benefits to early schooling, many of these can be replicated outside the classroom and there are emotional advantages to attending school later.
1. There are legitimate reasons for young children to enter school related to socializing. 2. This can be best illustrated by the case of home-schooled children who often have underdeveloped social skills that can persist into adulthood. 3. In contrast, children who are active members of a social group from a young age are far more likely to develop outgoing, positive ways of engaging with others. 4. As they progress through normal childhood developmental stages and become less egocentric, the presence of other children, and teachers to some extent, has enormous benefits. 5. However, parents can reproduce these advantages by ensuring their children have time to socialize with neighborhood friends.
1. Furthermore, entering school after the age of 7 can serve as a long-term boon for emotional health. 2. When students begin formal schooling, they necessarily feel stressed not only from competition with other children but also due to the burden of homework and grades. 3. If children remain home longer, they will form stronger familial bonds that will encourage healthy relationships later in life. 4. Research has shown that the early years are essential in dictating how a child will develop interpersonally. 5. A child who received adequate love and attention is considerably more likely to feel secure and establish healthy relationships with friends and family in adulthood. 6. Academics can always be strengthened later but this is not always true for unseen emotional work.
1. In conclusion, despite the social benefits of schooling for young children, the emotional ramifications of remaining home in a supportive environment are more important. 2. School administrators should consider this question carefully.
Many feel that children ought to commence formal schooling from a very young age while others feel classes should start after the age of 7. In my opinion, though there are social benefits to early schooling, many of these can be replicated outside the classroom and there are emotional advantages to attending school later.
There are legitimate reasons for young children to enter school related to socializing. This can be best illustrated by the case of home-schooled children who often have underdeveloped social skills that can persist into adulthood. In contrast, children who are active members of a social group from a young age are far more likely to develop outgoing, positive ways of engaging with others. As they progress through normal childhood developmental stages and become less egocentric, the presence of other children, and teachers to some extent, has enormous benefits. However, parents can reproduce these advantages by ensuring their children have time to socialize with neighborhood friends.
Furthermore, entering school after the age of 7 can serve as a long-term boon for emotional health. When students begin formal schooling, they necessarily feel stressed not only from competition with other children but also due to the burden of homework and grades. If children remain home longer, they will form stronger familial bonds that will encourage healthy relationships later in life. Research has shown that the early years are essential in dictating how a child will develop interpersonally. A child who received adequate love and attention is considerably more likely to feel secure and establish healthy relationships with friends and family in adulthood. Academics can always be strengthened later but this is not always true for unseen emotional work.
In conclusion, despite the social benefits of schooling for young children, the emotional ramifications of remaining home in a supportive environment are more important. School administrators should consider this question carefully.
ought to should
commence start
formal schooling real school
social benefits advantages for communicating with others
early schooling first years of school
replicated outside the classroom reproduced not in school
emotional advantages benefits for one’s emotions
attending going to
legitimate reasons good causes
enter school go to class
socializing interacting with others
best illustrated by the case of clearest example of this is
home-schooled children kids who learn at home
underdeveloped not grown
persist continue
adulthood as you get older, no longer a child
in contrast however
active members participants
social group peer groups
far more likely much greater chance
outgoing friendly
positive ways good methods
engaging with others talking to people
progress improving
normal childhood developmental stages how kids grow up cognitively
egocentric caring only about yourself
presence being around them
enormous benefits big advantages
reproduce replicate
ensuring making sure
neighborhood friends kids living nearby
furthermore also
serve as a long-term boon help in the future
emotional health how you feel
necessarily definitely
stressed anxious
competition competing with others
burden extra weight to carry
remain stay the same
form stronger familial bonds get along with family better
encourage healthy relationships form good bonds
later in life as they get older
research has shown that studies indicate
dictating determining
interpersonally between people
received adequate love got enough care
attention looking after
considerably more likely much better chance
secure confident
establish healthy relationships have good bonds
academics learning in school
strengthened made stronger
unseen emotional work not immediately obvious mental health growith
ramifications implications
supportive environment loving family
school administrators people in charge of schools
consider think about
carefully with care, not recklessly
Many feel that children ought to commence formal schooling from a very young age while others feel classes should start after the age of 7. In my opinion, though there are social benefits to early schooling, many of these can be replicated outside the classroom and there are emotional advantages to attending school later.
There are legitimate reasons for young children to enter school related to socializing. This can be best illustrated by the case of home-schooled children who often have underdeveloped social skills that can persist into adulthood. In contrast, children who are active members of a social group from a young age are far more likely to develop outgoing, positive ways of engaging with others. As they progress through normal childhood developmental stages and become less egocentric, the presence of other children, and teachers to some extent, has enormous benefits. However, parents can reproduce these advantages by ensuring their children have time to socialize with neighborhood friends.
Furthermore, entering school after the age of 7 can serve as a long-term boon for emotional health. When students begin formal schooling, they necessarily feel stressed not only from competition with other children but also due to the burden of homework and grades. If children remain home longer, they will form stronger familial bonds that will encourage healthy relationships later in life. Research has shown that the early years are essential in dictating how a child will develop interpersonally. A child who received adequate love and attention is considerably more likely to feel secure and establish healthy relationships with friends and family in adulthood. Academics can always be strengthened later but this is not always true for unseen emotional work.
In conclusion, despite the social benefits of schooling for young children, the emotional ramifications of remaining home in a supportive environment are more important. School administrators should consider this question carefully.
School
Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays.
What are the reasons for this?
What can be done to solve this problem?
The map describes changes to a city since 1950. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the city has expanded to become considerably more residential and accessible, with the notable additions of a long lake and nearby business district.
In 1950, the town’s population was 20,000 and it has increased tenfold to 200,000. Previously, there was a limited area for homes, all to the north of the major road running east to west. At present, the residential area has greatly grown in all directions and there are now additional major roads in the southern half of the city.
Moreover, the narrow river running through the town has been dammed to create a large lake that stretches from the western to eastern edge of the residential area. The business district which was confined to the center of the map is now larger and includes the northern and southern shores of the lake. The bridge over the river is now over the lake and there is another bridge near the dam in the east. Finally, there is presently a second government building to the south and the airport located to the east has more than doubled in size.
1. The map describes changes to a city since 1950. 2. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the city has expanded to become considerably more residential and accessible, with the notable additions of a long lake and nearby business district.
1. In 1950, the town’s population was 20,000 and it has increased tenfold to 200,000. 2. Previously, there was a limited area for homes, all to the north of the major road running east to west. 3. At present, the residential area has greatly grown in all directions and there are now additional major roads in the southern half of the city.
1. Moreover, the narrow river running through the town has been dammed to create a large lake that stretches from the western to eastern edge of the residential area. 2. The business district which was confined to the center of the map is now larger and includes the northern and southern shores of the lake. 3. The bridge over the river is now over the lake and there is another bridge near the dam in the east. 4. Finally, there is presently a second government building to the south and the airport located to the east has more than doubled in size.
The map describes changes to a city since 1950. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the city has expanded to become considerably more residential and accessible, with the notable additions of a long lake and nearby business district.
In 1950, the town’s population was 20,000 and it has increased tenfold to 200,000. Previously, there was a limited area for homes, all to the north of the major road running east to west. At present, the residential area has greatly grown in all directions and there are now additional major roads in the southern half of the city.
Moreover, the narrow river running through the town has been dammed to create a large lake that stretches from the western to eastern edge of the residential area. The business district which was confined to the center of the map is now larger and includes the northern and southern shores of the lake. The bridge over the river is now over the lake and there is another bridge near the dam in the east. Finally, there is presently a second government building to the south and the airport located to the east has more than doubled in size.
describes shows
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that overall
expanded grown
considerably more residential many more houses
accessible can be reached
notable additions important new areas
lake large body of water, pond
nearby business district place for offices, work around there
tenfold 10x, 1000%, ten times as large
previously before
limited area not a large place
to the north of located north of
major big
running east to west going from the right to left
at present right now
residential where people live
greatly grown increased a lot
all directions every way
additional more
southern half of the city lower part
moreover additionally
narrow not wide
dammed a blockage in the river to build up water
stretches goes all the way
edge outer point of
confined kept within certain bounds
shores beaches, edges
bridge road over water or land
finally in the end
presently right now
located to the east to the right side
doubled 2x, 200%
Practice saying the words below using this tip with Google voice dictation:
dɪsˈkraɪbz
ˈlʊkɪŋ frɒm ən ˈəʊvərɔːl pəˈspɛktɪv, ɪt ɪz ˈrɛdɪli əˈpærənt ðæt
ɪksˈpændɪd
kənˈsɪdərəbli mɔː ˌrɛzɪˈdɛnʃəl
əkˈsɛsəbl
ˈnəʊtəbl əˈdɪʃ(ə)nz
leɪk
ˈnɪəbaɪ ˈbɪznɪs ˈdɪstrɪkt
ˈtenfəʊld
ˈpriːviəsli
ˈlɪmɪtɪd ˈeərɪə
tuː ðə nɔːθ ɒv
ˈmeɪʤə
ˈrʌnɪŋ iːst tuː wɛst
æt ˈprɛznt
ˌrɛzɪˈdɛnʃəl
ˈgreɪtli grəʊn
ɔːl dɪˈrɛkʃənz
əˈdɪʃənl
ˈsʌðən hɑːf ɒv ðə ˈsɪti
mɔːˈrəʊvə
ˈnærəʊ
ˈdæmid
ˈstrɛʧɪz
ɛʤ
kənˈfaɪnd
ʃɔːz
brɪʤ
ˈfaɪnəli
ˈprɛzntli
ləʊˈkeɪtɪd tuː ði iːst
ˈdʌbld
Remember and fill in the blanks:
The map d___________s changes to a city since 1950. L______________________________________________________t the city has e______________d to become c___________________________l and a______________e, with the n___________________s of a long l_____e and n_______________________t.
In 1950, the town’s population was 20,000 and it has increased t___________d to 200,000. P______________y, there was a l______________a for homes, all t______________f the m_____r road r__________________t. A_____________t, the r_________________l area has g____________n in a_____________s and there are now a_____________l major roads in the s_______________________y.
M_______________r, the n_________w river running through the town has been d________d to create a large lake that s___________s from the western to eastern e____e of the residential area. The business district which was c_________d to the center of the map is now larger and includes the northern and southern s________s of the lake. The b_____e over the river is now over the lake and there is another bridge near the dam in the east. F________y, there is p___________y a second government building to the south and the airport l_________________t has more than d__________d in size.
Listen to the related topic below and practice with these activities:
Read more and use these ideas to practice:
https://www.wired.com/2015/09/design-issue-future-of-cities/
Practice with the following related questions from the real IELTS speaking exam:
Cities
Practice with the related process below and then check with my sample answer:
The process details the steps to make cement and then how cement is used as an ingredient in concrete manufacturing. Overall, the process requires initial mixing and chemical transformation of the raw materials clay and limestone, followed by bagging of the finished cement, before it is then combined with other materials to form concrete.
Initially, limestone and clay are collected and crushed together into a fine powder before being placed in a cylindrical mixer. The mixture is then connected to a rotating heater which transforms the powder and it is then ground a second time and sealed in bags as cement.
In order to form concrete, cement is next combined with water, sand, and gravel in a concrete mixer. The proportions for each ingredient are 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and finally 50% gravel (which is small stones).
1. The process details the steps to make cement and then how cement is used as an ingredient in concrete manufacturing. 2. Overall, the process requires initial mixing and chemical transformation of the raw materials clay and limestone, followed by bagging of the finished cement, before it is then combined with other materials to form concrete.
1. Initially, limestone and clay are collected and crushed together into a fine powder before being placed in a cylindrical mixer. 2. The mixture is then connected to a rotating heater which transforms the powder and it is then ground a second time and sealed in bags as cement.
1. In order to form concrete, cement is next combined with water, sand, and gravel in a concrete mixer. 2. The proportions for each ingredient are 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and finally 50% gravel (which is small stones).
The process details the steps to make cement and then how cement is used as an ingredient in concrete manufacturing. Overall, the process requires initial mixing and chemical transformation of the raw materials clay and limestone, followed by bagging of the finished cement, before it is then combined with other materials to form concrete.
Initially, limestone and clay are collected and crushed together into a fine powder before being placed in a cylindrical mixer. The mixture is then connected to a rotating heater which transforms the powder and it is then ground a second time and sealed in bags as cement.
In order to form concrete, cement is next combined with water, sand, and gravel in a concrete mixer. The proportions for each ingredient are 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and finally 50% gravel (which is small stones).
details shows
steps stages
cement a material for construction
ingredient part of
concrete manufacturing the making of concrete
overall in general
requires needs
initial first
mixing combining
chemical transformation changing to a new substance
raw materials basic substances
followed by after that
bagging put into bags
before preceding
combined put together
form make
initially at first
crushed together broken apart and combined
fine powder light dust
placed put into
cylindrical mixer device for mixing shaped like a cylinder
mixture combination
connected joined
rotating heater device for heating that turns
ground crushed
second time another time
sealed locked into
cement building material
in order to so that
next then
concrete mixer
proportions percentages
stones little rocks
Practice saying the words below using this tip with Google voice dictation:
ˈdiːteɪlz
stɛps
sɪˈmɛnt
ɪnˈgriːdiənt
ˈkɒnkriːt ˌmænjʊˈfækʧərɪŋ
ˈəʊvərɔːl
rɪˈkwaɪəz
ɪˈnɪʃəl
ˈmɪksɪŋ
ˈkɛmɪkəl ˌtrænsfəˈmeɪʃən
rɔː məˈtɪərɪəlz
ˈfɒləʊd baɪ
ˈbægɪŋ
bɪˈfɔː
kəmˈbaɪnd
fɔːm
ɪˈnɪʃəli
krʌʃt təˈgɛðə
faɪn ˈpaʊdə
pleɪst
sɪˈlɪndrɪkəl ˈmɪksə
ˈmɪksʧə
kəˈnɛktɪd
rəʊˈteɪtɪŋ ˈhiːtə
graʊnd
ˈsɛkənd taɪm
siːld
sɪˈmɛnt
ɪn ˈɔːdə tuː
nɛkst
ˈkɒnkriːt ˈmɪksə
prəˈpɔːʃənz
stəʊnz
Remember and fill in the blanks:
The process d_________s the s_____s to make c______t and then how cement is used as an i___________t in c__________________g. O_________l, the process r_______s i_______l m_______g and c_______________________n of the r____________________s clay and limestone, f_____________y b____________g of the finished cement, b_________e it is then c____________d with other materials to f_____m concrete.
I___________y, limestone and clay are collected and c________________r into a f______________r before being p________d in a c___________________r. The m________e is then c______________d to a r________________r which transforms the powder and it is then g_________d a s_______________e and s__________d in bags as c__________t.
I_____________o form concrete, cement is n____t combined with water, sand, and gravel in a c___________r. The p_______________s for each ingredient are 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and finally 50% gravel (which is small s________s).
Listen to the related topic below and practice with these activities:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NM_F1t-aG9s
Read more and use these ideas to practice:
Practice with the following related questions from the real IELTS speaking exam:
Architecture
Practice with the related process below and then check with my sample answer:
Here are some band 6 IELTS essays for writing task 2 that I have marked and corrected for past students.
*I update this post all the time so check back to see new band 6 corrections!
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Sorry about the formatting on the post – it was a little tricky, you can always download the samples too!
Dave